Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give two concise supporting details (what they taught you and why they mattered). Use correct tenses and simpler grammar to avoid confusion. Limit to 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'also'.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my secondary school math teacher. He taught me not only mathematical concepts but also problem-solving skills, which improved my confidence. I respect him like a second father because he always supported me.

提案: Answer directly with a clear statement of your career preference, then give specific reasons. Use correct verb forms and linking phrases such as 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really — I sometimes consider teaching, but my real dream is to become a doctor. I prefer medicine because I am very interested in biology and chemistry and I want to help people.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and when he taught you. Then add one or two specific details (duration, subjects, teaching style) using linking words like 'for' and 'because'. Correct grammar: use past tense and simpler sentence structures.

例: Yes, I still remember my secondary school math teacher who taught me in grades 8 and 9. He helped me understand difficult topics and used practical examples, which made learning easier for me.

提案: Respond directly about current contact, then add a brief specific memory. Use correct phrases ('I don't remember much about...') and avoid repetition. Keep sentences clear and grammatical, and use linking words like 'however' or 'but'.

例: No, I am not still in touch with them. I don't remember many names, but I clearly remember my grade 4 teacher, Mr. Ding, because he was very funny and made our classes enjoyable.

提案: Give a clear example of help and explain the outcome. Use past tense properly and link actions and results with words like 'so' or 'as a result'. Be specific about the support (advice, tutoring) and your feeling about the result.

例: He helped me when I failed an exam in grade 9 by encouraging me to retake it and giving me extra guidance. As a result I retook the test and passed, which made me very happy and more confident.

提案: Answer directly by comparing preferences, then give a specific reason. Use clearer comparative language ('more than') and correct grammar. Provide one concrete reason (e.g., learned more, closer relationship) and keep it concise.

例: I prefer my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because I learned more advanced subjects and formed closer relationships with them during those years.

× Yes of course mom.

✓ Yes, of course, ma'am.

The student used 'mom' which is inappropriate in this context; the examiner is not the student's mother. Use a respectful form like 'ma'am' or omit the vocative. Also add commas for direct address.

× I have very excited in my math teacher when I say secondary school.

✓ I was very excited about my math teacher when I was in secondary school.

The original mixes present perfect and adjectives incorrectly. Use past tense 'was' for feelings in the past and 'about' as the correct preposition. Also use 'when I was in secondary school' for time expression.

× He had teach me a lot from math knowledge as well as the right skill because he I see me at the second father in my life.

✓ He taught me a lot of math knowledge as well as the right skills because I saw him as a second father in my life.

Use simple past 'taught' rather than 'had teach'. Use 'a lot of' and plural 'skills'. Replace incorrect word order 'he I see me' with 'I saw him' and 'as a second father' for the intended meaning.

× I sometimes think I would be to become a teacher, but I, yes, my real dream it become a doctor.

✓ I sometimes think I might become a teacher, but my real dream is to become a doctor.

Use modal 'might' for possibility. Remove extra 'be' before 'to become'. Use 'is' for present-state 'my real dream is to become'.

× You know, I have very interest in medical knowledge, chemicals or biology.

✓ You know, I am very interested in medical knowledge, chemistry, and biology.

Use adjective 'interested' with 'am'. Use 'chemistry' not 'chemicals' when referring to the field. Use 'and' to list subjects.

× So I really would rather than to become a doctor.

✓ So I would really prefer to become a doctor.

Incorrect comparative structure 'would rather than to'. Use 'would prefer to' or 'would rather' with infinitive: 'would rather become' or 'would prefer to become'.

× Hmm well I think as I mentioned is the secondary school math teacher he will teach me for two years is grade 8 and grade 9.

✓ Hmm, well, I think, as I mentioned, it is the secondary school math teacher who taught me for two years, in grade 8 and grade 9.

Use 'it is' to identify and 'who taught me' for the relative clause. Use past tense 'taught' because the event is in the past. Add commas for clarity.

× I very love him he teach me a lot as well as sub skill and his the ability the to take teaching ability for him is very good.

✓ I really loved him; he taught me a lot and helped me develop sub-skills. His teaching ability is very good.

Use past 'loved' and 'taught'. Rephrase to separate ideas into clear sentences. 'Sub-skills' is more natural; fix word order for 'His teaching ability is very good'.

× But to be honest, I don't have much remember about my primary school friends and teacher.

✓ But to be honest, I don't remember much about my primary school friends and teachers.

Use the verb 'remember' rather than noun 'remember'. Use plural 'teachers' to match 'friends and teachers'.

× I have a little memories about their name.

✓ I have few memories of their names.

Use 'few' (not 'a little') for countable plural 'memories' and plural 'names'. Use preposition 'of' after 'memories'.

× But one teacher I still remember today is my grade 4 teacher.

✓ One teacher I still remember is my grade 4 teacher.

Remove unnecessary 'today' which is redundant. Sentence is otherwise fine with minor punctuation.

× He is very funny. His name is Ding in his yes he very funny.

✓ He is very funny. His name is Ding, and yes, he is very funny.

Add linking words 'and yes, he is' to form a grammatical sentence. Include commas for clarity and use 'is' for the verb.

× From today I still remember in green 9 I have failed an exam and my teacher had suggest me to retract it.

✓ I still remember that in grade 9 I failed an exam and my teacher suggested that I retake it.

Use 'grade' not 'green'. Use simple past 'failed' and 'suggested'. Use 'retake' for taking the exam again; change structure to 'suggested that I retake it'.

× At first I very concerned about it the size decision but I have retake and I passed the exam.

✓ At first I was very concerned about the decision, but I retook the exam and I passed.

Use past 'was' for past feelings. 'Retook' is the past tense of 'retake'. 'the size decision' is unclear; assume 'the decision'.

× I rarely happy with it.

✓ I was really happy about it.

Use 'was' for past tense and 'really' not 'rarely' (which means seldom). 'Happy about it' is the correct phrase.

× As I mentioned before, I don't have much memory to my primary school teacher except Mr. Dean because of most sin of humor.

✓ As I mentioned before, I don't have many memories of my primary school teachers except Mr. Dean because of his sense of humor.

Use 'many memories of' for countable plural. 'Teachers' plural. Replace 'most sin of humor' with 'his sense of humor'.

× So I think I will like most about my high school teacher because I have more cognitive in high school.

✓ So I think I like my high school teachers more because I learned more in high school.

Use present 'like' or 'liked' depending on meaning; here general preference 'like'. Replace 'have more cognitive' with 'learned more' to express gaining knowledge. Make 'teachers' plural to match context.