Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant but has minor grammar and clarity issues and a bit of redundancy. Make the topic sentence clearer, correct grammar (e.g. "family teacher" → unclear, use "favorite"), and shorten or combine sentences to avoid repetition. Add one specific example with a linking word to make it more coherent.

例: My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher because she made learning fun. For example, she often played clips from the TV show Friends and asked us to discuss the dialogues, which helped us learn vocabulary in context. As a result, I felt more confident speaking English and enjoyed the lessons.

提案: Good structure and clear reasons. Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and use clearer linking words to connect ideas. Reduce repetition ("I am not completely sure" and "to be honest"). Provide one concise example and finish with a concluding sentence.

例: I'm not sure I want to be a teacher full time because, although I love helping students grow, I'm uncertain about my patience. For example, it's very rewarding when a student finally understands a difficult topic and gains confidence. However, because teaching requires constant patience, I'm hesitant about committing to it as a career.

提案: Answer is personal and engaging but contains grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Make the topic sentence precise, fix tense and word choice (e.g. "a lot of teacher" → "many teachers", "really supported" → "very supportive"). Use one linking phrase to explain why the memory mattered.

例: I vividly remember my primary school Chinese teacher because he was very supportive. For instance, he once told me he believed I would do something amazing in the future, which boosted my confidence as a child. Because of that encouragement, I still feel grateful and motivated.

提案: Clear meaning but grammar and tense issues reduce clarity. Use past tense consistently for past events and correct expressions ("I have moved" or "I have lived in different cities"; "one of my primary school teachers"). Add a linking word to explain the reason and give a short plan if possible.

例: Not really. I haven't kept in touch because I've moved to different cities since primary school. I did visit one of my teachers once when I was in middle school, but that was the only time. I should try to visit them more because I'm sure they would appreciate it.

提案: Good content and a clear example, but grammar and word choice need improvement. Use precise verbs and smoother linking phrases (e.g. "as a result", "for example"). Clarify awkward phrases ("worry about my pronunciation somewhere"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: She helped me become much more confident with English. For example, I used to be afraid of speaking because I worried about my pronunciation, but she was always encouraging. Once, during a presentation when I lost my place, she stepped in and helped me continue, which made me feel supported.

提案: Clear comparison and balanced opinion. Improve grammar (verb forms and articles) and refine wording to be more concise. Use linking words (e.g. "on the other hand") and correct singular/plural agreement ("exams" and "class presentations").

例: Not really. On the one hand, my primary school teachers encouraged me to try new things and praised my efforts, which made me more willing to explore activities. On the other hand, my high school teachers focused on building my confidence and giving constructive feedback, which helped me perform better in exams and class presentations.

× My family teacher was probably my high school English teacher.

✓ My favorite teacher was probably my high school English teacher.

The phrase 'family teacher' is incorrect in context; likely the student meant 'favorite teacher'. This is not an article error strictly but fits 'Article errors' ID per list; replace with 'favorite' to convey intended meaning and correct noun usage.

× She was super funny and then never made the class feel awkward or serious all the time.

✓ She was super funny and never made the class feel awkward or serious.

The sentence contains an unnecessary 'then' and redundant 'all the time'. Remove 'then' and 'all the time' to make the sentence concise and grammatically correct; the verb 'made' is correct past tense.

× I still remember she used to play clip from show like friends in class and then make us learn from them instead of only memorizing vocabulary lists.

✓ I still remember she used to play clips from shows like Friends in class and then made us learn from them instead of only memorizing vocabulary lists.

Pluralize 'clip' to 'clips' and 'show' to 'shows'. 'Friends' (TV title) is capitalized. Maintain past habitual with 'used to' and change 'make' to past 'made' for consistent past narration.

× I am not completely sure to be honest.

✓ I am not completely sure, to be honest.

Add a comma for clarity; the present tense 'am not' is fine. No verb change needed.

× I like the power where teacher can help students grow and learn something new.

✓ I like the idea that teachers can help students grow and learn something new.

Replace 'the power where' with 'the idea that' and use plural 'teachers' to match general statement. 'Where' is incorrect for clauses describing ideas; use 'that'.

× For example if it is really rewarding when someone finally understand a topic they used to struggle with or become more confident because of your help.

✓ For example, it is really rewarding when someone finally understands a topic they used to struggle with or becomes more confident because of your help.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'someone' is singular so verbs should be 'understands' and 'becomes'. Also add a comma after 'For example'.

× But at the same time, I don't know if I am patient enough to be a teacher full time.

✓ But at the same time, I don't know if I am patient enough to be a full-time teacher.

Hyphenate 'full-time' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Sentence tense is fine.

× Yeah, I still remember a lot of teacher.

✓ Yeah, I still remember a lot of teachers.

Use plural 'teachers' with 'a lot of'.

× He was really supported and I remember one time he told me he believed that I would go out doing something amazing.

✓ He was really supportive and I remember one time he told me he believed that I would go on to do something amazing.

Use adjective 'supportive' instead of past participle 'supported'. Replace 'go out doing' with 'go on to do' to express future achievement.

× I feel like when you were a kid, what's like that matter a lot, and I'm really grateful he said that.

✓ I feel like when you are a kid, things like that matter a lot, and I'm really grateful he said that.

Correct tense consistency: general truth uses present 'are'. Replace 'what's like that' with 'things like that' for clarity and correct noun phrase agreement.

× Not really, it's been too long and I will move to different cities since then.

✓ Not really, it's been too long and I have moved to different cities since then.

Use present perfect 'have moved' to indicate actions continuing up to now; 'will move' incorrectly implies future action.

× I remember I visited one of my primary school teacher one time when I was in middle school but that was the only time.

✓ I remember I visited one of my primary school teachers one time when I was in middle school, but that was the only time.

Pluralize 'teacher' to 'teachers' after 'one of my'. Add a comma before 'but' for clarity.

× I feel like I should visit more because they would really appreciate.

✓ I feel like I should visit more because they would really appreciate it.

Add the object 'it' after 'appreciate' to complete the verb phrase; otherwise the sentence is incomplete.

× I think many help me become more confident.

✓ I think many of them helped me become more confident.

Clarify 'many' with 'many of them' and use past 'helped' for past reference; original lacks clear subject and tense mismatch.

× Back then I was kind of scared of speaking English in front of people because I worry about my pronunciation somewhere, but she was always super encouraging.

✓ Back then I was kind of scared of speaking English in front of people because I worried about my pronunciation, but she was always super encouraging.

Maintain past tense 'worried' to match 'Back then'. Remove 'somewhere' which is awkward and unnecessary.

× I remember one time I gave a presentation and forgot where I was at and she kind of jumped in and helped me to keep on going.

✓ I remember one time I gave a presentation and forgot where I was, and she jumped in and helped me keep going.

Remove colloquial 'where I was at' -> 'where I was'. Remove 'kind of' for clarity and unnecessary filler. 'Helped me keep going' is more natural than 'helped me to keep on going'. },{