Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be consistent with gender references, keep sentences concise and directly answer with clear supporting details. Use a topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting statements (when, why, and an example). Avoid repetition and contradictory pronouns.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my English teacher from high school. I first met her in fifth grade, and she stood out because she taught me practical problem‑solving and responsibility. For example, she gave group projects that taught me to organise tasks and meet deadlines.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence stating whether you want to be a teacher, then give 1–2 concrete reasons with linking words. Avoid vague praise and mixed pronouns. Keep to 2–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to become a teacher in the future because teaching helped shape my values. For example, my teacher’s charismatic style inspired me to help others learn, and I want to pass on problem‑solving skills to younger students.

提案: Focus on professional reasons you remember the teacher rather than physical descriptions. Use one clear reason and a short example. Avoid repetition and emotional or inappropriate phrases.

例: Yes. I still remember my English teacher because she supported me with difficult assignments and encouraged me to improve. For example, she spent extra time explaining grammar and reviewed my drafts until I understood the corrections.

提案: Use natural phrasing (e.g., "in touch with") and give one specific detail about how you keep contact. Keep sentences short and avoid excessive emotional statements.

例: Yes, I am still in touch with one of my primary school teachers. She attended my wedding recently, and we exchange messages a few times a year to share family news and memories.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence describing a specific way the teacher helped, then add a concrete example or result. Use consistent pronouns and avoid repeating general praise.

例: She helped me by teaching me strategies to manage assignment anxiety and improve my writing. For example, she showed me how to break tasks into smaller steps and gave feedback on drafts, which reduced my stress and improved my grades.

提案: Start with a clear comparison sentence (Yes/No and why), then give one specific reason and brief example. Avoid unclear time references like "because I am in childhood"—say "because they supported me when I was young."

例: Yes. I prefer my primary school teacher because she supported and encouraged me when I was young. For instance, she helped me tackle difficult tasks by giving step‑by‑step guidance and praised my effort, which boosted my confidence.

× In fact, he taught me English in my high high school.

✓ In fact, she taught me English in my high school.

The student used the wrong pronoun 'he' though the teacher is later referred to as 'her' and 'she'; use 'she'. Also 'high high school' is redundant so reduce to 'high school'. Use consistent gender pronouns.

× I first met her in my 5th standard.

✓ I first met her in my 5th grade.

The phrase '5th standard' is nonstandard in many varieties of English; '5th grade' is the more natural collocation in US/modern contexts. This is an issue with word choice rather than grammar form.

× She was special to me because he taught me how to overcome the problems under responsibility and problem solving.

✓ She was special to me because she taught me how to take responsibility and solve problems.

Pronoun 'he' mismatches 'She'. Also 'overcome the problems under responsibility and problem solving' is awkward. Use 'take responsibility' and 'solve problems' for correct collocations and clearer meaning.

× Yes, I want a teacher in my future because he taught me everything in my life so I want still in my life the teacher she is gorgeous under charismatic personality he taught me how to overcome the.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because she taught me many things in my life; she is gorgeous and has a charismatic personality, and she taught me how to overcome difficulties.

Multiple errors: verb phrase 'want a teacher' should be 'want to be a teacher' (sentence structure). Pronoun inconsistency (he/she). Awkward phrasing 'in my future' -> 'in the future'. Missing noun forms and articles adjusted. Sentence fragmented; corrected to coherent clauses and appropriate vocabulary ('many things', 'has a charismatic personality', 'overcome difficulties').

× Yes, I have a teacher from my past that I still remember because he taught me English and helped helped me in my assignment.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my past whom I still remember because she taught me English and helped me with my assignments.

Use 'whom' or 'that' as object (whom is more formal) and correct pronoun 'she'. Remove repeated 'helped'. Use 'helped me with my assignments' for correct preposition and plural 'assignments' if multiple tasks are implied.

× She is very beautiful and gorgeous everyday I admire her and I want to touch in my teacher still now.

✓ She is very beautiful and gorgeous; every day I admire her, and I still want to keep in touch with my teacher.

Run-on sentence fixed with punctuation. 'Everyday' should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). 'I want to touch in my teacher' is incorrect collocation; correct phrase is 'keep in touch with my teacher'.

× Yes, I still touch in my primary school teacher, in fact she attend my marriage recently and I love my teacher everyday.

✓ Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher. In fact, she attended my wedding recently, and I love my teacher every day.

Correct verb phrase is 'be in touch with' not 'touch in'. Tense: 'attend' should be past 'attended' for a recent event. 'Marriage' as event is usually 'wedding'. 'Everyday' -> 'every day'.

× Then I admire my teacher each and every day.

✓ I admire my teacher each and every day.

Starting with 'Then' is unnecessary and awkward here; removing it yields a clear, natural sentence.

× It is very beautiful memories together and I love teach.

✓ We have very beautiful memories together and I love to teach.

'It is very beautiful memories' is ungrammatical—use 'We have very beautiful memories'. 'I love teach' requires the infinitive 'to teach' or a gerund depending on meaning; here 'to teach' fits.

× The way she taught English and he helped me in my assignment and I have anxiety in my assignment.

✓ She taught me English and helped me with my assignments when I had anxiety about them.

Pronoun inconsistency (she/he). Combine clauses to clarify timing: use past 'had' for anxiety in past. Use 'helped me with my assignments' for correct preposition and plural.

× He taught me how to handle that.

✓ She taught me how to handle it.

Pronoun should match the teacher's gender 'she'. Replace vague 'that' with 'it' for clarity.

× For example, he is my inspiration and he is she is a charismatic personality, so I love my teacher.

✓ For example, she is my inspiration and has a charismatic personality, so I love my teacher.

Remove pronoun confusion (he/she). Use 'has a charismatic personality' rather than 'is a charismatic personality'.

× He help she helped me very well and inspired me every situation.

✓ She helped me very well and inspired me in every situation.

Use past tense 'helped' for consistency and correct pronoun 'she'. Add preposition 'in' for 'in every situation'.

× He taught me how to handle difficult task and ** *** helped me in my assignment.

✓ She taught me how to handle difficult tasks and helped me with my assignments.

Pronoun should be 'she'. 'Difficult task' should be plural 'difficult tasks' or 'a difficult task'. Use 'helped me with my assignments' for correct preposition and plurality.