Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and reduce hesitation; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and tense errors (use past tense consistently for past experiences).

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school English tutor because she was dependable when I struggled with difficult grammar points. For example, she spent extra time after class explaining complex tenses, and she also supported me during personal problems, which helped me stay motivated.

提案: Clarify reasoning and correct grammar; give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Replace informal contractions and fix word order. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don't plan to be a teacher. Although I am studying to teach English and Turkish, I feel the job requires not only instruction but also significant emotional support, and I don't want that responsibility. Therefore, I prefer to pursue a different career.

提案: Remove fillers and be specific about why the experience was memorable. Use past tense consistently and one or two supporting details with linking words to explain the impact.

例: Yes. I remember a high school tutor who taught Catholic literature because she was extremely strict. As a result, many students were afraid to speak up in class, which made the lessons tense rather than engaging.

提案: Correct the contradictory sentence and be precise: state clearly whether you keep in touch, give one reason with a linking word, and avoid confusing phrases. Use present perfect/simple consistently.

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers. I'm currently swamped with my studies and work, so I don't have time to contact them. However, I still occasionally keep in contact with some classmates.

提案: Be more concise and natural: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples of help using linking words. Remove direct quotes unless necessary and correct tense and phrasing.

例: She was always patient when I made grammar and vocabulary mistakes, and she encouraged me with phrases like “You can do it.” For example, she corrected my essays line by line and praised my progress, which kept me motivated to improve.

提案: Organize answer with a clear comparison: state preference, then give two contrasting, specific reasons using linking words (e.g., however, whereas). Avoid fillers and be concise.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were kind and friendly, which made learning enjoyable. In contrast, high school teachers were more demanding and strict, which made me feel stressed and less confident.

× Yes, I used to have my favorite teacher and she was my English tutor because, you know, she was really reliable in hard situations when I didn't understand English at all.

✓ Yes, I had a favorite teacher; she was my English tutor because she was really reliable in difficult situations when I didn't understand English at all.

The student uses 'used to have' which is acceptable but 'had' is clearer and more natural here; 'used to' often emphasizes a habitual state. Also 'hard situations' is unnatural; 'difficult situations' is the correct adjective. Combining clauses with a semicolon or breaking into two sentences improves clarity.

× And when I have some, when I had some kind of personal problems, I could always count on her.

✓ When I had personal problems, I could always count on her.

There is a tense inconsistency: 'I have some' (present) and 'I had' (past). Since the rest of the narrative is in the past, use past tense consistently. Remove redundant phrasing 'some kind of' for conciseness.

× Although my major is future English and Turkish teacher, I don't wanna work in that sphere because I believe that teachers tasks not on are not only teach students but also support them.

✓ Although my major is to become an English and Turkish teacher in the future, I don't want to work in that field because I believe that teachers' tasks are not only to teach students but also to support them.

Several errors: 'future English and Turkish teacher' needs rephrasing to 'to become an English and Turkish teacher in the future'. Colloquial 'wanna' should be 'want to'. 'Sphere' is better as 'field'. Possessive plural 'teachers'' is required for 'teachers' tasks'. Word order and missing infinitives: 'are not only to teach... but also to support'.

× I don't think so. Although my major is future English and Turkish teacher, I don't wanna work in that sphere because I believe that teachers tasks not on are not only teach students but also support them.

✓ I don't think so. Although my major is to become an English and Turkish teacher in the future, I don't want to work in that field because I believe that teachers' duties are not only to teach students but also to support them.

Repetition of sentence corrected for grammatical verbs and nouns: use 'duties' for clarity, 'are not only to teach... but also to support' fixes the parallel infinitive structure. Use consistent tense and formal vocabulary.

× Actually, it wasn't good experience.

✓ Actually, it wasn't a good experience.

Missing article 'a' before the countable noun 'good experience'. This is an article error but also tied to sentence correctness; adding 'a' makes the noun phrase grammatical.

× During my high school period, I used to have a tutor, uh, who used to teach Catholic literature.

✓ During high school, I had a tutor who taught Catholic literature.

'Used to have' and 'used to teach' are grammatically okay but redundant; simpler past tense 'had' and 'taught' is more natural. Also 'high school period' is unnatural; use 'high school'. This uses past simple rather than 'used to' for clarity.

× I would say I forgot about them because these days I'm really swamped with my studies and jobs.

✓ I would say I have forgotten about them because these days I'm really swamped with my studies and my job.

'Forgot' (simple past) conflicts with 'these days' (present). Use present perfect 'have forgotten' to indicate a state continuing to present. 'Jobs' likely should be singular 'my job' unless multiple jobs exist; make possessive consistent.

× That's why I don't have much time to be in touch with them.

✓ That's why I don't have much time to keep in touch with them.

'Be in touch with' is not wrong, but 'keep in touch with' better expresses maintaining contact over time. Suggest using 'keep in touch with' for natural collocation.

× I'm even in touch with my classmates.

✓ I'm even still in touch with my classmates.

The original sentence likely intended to say the opposite (not in touch). If the student meant they are not in touch, correction: 'I'm not even in touch with my classmates.' If they did mean they are in touch, add 'still' for clarity. Here we preserved likely intended meaning and improved adverb placement.

× She tended to be always patient when I made a lot of mistakes related to grammar, vocabulary.

✓ She was always patient when I made a lot of mistakes with grammar and vocabulary.

'Tended to be always' is awkward; 'was always' is natural. 'Related to' is fine but 'with' is more idiomatic. Use past simple 'was' consistent with narrative.

× You can do it. You will be future English teacher.

✓ You can do it. You will be an English teacher in the future.

Missing article 'an' before 'English teacher' and awkward word order. Add 'in the future' to make the future time reference clear and grammatical.

× Definitely, yeah, because in primary school we were under 16 and teachers used to be very, umm, kind and smiley.

✓ Definitely. In primary school we were under 16, and the teachers used to be very kind and smiley.

Add definite article 'the' before 'teachers' when referring to the specific group at the student's school; this improves reference. Also split into clearer sentences and punctuation. 'Smiley' is informal but acceptable; placement of commas adjusted.

× However, when it comes to high school teachers, I don't know why they were really demanding, uh, which affected me negatively.

✓ However, when it comes to high school teachers, they were really demanding, which affected me negatively.

The phrase 'I don't know why' is unnecessary and creates a sentence fragment/confusion. Removing it yields a clear main clause. Also ensure tense consistency: 'were' matches past reference.