Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, reduce redundancy, and add one specific concise example. Use linking words for clarity.

例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because she was very patient and explained difficult topics clearly. For example, she spent extra time after class helping me improve my essay structure before an important exam, which helped raise my score.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, fix small grammatical errors, and use linking words to show contrast. Keep it concise and add a specific reason or brief example to support your plan.

例: No, not as my main career. I plan to work in marketing because I enjoy consumer research and creative campaigns. However, I might do weekend tutoring to help students and to gain some teaching experience.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct verb agreement. Use linking words to connect points (for example, ‘because’ or ‘and’). Be slightly more specific about what tasks or feedback you received.

例: Yes, I remember my high school English teacher clearly because she was patient and supportive. She gave us short speaking tasks every week and provided feedback that helped me correct specific pronunciation mistakes and gain confidence.

提案: Make grammar and word choices correct (plural/singular, tenses). Be concise and complete the final example sentence. Use linking words like ‘for example’ properly and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I keep in touch with one of my primary school teachers. We message on social media and sometimes call. She is very supportive and recently congratulated me on my new job, offering useful advice about starting in a new role.

提案: Open with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, and avoid awkward phrasing. Use linking words (‘for example’, ‘as a result’) and be specific about the methods used and their effect on you.

例: The main way my favorite teacher helped me was by explaining difficult ideas simply, which made learning less intimidating. For example, she gave extra examples and step-by-step notes after class, so I could review the material and understand it better.

提案: Use a clear topic sentence and keep subjects consistent (singular/plural). Correct verb forms and use linking words to explain reasons. Provide one concise specific example with correct tense and plurality.

例: I think I liked my primary school teachers more because they were patient and made lessons fun, so I always looked forward to school. For example, my first-grade teacher used games and songs to teach reading, which helped me enjoy learning.

× Yet I have a favorite teacher, my high school English teacher.

✓ I do have a favorite teacher: my high school English teacher.

The original sentence begins with 'Yet' which is inappropriate here and makes the sentence awkward. Use a simple affirmative structure 'I do have' or 'I have' and a colon to introduce the teacher. This fixes sentence flow and clarity.

× She was very patient, explain difficult topics clearly, and even spent extra time helping me improving my writing before an important exam which really grades my score.

✓ She was very patient, explained difficult topics clearly, and even spent extra time helping me improve my writing before an important exam, which really improved my score.

Multiple issues: verbs in the list must be parallel and in past tense to match 'was' (use 'explained'), 'helping me improving' is incorrect—after 'help' use the base form 'improve', and 'which really grades my score' is incorrect word choice and tense; use 'which really improved my score.' Fix parallelism and verb forms.

× I want a career in marketing so I plan to study in marketing and work in that field.

✓ I want a career in marketing, so I plan to study marketing and work in that field.

'Study in marketing' is incorrect preposition usage; use 'study marketing.' Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Tense is fine but preposition needed correction.

× However, I might do some tutoring on weekends to help student and to gain teaching experience.

✓ However, I might do some tutoring on weekends to help students and to gain teaching experience.

'Student' should be plural 'students' when referring to learners in general. The determiner 'some' pairs with plural noun. This is a singular/plural error.

× Her regular feedback help me correct specific pronunciation mistakes, and gave confidence when speaking.

✓ Her regular feedback helped me correct specific pronunciation mistakes and gave me confidence when speaking.

Verb forms must match past tense context: 'help' should be 'helped.' Also add 'me' after 'gave' for clarity. Keep parallel past tense verbs.

× Yes, I still keep in touch with one of my primary school teacher.

✓ Yes, I still keep in touch with one of my primary school teachers.

When referring to 'one of my' followed by the group, the noun must be plural: 'teachers.' This fixes the singular/plural mismatch.

× We message on social media and sometime call.

✓ We message on social media and sometimes call.

Use the adverb 'sometimes' (not 'sometime') to indicate occasional action. 'Sometime' means 'at an unspecified time' so the adverb form with -s is correct here.

× She's very supportive and keeps up with my study and career.

✓ She's very supportive and keeps up with my studies and career.

'Study' should be plural 'studies' when referring to one's academic work in general. Use the plural noun to match meaning.

× For example, she recently congratulated me on my new job and offer some helpful advice about starting in a new.

✓ For example, she recently congratulated me on my new job and offered some helpful advice about starting a new one.

'Offer' should be past tense 'offered' to match 'congratulated.' The phrase 'starting in a new' is incomplete and wrong preposition; use 'starting a new one' to refer to a new job. Fix tense and phrase.

× Well I think the main way my favorite teacher helped me was by explaining difficult ideas in a simple way and this make learning less scary.

✓ Well, I think the main way my favorite teacher helped me was by explaining difficult ideas in a simple way, and this made learning less scary.

Tense mismatch: use past tense 'made' to agree with 'helped.' Also add commas for clarity. 'This make' is incorrect form; change to 'this made.'

× For example she gave extra examples and were step by step notes after class so I understood the topic better.

✓ For example, she gave extra examples and step-by-step notes after class, so I understood the topic better.

'Were step by step notes' is incorrect; 'were' does not agree with the noun. Use noun phrase 'step-by-step notes.' Also add hyphens and commas for clarity and flow.

× Well I think I like my primary school teacher more.

✓ Well, I think I like my primary school teachers more.

When comparing 'primary school teachers' in general, use plural 'teachers' to match the later description. Original singular conflicts with general statements about multiple teachers.

× They were very patient and friendly and they make lessons fun so I always look forward to school.

✓ They were very patient and friendly, and they made lessons fun, so I always looked forward to school.

Tense should be consistent in past context: change 'make' to 'made' and 'look' to 'looked.' Add commas for clarity.

× For example, my first grade teacher use game and song to teach reading and that help me enjoy learning.

✓ For example, my first-grade teacher used games and songs to teach reading, and that helped me enjoy learning.

Use past tense 'used' to match context. 'Game and song' should be plural 'games and songs.' 'That help' must be past tense 'helped.' Hyphenate 'first-grade.'