Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap kısa ve anlaşılır ama dilbilgisi hataları ve belirsiz ifadeler var. Konu cümlesiyle doğrudan başlamışsınız; ancak destekleyici detaylar dağınık ve tamamlanmamış. Bağlaçlar ve daha doğru fiil formları kullanarak ifadeyi netleştirin. Örneğin: "He makes a lot of jokes in class" yerine "He makes a lot of jokes" ve örnek verirken cümlenizi tamamlayın. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrar ve dolgu kelimeleri (uh, I have) azaltın. Öneriler: 1) Cümleleri doğru zaman ve özne-fiil uyumuyla kurun. 2) Bir veya iki destekleyici detay verin (kişilik, nasıl yardımcı olduğu). 3) Konuşma akışını sorgulayıcı doldurmalardan arındırın.

例: Yes. My math teacher is my favorite because he makes lots of jokes and creates a friendly classroom atmosphere. He is very kind and patient, and he explains difficult topics with simple examples, which helped me understand algebra much better.

提案: Cevap açık bir görüş içeriyor fakat dilbilgisi, kelime seçimi ve mantıksal yapı zayıf. "I don't like learn something for students" gibi ifadeler yanlış. Neden istemediğinizi sebeplere dayandırarak daha net açıklayın ve bağlaçlarla destekleyin. Öneriler: 1) 'teach' ve 'learn' kelimelerinin doğru kullanımına dikkat edin (öğretmek = teach). 2) Sebep verirken net örnekler kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. 3) Cümleleri basit ama doğru biçimde kurun.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because I don't enjoy explaining things to others. For instance, when students ask me for help with problems, I find it difficult to explain solutions clearly, so I prefer a different job.

提案: Cevap hatalı dilbilgisi ve tekrar içeriyor; ayrıca ifadeler kaba ve net değil. "I don't I don't know she" gibi karışık kısımları düzeltin, ve görüşünüzü saygılı bir dille, nedenlerle destekleyerek açıklayın. Öneriler: 1) Kişi hakkında olumsuz konuşurken açıklayıcı nedenler verin (davranış örnekleri). 2) Cümleleri düzgün bir özne-fiil yapısıyla kurun. 3) Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini çıkarın.

例: Yes. I remember my middle school English teacher because she was quite strict and often impatient with students. For example, she rarely gave positive feedback and would criticize mistakes harshly, which made learning less enjoyable.

提案: Cevap temel fikri veriyor ama karmaşık ve dilbilgisi hataları çok. "Far living first from my sea" gibi ifadeler anlaşılmaz. Duygusal nedenleri kısaca ve nazikçe belirtin, ayrıca mantıklı sebepler sıralayın. Öneriler: 1) Coğrafi açıklamaları basitçe söyleyin (she lives far away). 2) Kişisel duyguyu belirtirken nazik olun (I wasn't very close to her). 3) Cümleleri iki-üç kısa cümleyle netleştirin.

例: No, we don't keep in touch. She retired and now lives far away, and we weren't very close when I was at school, so we didn't stay in contact afterward.

提案: Cevap duyguyu aktarıyor fakat düzensiz ve anlaşılması güç. Olayı net bir şekilde anlatın: ne oldu, öğretmen nasıl yardım etti ve bunun sonucu ne oldu. Bağlaçlarla mantıklı bir akış kurun ve gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın. Öneriler: 1) Olay anlatımında zaman uyumuna dikkat edin (past tense for past events). 2) Öğretmenin ne yaptığına dair somut örnek verin (çözüme yardımcı oldu, motive etti). 3) Sonuç olarak hissettiklerinizi açıklayın.

例: Once I was very upset about a difficult problem, and my math teacher noticed. He calmly explained the steps, gave me a simpler example to practice, and encouraged me, which made me feel much more confident and even laugh again.

提案: Cevap net ama tekrarlı ve dilbilgisi hatalı. Karşılaştırma yaparken 'prefer X to Y' yapısını kullanın ve nedenleri kısa ve spesifik verin. Ayrıca tekrarları ve hatalı artikelleri düzeltin. Öneriler: 1) 'prefer X to Y' kalıbını kullanın. 2) Nedenleri sebep-sonuç ilişkisiyle belirtin (daha ilgili, daha iyi öğrettiler). 3) Kısa, mantıklı bir açıklama ekleyin.

