Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, avoid double negatives and redundancy. Use linking words to add one specific reason or hope. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g. "neither" misuse, verb agreement).

例: I don't have a favorite teacher at the moment. However, I hope that as I progress in my career I will meet a teacher who can guide me and become a role model, because having a mentor would help me develop professionally.

提案: Start with a clear statement of your current view, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (use "I've had the thought" or "I've been thinking") and prefer concise vocabulary ("educate people" → "teach").

例: I have been thinking about becoming a teacher recently. This is because I find teaching meaningful and believe it allows me to contribute to society by helping the next generation learn valuable skills.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence then add two specific supporting details with appropriate linking words. Replace vague phrases ("a lot of knowledge") with concrete examples and correct tense/agreement ("hilarious" is odd for a teacher).

例: Yes, I still remember my primary six class teacher. She was warm and had a great sense of humour, and she taught me reading strategies and how to manage challenges, which I still use today.

提案: Answer briefly and clearly, then give one specific memory and a brief reason for wishing to reconnect. Avoid long, redundant phrasing and correct grammar ("I wish I could" not "I'm able").

例: No, I am not in touch with them now. I often remember our class trips and games, and I wish I could meet them again to thank them for their support.

提案: Even if you don't have a favourite, give a direct topic sentence and one or two specific examples of help using correct grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases with concrete actions (e.g. "gave me feedback" or "organised extra tutoring").

例: I wouldn't call anyone my favourite, but one class teacher greatly helped me by offering extra tutoring after school and giving constructive feedback on my essays, which motivated me to improve.

提案: Give a clear comparison statement, then support it with one specific reason using linking words. Fix grammar ("I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers") and be concise—avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school ones because they were more passionate and often led by example, which made learning more engaging and motivating.

× No, I don't have a favorite teacher neither that I remember having one.

✓ No, I don't have a favorite teacher, at least not that I remember.

Use of 'neither' with a negative sentence is incorrect here; 'neither' typically follows another negative or is used in short negative responses. 'At least not' or 'nor' is appropriate. Also add a comma for clarity.

× Actually I couldn't even think of 1 teacher that I admire or they used to be my role model.

✓ Actually, I couldn't think of a single teacher whom I admired or who used to be my role model.

Use 'couldn't think of' not 'couldn't even think of 1', and write 'a single teacher' in words. Pronoun agreement: use 'whom' or 'who' consistently for the teacher (singular), not 'they'. Also add comma after 'Actually'.

× But I hope in the future in my future career path I could have one good teacher.

✓ But I hope that in my future career I will have a good teacher.

Mixes modalities and tense: 'could have' is inappropriate for a future wish. Use 'will have' or 'may have' for future. Remove redundant 'in the future' and streamline phrase order.

× I didn't even consider of being a teacher when I was young.

✓ I didn't even consider being a teacher when I was young.

Verb 'consider' is not followed by 'of'; it should be followed by the gerund directly ('consider doing'). Keep past tense 'didn't consider' as correct.

× However, in these recent years I've the thought of becoming teacher or the one that educate people because I find this job really meaningful and able to contribute to the society or the next generation.

✓ However, in recent years I've had the thought of becoming a teacher or someone who educates people because I find this job really meaningful and able to contribute to society and the next generation.

Missing auxiliary 'had' after 'I've' and missing article 'a' before 'teacher'. Use 'someone who educates people' instead of 'the one that educate people' to match singular/plural and verb agreement. 'Contribute to society' (no 'the') and use 'and' rather than 'or' for parallelism.

× She is a middle-aged woman who was very hilarious and very nice to us.

✓ She was a middle-aged woman who was very funny and very nice to us.

Mixes present 'is' with past context; if remembering a past teacher use past tense 'was'. Also 'hilarious' is typically used for describing comedy; 'funny' is more natural here.

× She taught me a lot of knowledge as well as life experience which I still remember nowadays.

✓ She taught me a lot of knowledge as well as life experiences, which I still remember today.

Use plural 'life experiences' and 'today' or 'nowadays' but not both; 'nowadays' usually contrasts present general state. Add comma before 'which'.

× Unfortunately, no. I haven't contacted them for a while since I graduated, but I can still recall the moments or memories that we had during my primary school days, and those are the good old times that I have been.

✓ Unfortunately, no. I haven't contacted them since I graduated, but I can still recall the moments and memories we had during primary school, and those were the good old days.

'Haven't contacted them for a while since I graduated' is redundant; use 'since I graduated'. 'Moments or memories' -> 'moments and memories'. Use past tense 'were' and idiomatic 'good old days'.

× I wish I'm able to experience that again in the future.

✓ I wish I could experience that again in the future.

When expressing a wish about something not true or unlikely, use past modal 'could' or 'would', not 'I'm able'.

× I don't have a favorite teacher at all but I remember one of my class teacher helped me with my studies as well as the after school activities by motivating me and lead by example which encouraged me to strive for excellence and I'm still grateful for what she did that time.

✓ I don't have a favorite teacher at all, but I remember one of my class teachers helped me with my studies as well as after-school activities by motivating me and leading by example, which encouraged me to strive for excellence, and I'm still grateful for what she did.

Use plural 'class teachers' when referring to one of them; add commas to separate clauses. 'After-school' is hyphenated as adjective. Parallel structure: 'motivating me and leading by example' (both -ing). Remove 'that time' as unnecessary.

× It's funny that I prefer my primary school teacher more than my high school teacher, even when they are stricter than my high school teacher.

✓ It's funny that I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers, even though the latter were stricter.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A more than B'. Maintain plural consistency. Avoid repeating 'my high school teacher'; refer back with 'the latter' and match tense 'were' if speaking about past.

× I believe is the way they are passionate in teaching us such as they will lead by example as well as motivating us in our studies.

✓ I believe it is because they are passionate about teaching us; for example, they lead by example and motivate us in our studies.

Missing subject 'it' after 'I believe'. Use 'passionate about' not 'passionate in'. Use semicolon or comma for clarity and maintain parallel structure 'lead... and motivate...'. 'Will' is unnecessary for habitual behavior; use simple present.