Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, combine short sentences into a clear topic sentence and add a specific example of what she taught. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes. My favourite teacher is Aksa, who teaches psychology; she is very kind and shows us practical ways to improve ourselves. For example, she taught a breathing technique to reduce stress, which really helped me before exams.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give a concise reason, then provide a specific brief example without repeating phrases. Soften strong language like "I really get angry" to sound more natural.

例: No, I wouldn’t like to be a teacher; I prefer to be a businessman because I find teaching demanding and I lack patience. For instance, I get frustrated when I have to explain practical tasks repeatedly, so a business role suits me better.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence then qualify it briefly with a reason or one small detail to make the answer more informative. Avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: Honestly, I can't remember any particular teacher clearly because we moved schools often when I was young, so I lost long-term contact with my past teachers.

提案: Answer directly then explain briefly with a specific reason. Correct grammar ("didn't have"). Use one linking phrase like "because" or "so" to connect reasons.

例: No, I’m not. I didn't have a long-term connection with my primary teachers because my family moved several times, so we lost contact.

提案: Organise into a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific actions she took and one concrete result. Avoid repeating phrases like "relax" twice and use linking words such as "for example" or "as a result".

例: She helped me by explaining difficult topics step by step and teaching relaxation techniques. For example, when I struggled with a theory, she showed me a study method and breathing exercises; as a result, my grades improved and I felt less anxious in exams.

提案: Answer directly and briefly, then give a short reason. Avoid repeating earlier statements; instead summarise concisely.

例: No, I can't say I prefer them because I don't remember or keep in touch with my primary school teachers, so I have no basis for comparison.

× Her name is Aksa. She teaches psychology and she is really kind and she she teaches us about how we can improve ourselves.

✓ Her name is Aksa. She teaches psychology, she is really kind, and she teaches us how we can improve ourselves.

This sentence includes a repeated word ('she she') and poor sentence structure (run-on). Error falls under sentence structure errors: remove the duplicate 'she' and join clauses with appropriate conjunctions and punctuation. Suggestion: combine related ideas with commas and 'and' and omit unnecessary words like 'about' before 'how'. Keep clause order: subject + verb + object. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Definitely not. I would prefer to be a businessman because I find teaching quite hard and I don't have the patience to teach others.

✓ Definitely not. I would prefer to be a businessman because I find teaching quite hard, and I don't have the patience to teach others.

Main issue is missing comma before coordinating conjunction joining two independent clauses (sentence structure). Also the original is acceptable but punctuation improves clarity. No modal misuse. Keep 'I would prefer' to express future preference. Grammar problem type ID:4

× For example, I really get angry when I need to tell others how you can handle this or that.

✓ For example, I really get angry when I need to tell others how they can handle this or that.

The sentence mixes first-person perspective ('I') with second-person 'you', causing pronoun inconsistency. Use 'they' (or 'them') to refer back to 'others'. Also preserves present tense 'get' and 'need'. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent with subject. Grammar problem type ID:12

× To be honest, I don't have the memory of any teacher that I really remember or I really like.

✓ To be honest, I don't have any memories of a teacher that I really remember or really like.

'I don't have the memory of' is awkward; use plural 'memories' or 'I can't remember any teacher'. Also avoid repeating 'I really'. Suggestion: 'I don't have any memories of a teacher I remember or like.' This fixes sentence structure and word choice. Grammar problem type ID:26

× No, as I told you before, I do not remember any of my teachers from the primary school because I didn't had a long term connection with them.

✓ No, as I told you before, I do not remember any of my primary school teachers because I didn't have a long-term connection with them.

Incorrect past tense form: after auxiliary 'did' the base form 'have' must be used, not 'had'. Also 'primary school teachers' is more natural than 'teachers from the primary school'. Add hyphen in 'long-term'. Suggestion: use 'didn't have' for negative past. Grammar problem type ID:5

× There was this scenario when I was really stuck in my psychology subject and she told me to relax and guided me step by step and how I can perform better.

✓ There was a time when I was really stuck in my psychology course; she told me to relax, guided me step by step, and explained how I could perform better.

Problems: 'scenario' is awkward — 'a time' is better. The sentence mixes verb forms: 'told me to relax and guided me' is okay but 'and how I can perform better' is a fragment. Use parallel structure and correct modal: 'explained how I could perform better' fits past context. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and ensure each conjunction connects full clauses. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Furthermore, she also told me to relax myself and how I can handle myself in pressure.

✓ Furthermore, she also told me to relax and how I could handle pressure.

'Relax myself' and 'handle myself in pressure' are unnatural. 'Relax' without 'myself' is correct. Use 'handle pressure' common collocation. Change 'can' to 'could' to match past reporting. Suggestion: use natural collocations and maintain tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:12

× No, as I told you before, I don't remember them and I lost contact with them, so I can't really tell you if I like my primary school teachers or not.

✓ No, as I told you before, I don't remember them and I lost contact with them, so I can't really say whether I liked my primary school teachers or not.

Tense inconsistency: 'don't remember' (present) vs 'I lost contact' (past) is acceptable, but when concluding about past feelings, use past 'liked'. Also 'tell you' is okay but 'say whether' is more natural. Suggestion: match the tense of the final verb to the time frame being discussed (past teachers -> 'liked'). Grammar problem type ID:6}]}{