Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., 'teacher' repeated), and use linking words for clarity. Correct tense and preposition errors (e.g., 'help me with study materials', 'favorite teacher of all time'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: My favorite teacher was Ms. Tania, my high school social studies teacher. She motivated me and helped me with study materials during exams, which improved my confidence. Because she was kind and supportive, I felt close to her and admired her teaching.

提案: Give a focused topic sentence and use more natural phrasing. Avoid repeating 'I think' and tighten sentences. Add a brief reason with linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

例: Yes, I would like to become an early childhood educator because I enjoy working with young children. I plan to study early childhood education and create a warm, engaging classroom. I believe teaching young children would be rewarding and full of memorable moments.

提案: Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Start with a clear statement, then give two specific supporting details using linking words like 'for example' or 'she often'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'asks me', 'suggests').

例: Yes, I still remember Ms. Tania, my high school social studies teacher. She and I talk several times a week, and she often asks about my future plans and gives helpful advice. Because of her support, I feel very close to her.

提案: Answer the question directly (primary school teachers vs high school). Your response confuses primary and high school. Use one or two sentences to say whether you are in touch, then give a specific reason and one example. Fix grammar and avoid trailing words.

例: No, I'm not really in touch with my primary school teachers. I keep in contact with one high school teacher, Miss Tania, because she is supportive and still teaches at my school.

提案: Provide clearer, more specific examples of help and avoid vague phrases like 'intuit person'. Use linking words (e.g., 'for example', 'because') and correct grammar ('I used to ask her for help rather than other students'). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Ms. Tania helped me by explaining difficult topics and giving extra worksheets when I struggled with social studies. For example, before exams she reviewed key ideas with me and gave study tips that improved my grades. Because of her support, I felt more confident in class.

提案: Answer directly and briefly. State your opinion and give one specific reason, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid vague or repetitive phrases and correct small errors.

例: I don't want to compare them because both primary and high school teachers taught me well. For instance, primary teachers helped me build basic skills, while high school teachers prepared me for exams, so I appreciate them both equally.

× She always used to motivate me and cheer me up during my test or my exams and help me in with the study materials.

✓ She always used to motivate me and cheer me up during my tests or exams and help me with the study materials.

Use plural 'tests' and remove the extra preposition 'in' before 'with'. 'Test or my exams' is unnatural; 'tests or exams' is correct. Also possessive 'my' before both is unnecessary when listing, but keeping 'my' is acceptable; here plural 'tests' matches 'exams'.

× And I think that she was really close to me so that's why I like her the most.

✓ And I think that she was really close to me, so that's why I liked her the most.

The rest of the description is in past tense about a past teacher, so 'like' should be past 'liked' for tense consistency. Also add a comma before 'so'.

× I would love to pursue my course of early childhood education, to be an early childhood educator.

✓ I would love to pursue a course in early childhood education and become an early childhood educator.

Use indefinite article 'a course' and preposition 'in' with 'education'. 'To be' is awkward; 'become' fits better. This corrects article and preposition usage and improves natural phrasing.

× And I think that there will be memories that I would cherish all time with little ones.

✓ And I think that I will cherish memories with little ones all the time.

Use future simple 'will cherish' instead of 'would cherish' for a likely future; 'all time' should be 'all the time'. Rearranged for natural word order.

× Yes, as I've previously mentioned before that there was a teacher named Tanya of social studies from high school that I still remember and I even talked to her multiple times in a week and she always cares about me and ask me about my future plans and always suggest me the best out of all the things that I'm doubtful about and I think I love her the most.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned before, there was a social studies teacher in high school named Tanya whom I still remember. I even talked to her several times a week; she always cared about me, asked me about my future plans, and always suggested the best options when I was doubtful. I think I loved her the most.

Many tense inconsistencies: use past tense ('mentioned', 'was', 'talked', 'cared', 'asked', 'suggested') for past events. Use 'whom' as the object of the clause, 'several times a week' is more natural than 'multiple times in a week'. Correct verb forms to match subject and past timeframe.

× To be honest, no really I don't really talk much to my high school teachers that as I was always afraid of all of them as they were so strict and disciplined.

✓ To be honest, no, I don't really talk much to my high school teachers because I was always afraid of them since they were so strict and disciplined.

Remove redundant 'really' and fix conjunction: use 'because' to introduce the reason. 'That as' is incorrect. Replace 'all of them' with 'them' for clarity. Maintain past tense 'was' and 'were' for past feelings and characteristics.

× But the teacher I still talk and I'm still in touch with is Miss Tanya.

✓ But the teacher I still talk to and am still in touch with is Miss Tanya.

Correct word order and verb forms: 'talk to' requires 'to', and 'I'm still in touch with' can shorten to 'am still in touch with' to avoid repeating 'I'.

× She is really great teacher and she still teaches in my high school and she is very disciplined and very respected and.

✓ She is a really great teacher; she still teaches at my high school and is very disciplined and well respected.

Add article 'a' before 'really great teacher'. Use 'at' for 'teaches at my high school'. 'Well respected' is the correct adverb-adjective combination. Remove trailing 'and' and streamline the sentence.

× My high school teacher Miss Tania helped me with my course material when I was a child.

✓ My high school teacher, Miss Tania, helped me with my course materials when I was a child.

Use plural 'materials' for multiple items. Add commas around the name as an appositive. 'Helped' is correct past tense.

× She always used to motivate me and as I was an intuit person and she always used to make me feel happy and stay smiling all the time.

✓ She always used to motivate me. Since I was an intuitive person, she always made me feel happy and kept me smiling all the time.

'Intuit' is incorrect; use 'intuitive'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Use past tense 'made' and 'kept' to match 'used to'.

× Instead of asking for help from other child, I used to ask her for help.

✓ Instead of asking for help from another child, I used to ask her for help.

Use 'another' with singular count noun 'child' or use plural 'other children'. 'Other child' is ungrammatical.

× Well, I haven't really thought about it yet as all of the teachers I've met till now were awesome and they were really disciplined and well reputed and well renowned in the whole school and the TR and they taught the children really well.

✓ Well, I haven't really thought about it yet, as all of the teachers I've met so far have been awesome; they were really disciplined and well reputed and renowned throughout the school, and they taught the children very well.

Mixed present perfect ('I've met') with past 'were' is acceptable, but 'so far' fits better than 'till now'. Use 'have been' to match 'I've met'. 'Well reputed' and 'renowned' are redundant; keep both if desired. 'the TR' is unclear and likely unnecessary; remove or clarify. Use 'very well' instead of 'really well' for formality.

× I don't really wanna compare my teachers from primary and high school.

✓ I don't really want to compare my primary and high school teachers.

Use 'want to' instead of colloquial 'wanna' in formal responses. Use 'primary and high school teachers' rather than 'teachers from primary and high school' for conciseness and natural word order.