Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and article usage, reduce repetition, and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my high school physical education teacher because she was very kind and explained exercises clearly. For example, she corrected our techniques one-on-one and organised fun but useful fitness drills, which made learning effective.

提案: Give a clear present-tense response and a concise reason. Correct grammar (use 'don't'/'wouldn't need' etc.), avoid repetition, and use a linking word to connect reason.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. Although I respect teachers, I don't think I have the patience required, and I prefer a job with more flexible hours.

提案: Answer directly, avoid fillers, and provide one specific detail about why you remember them (method, effect, or incident). Use correct noun phrases (e.g., 'a programming teacher').

例: Yes. I still remember my programming teacher because she explained difficult concepts step by step and gave practical assignments, which helped me understand coding clearly.

提案: Short answers are acceptable, but add a brief reason or clarification to make it more informative. Use a linking word if you add an explanation.

例: No, I'm not. I lost contact after moving cities, so we haven't kept in touch, although I appreciate what they taught me.

提案: Be consistent with pronouns and tense, avoid repetition, and give concrete examples of how they helped (methods, outcomes). Use linking words to organize points.

例: She helped us by explaining lessons carefully and checking our understanding. For instance, she used quizzes and group work to make sure everyone could explain the topic in their own words.

提案: Provide a clear comparison: state your preference and support it with a brief reason. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid unnecessary repetition.

例: Not really. I don't prefer primary teachers over high school teachers because both groups had kind and competent teachers; however, high school teachers helped me develop study skills more effectively.

× When I was in high school, I do have favorite teachers, my teachers in physical, in education, who is very kind to the to the students and teach us properly.

✓ When I was in high school, I had favorite teachers, my physical education teachers, who were very kind to the students and taught us properly.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'When I was in high school' requires past tense (ID 6). 'do have' is present and should be 'had'. 'physical, in education' is incorrect word order and form; use 'physical education teachers'. Subject-verb agreement and past tense for plural 'teachers' requires 'were' and 'taught'. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past tense and correct noun phrase order.

× No, I didn't want to be a teacher in the future because I would have long patience and also I believe that teacher. Needs to be a long patience person.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I would need a lot of patience and I believe that a teacher needs to be a patient person.

The first clause discusses a future desire, so present tense 'don't want' fits (ID 5). 'Would have long patience' is incorrect: use 'would need a lot of patience' or 'require a lot of patience'. 'teacher. Needs' is a sentence fragment and incorrect capitalization; combine into one sentence and use 'a teacher needs to be a patient person'. Also replace 'long patience' with 'a lot of patience' or 'patience'. Suggestion: match tense to meaning and use correct noun/adjective forms.

× Yes, I have. I remember my teacher, you know. Programming to a subject, she is very kind, teaches us, uh, the right way and uh, yeah, that's all.

✓ Yes, I do. I remember my programming teacher; she was very kind and taught us the right way.

Mix of tenses and awkward phrasing. 'I have' is unclear; use 'I do' for short positive answer in present (ID 10). 'Programming to a subject' is incorrect word order—use 'programming teacher' or 'teacher of programming'. Because memory refers to the past, use past tense 'she was' and 'taught' (also covers past tense issue). Remove filler words. Suggestion: choose clear noun phrases and consistent past tense when recalling someone.

× No, actually.

✓ No, I'm not.

As a standalone answer to 'Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers?' the reply 'No, actually.' lacks a clear verb and is informal (ID 23). A complete response is 'No, I'm not' or 'No, I am not.' Suggestion: use a full verb phrase to make the response grammatically complete.

× The way that he loved her students in the way he discussed the lessons carefully and and make sure that the students understand the discussions and also.

✓ She showed she loved her students by discussing the lessons carefully and making sure that the students understood the material.

Pronoun confusion: 'he loved her students' mixes genders (ID 12). Likely teacher is female from context, so use 'she' consistently. Verb forms need correction: 'make sure' should be gerund 'making sure' to match 'by' construction, and past tense 'understood' fits past context (also relates to past tense). The original ends abruptly with 'and also'; remove or complete thought. Suggestion: keep pronouns consistent and use parallel verb forms.

× Actually, no. But there are, there are many, a lot of teachers who is very kind and very great actually.

✓ Actually, no. But there are many teachers who are very kind and great.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teachers who is' should be 'teachers who are' because 'teachers' is plural (ID 27). Phrase is redundant: 'there are many, a lot of' is repetitive. Simplify to 'there are many teachers'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject and avoid redundancy.