Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, correct names/words, use past/present tense consistently, and add one specific example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences. Use linking words like because or for example.

例: Yes, my favorite teacher is Miyake. She always encourages me when I feel sad and supports my academic goals, for example by writing recommendation letters for my graduate school applications.

提案: Be concise and avoid filler words. Respond directly with a clear reason and one supporting detail. Correct grammar (I don't want to be a teacher; teaching is difficult). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like because or therefore.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I currently work as a nurse and I find teaching very demanding. Therefore, I prefer to pursue other careers that suit my skills better.

提案: Clarify who you mean and correct unclear words. Start with a direct statement naming the teacher, then give one specific reason and example why you remember them. Use linking words like because and for example.

例: Yes, I still remember Professor Miyake from university because she was very supportive. For example, she always gave me detailed feedback on my essays and encouraged me during difficult times.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical explanation with one or two supporting points. Use past tense when referring to the past and linking words like because or when. Avoid unnecessary hesitations and be specific about distance or communication reasons.

例: No, I am not still in touch with my primary school teachers because I moved far away from my hometown. Also, when I was a child phones and the internet were not widely available, so it was difficult to keep contact.

提案: Answer directly with a clear structure: state one main way they helped you and provide a concrete example. Use present or past simple consistently and linking words like for example or such as. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: During university, my favorite teacher helped me by listening carefully to my opinions and giving constructive advice. For example, she reviewed my research ideas and guided me through the proposal-writing process, which made me feel supported.

提案: Provide a clear comparison and correct grammar. Start with a topic sentence stating which you prefer, then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid confusing phrases and keep sentences short and coherent.

例: No, I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because they helped me with personal issues and advising me about future studies. For instance, my high school counselor helped me choose subjects that suited my career plans.

× Yes, I have a favorite Peaches named Miyake.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher named Miyake.

The student used 'Peaches' instead of the pronoun/noun 'teacher'. This is likely a wrong word choice rather than a pronoun form; it functions like incorrect use of a noun/pronoun. Replace the incorrect word with the correct noun 'teacher' to make the sentence meaningful.

× This is because she always encourages me when I felt sad and support me, like writing or my reference for Graduate School.

✓ This is because she always encourages me when I feel sad and supports me, for example by helping with writing or providing a reference for graduate school.

Mixed tenses and verb agreement: 'felt' is past while 'always encourages' is present; also 'support me' should agree with singular subject 'she' as 'supports'. Use present tense 'feel' to match 'always encourages' and add clearer phrasing 'for example by helping with writing or providing a reference for graduate school' for natural English.

× No, I don't wanna be a teachers in the future.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future.

Plural 'teachers' is incorrect after 'be a' which requires a singular noun. Also use the standard contraction 'don't want to' instead of 'don't wanna' in formal speech. Change 'teachers' to 'teacher'.

× Uh, now, uh, in the, in fact, I work as a nurse and, uh, I won't continue to work as a nurse in the future.

✓ I am working as a nurse now, but I will not continue to work as a nurse in the future.

Use present continuous 'am working' for current ongoing action and 'will not continue' for future intention. Original mixes awkward fillers and tense forms; clarity requires consistent tense usage.

× And, uh, I think, umm, for me, teacher teaching, uh, someone is a very difficult.

✓ I think teaching someone is very difficult for me.

Original has incorrect word order and unnecessary fillers. Correct structure places subject 'teaching someone' followed by predicate 'is very difficult for me'. Remove extraneous words for clarity.

× Yes, uh, as I mentioned, book, uh, professors milking is, uh, important teachers because and uh, maybe I can't forget her because, uh, she is very helpful for me and the support always.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, Professor Miyake is an important teacher, and I cannot forget her because she is always very helpful and supportive to me.

Many word choice and pronoun problems: 'professors milking' seems incorrect; likely meant a professor's name. 'The support always' is ungrammatical; use 'always very helpful and supportive to me'. Fix pronoun 'her' placement and ensure subject-verb agreement and natural word order.

× No, I don't, uh, this is because, uh, I live in, it's located far from my primary school and, uh, when I was a, uh, preliminary school students, the phone, uh, not developed, uh, we can contact with.

✓ No, I don't. This is because I live far from my primary school, and when I was a primary school student, phones were not developed so we could not contact each other.

Preposition and plurality issues: 'live in, it's located far from' is awkward; use 'live far from'. 'Preliminary school students' should be 'primary school student' (singular to match 'I'). 'We can contact with' is incorrect; use 'contact each other' or 'contact them'. Also use past tense 'were not developed' to match time frame.

× Or during my University School days, oh, the, my teachers are listen to my opinions carefully and do not blame me.

✓ During my university days, my teachers listened to my opinions carefully and did not blame me.

Tense inconsistency: 'are listen' is incorrect; past tense 'listened' and 'did not blame' match 'during my university days' which is a past period. Also simplify 'University School days' to 'university days'.

× And uh, I can, uh, I can the consult with her, uh, safely.

✓ And I could consult with her safely.

Incorrect article/word order and modal usage. 'I can the consult with her' is ungrammatical. Use past modal 'could' to match past context and correct word order 'consult with her'.

× No, I don't. I will. I like how my high school teachers in primary school teachers, because my high school teachers all help me out about loving problems and they're studying in the futures.

✓ No, I don't. I prefer my high school teachers to my primary school teachers because my high school teachers helped me with relationship problems and with studying for the future.

The original is ungrammatical and has confusing structure. 'I will. I like how my high school teachers in primary school teachers' is nonsensical. Use 'prefer X to Y' for comparisons. 'Loving problems' should be 'relationship problems' and 'they're studying in the futures' should be 'helped me with studying for the future' or 'prepared me for the future'. Ensure past tense 'helped' if referring to past support.