Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence saying who the teacher is and why you like them (specific qualities and examples). Avoid unclear words and repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, for example, and). Keep your answer to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my English teacher because she is very knowledgeable and encourages us to improve. For example, she gives extra practice tests and explains difficult grammar points clearly, which helped me feel more confident in class.

提案: Clarify your position and avoid contradicting statements. Decide whether you want to be a teacher and state reasons. Use linking words to show contrast (however, although) if you change your opinion. Keep sentences short and avoid filler words (uh, umm).

例: At the moment I am unsure about becoming a teacher because I find managing noisy children difficult. However, I would like to try teaching in the future if I learn classroom management techniques and gain more confidence.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and specific memories or reasons why you remember them. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use one or two concrete examples of her teaching style or actions that left an impression.

例: Yes, I still remember my Nepali teacher from primary school because she used stories and songs to make lessons memorable. For example, she created simple dramas to explain grammar, which made learning enjoyable and helped me remember the rules.

提案: This answer is generally clear but can be more natural and specific. Use cohesive linking words and correct prepositions (on Messenger, call by video). Give a brief example of how often you contact them and what kind of help they give.

例: Yes, I am. We keep in touch on Messenger and sometimes make video calls to chat. If I have a difficult question, I usually message my primary teacher and she explains it to me step by step.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a topic sentence summarizing how she helped, then give specific examples (vocabulary, grammar, study methods). Use linking phrases (for example, in particular) and avoid disfluencies. Be concise and use correct tense.

例: She helped me mostly with English vocabulary and grammar. For example, she taught me mnemonic techniques for new words and corrected my grammar with simple exercises, which I still remember.

提案: Give a clear comparison and specific reasons. Start with a topic sentence stating your preference, then explain with concrete reasons (closeness, activities, support). Avoid repetition and informal fragments. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they felt like family and we still meet often. For instance, we go out together on weekends and they supported me outside class, which made our relationship closer.

× Of course I have got a favorite teacher citizens of English like she's very talented and educated person ever I have seen my life and she also assist us to us give more knowledge, education and motivate to study and give the exams.

✓ Of course I have a favorite English teacher; she is the most talented and educated person I have ever seen in my life, and she helps us by giving knowledge, teaching, motivating us to study, and preparing us for exams.

Multiple pronoun and reference errors: 'citizens of English' is incorrect and likely meant 'an English teacher'; 'she also assist us to us' repeats pronouns and uses wrong verb form. Use 'helps us' (correct verb and object), 'giving knowledge' and 'preparing us for exams' for clarity. Use 'most' with 'ever' and correct word order ('the most talented person I have ever seen'). Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct pronouns (she/her/us), and ensure verbs agree with subjects.

× I am not kind of like, uh, interest in teaching the students, umm, because I can't, I can't control the like, umm, children's on.

✓ I am not really interested in teaching students because I don't think I can control children.

Wrong verb forms and modal/auxiliary usage: 'not kind of like... interest' should be 'not really interested'. 'I can't, I can't control the like... children's on' uses incorrect noun form and extraneous words. Use 'I don't think I can' to express inability and 'children' (plural noun) without apostrophe. Suggestion: use 'interested in' for feelings, 'I don't think I can' for ability, and avoid filler words.

× They are very noisy and shouting and I don't think I can control uh, but in the future, I would definitely, uh, love to become a teacher, a good teacher for my student.

✓ They are very noisy and shout, and I don't think I can control them; but in the future I would definitely love to become a good teacher for my students.

Verb and pronoun agreement: 'shouting' as a continuous form is acceptable but 'shout' fits better in a list; 'control uh' missing object—use 'control them'. 'my student' should be plural 'my students'. 'Would love to become' is correct for future desire. Suggestion: ensure pronouns refer clearly and nouns match number (students).

× As I told that, I had my favorite teacher, the Nepali teacher, citizens or guide us or sisters.

✓ As I said, I had a favorite teacher, my Nepali teacher, who guided us like a sister.

Incorrect reference words: 'As I told that' should be 'As I said'; 'citizens or guide us or sisters' is unclear. Use a relative clause 'who guided us like a sister' to express the idea. Suggestion: use clear connectors ('as I said') and relative clauses for descriptions.

× So I would definitely remember her in my age, like long ages, I would definitely remember her because the way she teaches us, the way she motivate us, I would definitely love.

✓ I will definitely remember her for a long time because of the way she taught us and motivated us.

Tense inconsistency: mixing conditional 'would' with present/reflection. Use future 'will' or present perfect for lasting memory; however referring to past teaching, use past tense 'taught' and 'motivated'. Remove repetition and awkward phrase 'in my age'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense (past for her actions, future or present for remembering) and avoid redundant phrases.

× Yes, definitely. In social media like in Messenger, we usually love to call video calls and talk to each other.

✓ Yes, definitely. On social media, like Messenger, we usually make video calls and talk to each other.

Preposition and verb choice: use 'on social media' not 'in', and 'make video calls' or 'have video calls' rather than 'call video calls'. 'Messenger' is a platform, so no 'in'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions with platforms and standard collocations ('make video calls').

× Sometimes when I feel like question is very hard for me, I ask her from through the video calls and she teaches me.

✓ Sometimes when I find a question very difficult, I ask her through video calls and she teaches me.

Incorrect prepositions and verb forms: 'feel like question is' should be 'find a question'; remove 'from' and use 'through video calls'. Use 'difficult' instead of 'hard for me' for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'find something difficult' and 'ask someone through video calls'.

× CS They just also umm, like different way, like uh, on difficult times or English.

✓ She also helped me in different ways, especially during difficult times with English.

Fragmented sentence and unclear subject: 'CS They just also umm' is unclear. Replace with clear subject 'She also helped me' and proper preposition 'during difficult times' and specify 'with English'. Suggestion: form full sentences with clear subject and verb.

× Mainly the vocabulary and the grammar. I was very confused, uh, when I was young, she teaches me all the things of the vocabulary and grammar that I still remember.

✓ Mainly vocabulary and grammar. I was very confused when I was young; she taught me all the vocabulary and grammar, which I still remember.

Tense inconsistency: 'she teaches me' should be past 'she taught me' because the teaching happened in the past. Combine fragments and use a relative clause 'which I still remember'. Suggestion: keep past tense for past events and connect related clauses.

× I would definitely prefer my primary school teachers because they are my like hometown, hometown teachers and teaches us, we get in touch every time we around here and there and we love to, uh, make fun and go out in the weekends.

✓ I definitely prefer my primary school teachers because they are from my hometown and taught us. We keep in touch all the time, and we like to have fun and go out on weekends.

Article and verb errors: redundant phrase 'hometown, hometown teachers' should be 'from my hometown'. 'teaches us' should be past 'taught us' or present perfect if continuing; here 'taught us' fits. Use 'in touch' with 'keep' not 'get in touch every time we around here and there'. Preposition 'on weekends' is correct. Suggestion: remove repetition, use correct verb tense for past teaching, and use standard prepositions ('keep in touch', 'on weekends').