例: No, I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because high school teachers were more supportive and explained subjects more clearly, so I learned better from them.

× My math teacher is my favorite teacher because he is makes much uh joke in the class and he is a very kind person.

✓ My math teacher is my favorite teacher because he makes a lot of jokes in class and he is a very kind person.

The verb 'make' requires third-person singular form 'makes' for 'he', but the original added an extra 'is' ('he is makes') which is incorrect. 'Much joke' is uncountable/incorrect here; use 'a lot of jokes' or 'many jokes'. Also 'in the class' is better as 'in class'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'is', use 'makes', and change 'much joke' to 'a lot of jokes'.

× For example, I don't solve uh, some.

✓ For example, I couldn't solve some problems.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper verb tense and object. 'I don't solve some' is ungrammatical. Use past ability 'couldn't solve' or present perfect 'couldn't solve' depending on context. Also add the object 'problems'. Suggestion: specify what couldn't be solved and use correct tense and verb.

× I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I think I don't like uh, learn something, Learn something for students.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I don't like teaching students.

Redundant and incorrect phrasing 'I think I don't like learn something' mixes verb forms. Use the noun 'teaching' after 'like' (or the gerund): 'like teaching'. Also capitalize properly and avoid repetition. Suggestion: use 'I don't like teaching students'.

× For example, when a students come to me for solving problems, solving problems, I don't solve it.

✓ For example, when students come to me to solve problems, I can't solve them.

Errors: 'a students' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'students'. 'for solving problems' is awkward; use 'to solve problems'. 'I don't solve it' is unclear; use 'I can't solve them' to match plural 'problems'. Suggestion: correct article-number agreement and use appropriate infinitive and pronoun.

× I don't I don't know she because she is very rude person and teacher.

✓ I don't know her because she is a very rude person and teacher.

Pronoun case error: use object pronoun 'her' after 'know', not 'she'. Also add article 'a' before 'very rude person'. Suggestion: use correct object pronoun and include the article.

× I think it's not to be a successful English teacher.

✓ I don't think she could be a successful English teacher.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect infinitive 'it's not to be'. Better: 'I don't think she could be a successful English teacher' or 'I don't think she would be a successful English teacher.' Suggestion: use appropriate modal or negative opinion structure.

× No we don't meet each other because she retired and far living first from my sea and I don't like she so we don't meet together and chat.

✓ No, we don't meet each other because she retired and lives far from my home by the sea, and I don't like her, so we don't meet and chat.

Multiple issues: pronoun object 'she' should be 'her'. 'far living first from my sea' is incorrect word order and choice; use 'lives far from my home by the sea' or 'lives far away'. Add commas for clarity and remove redundant 'together'. Suggestion: correct pronoun, verb form 'lives', and natural phrase for distance.

× One time I am very unhappy. I'm my math teacher.

✓ One time I was very unhappy. My math teacher...

Tense mismatch: 'One time' refers to a past event, so use past tense 'was' not present 'am'. 'I'm my math teacher' is incorrect; should be 'My math teacher...' Suggestion: use past tense for past events and proper sentence fragments.

× He, he, he's my favorite teacher. Uh, he, he told very mature and I, uh, love. I very laugh.

✓ He is my favorite teacher. He talked very maturely, and I love him. He makes me laugh a lot.

Multiple errors: 'told very mature' is incorrect; likely 'spoke very maturely' or 'gave mature advice' — use adverb 'maturely' with verb 'spoke' or rephrase. 'I love' needs an object 'him'. 'I very laugh' is ungrammatical; use 'He makes me laugh a lot.' Suggestion: use adverbs correctly, include objects, and natural phrasing for causing laughter.

× No, I don't. I prefer high school teachers than my primary primary school teacher because I don't like primary school teacher because we not like each other.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer high school teachers to my primary school teachers because I don't like my primary school teachers; we did not like each other.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B'. Also ensure plural agreement: 'primary school teacher' vs 'teachers'. 'we not like each other' needs auxiliary past 'did not'. Suggestion: use 'prefer...to', correct plural forms, and proper past negative structure.