Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意语法和表达的准确性，尤其是动词搭配和代词使用。回答要更自然、简洁并直接回应问题。可改为主题句+一到两句具体细节，句子不超过5句。比如把 “do myself” 改为“be myself”，把“speak louder in in front of people” 改为“speak up in front of people”。

例: My favorite teacher is my high school English teacher. She encouraged me to be myself and helped me gain confidence to speak up in front of people by giving positive feedback and small speaking tasks.

提案: 注意句子结构和词汇使用，避免混杂多余连词。要先给直接答案，再用一两句具体理由。改正常见错误：用“young people/children”替代“youngers”，用“patience”替代“patient”，去掉多余的连词如 although...but 同时出现。

例: Probably not. Although teachers can shape young people’s character, I don’t think I have enough patience to repeat explanations and supervise students consistently.

提案: 回答中有大量重复和人称混乱（he/she），语句不通顺。应先说记得哪位老师，然后提供具体、连贯的细节，用恰当的人称和动词时态。避免重复并用连接词使句子流畅。

例: Yes, I remember my high school English teacher. Her lessons were never boring because she used fun activities and creative techniques to help us learn and stay motivated.

提案: 回答要更简洁并纠正表达错误。使用清晰的过去或现在时，避免口头填充词（umm, uh）。用正确短语如 “lose contact” 或 “keep in touch”。

例: No, I’m not. I moved several times during middle and high school, so I lost contact with my primary school teachers and we don’t keep in touch.

提案: 组织回答要清晰：先说明具体帮助的方式，再给细节。改正用词和时态（e.g. “speech competition”, “felt very nervous”, “practiced with me repeatedly”）。去掉重复和口头语。

例: She helped me prepare for a speech competition in high school. I felt very nervous, but she encouraged me and stayed after class to practice with me repeatedly, which improved my confidence and performance.

提案: 回答应直接比较并给出理由。修正词汇（use “academic subjects” instead of “academical Staffs”）并避免重复。尽量一句主题句加一到两句理由即可。

例: It’s difficult to say. My primary school teachers taught me values and how to be a good person, while my high school teachers focused more on academic subjects and exam preparation.

× She always encourages me to do myself and don't worry about speak louder in in front of people.

✓ She always encourages me to be myself and not to worry about speaking louder in front of people.

句中需使用不定式或动名词结构。"do myself" 不正确，应为 "be myself"。并且在动词后使用否定不定式或动名词："don't worry about speak louder" 应改为 "not to worry about speaking louder" 或 "not worrying about speaking louder"。另外去掉重复的 "in"。建议在表达鼓励他人时使用固定搭配 "encourage someone to do/ be ..."，以及 "worry about" 后接动名词。

× Probably not because although the teacher has the responsibility that can teach youngers to do a better person, but I may be a lack of patient to attach them again and again.

✓ Probably not, because although teachers have the responsibility to teach young people to become better people, I may lack the patience to deal with them again and again.

原句存在主谓一致和其它多项错误："the teacher has" 与泛指教师语境应使用复数或改写；"youngers" 非标准，应为 "young people" 或 "youngsters"；"to do a better person" 表达错误，应为 "to become better people"；"a lack of patient" 中名词/形容词和冠词使用错误，正确是 "lack the patience"；"attach them" 用词不当，应为 "deal with them" 或 "work with them"。依据题单只改为列出的类型，但因主谓不一致和用词需整体修改以符合语法。建议学习可数/不可数名词和固定搭配如 "lack patience/ lack the patience"，以及复数与泛指的使用。

× Yes, I still remember my high school English teacher, She is a she's a she was the one that he's the lessons is never boring is never boring, and he always encourage us and teaching us in a fancy skills skills.

✓ Yes, I still remember my high school English teacher. She was the one whose lessons were never boring, and she always encouraged us and taught us some interesting skills.

原句代词和人称混用严重：句中同时使用了多种人称代词（she/he/ she's/ he's），导致混乱。需要统一指代该女老师为 "she"。另外，"the lessons is" 主谓不一致，应为 "the lessons were"；"encourage" 时态应与叙述一致用过去式 "encouraged"；"teaching us in a fancy skills skills" 用词和结构错误，应为 "taught us some interesting skills"。建议注意人称一致、时态一致和名词复数形式以及固定搭配。

× Definitely not because I moved away, umm, several times during my middle school and high school and uh, uh, we hadn't, uh, left for connector connection informations which each other, umm, so we can't talk with each other.

✓ Definitely not, because I moved away several times during middle school and high school, so we didn't keep in contact with each other and can't talk now.

原句中有冠词和名词使用错误："connector connection informations" 非标准，应为 "keep in contact" 或 "stay in touch"；"informations" 不可数，英文中用 "information"；另外时态和表达混乱，使用更自然的表达 "didn't keep in contact"。建议记住不可数名词如 "information" 不加复数形式，常用固定搭配如 "keep/stay in touch/contact"。

× I still remember that it is speaking speech competition in my high school. I would feel I would flawed, so nervous and my English teacher encouraged me and stay with me to practice again and again.

✓ I still remember that it was a speech competition in my high school. I felt so nervous and my English teacher encouraged me and stayed with me to practice again and again.

原句时态混用：回忆过去的事情应使用过去时，故 "it is" 改为 "it was"；"I would feel I would flawed" 不合语法，改为过去式 "I felt so nervous"；"encouraged me and stay with me" 中后半句时态不一致，应为过去式 "stayed"。建议在叙述过去经历时统一使用过去时，避免使用条件式/将来式替代过去式。

× It's hard to speak because my primary school teaches me how, how to teach me how to be a good person, and my high school teachers teach me more academical, uh, academical, uh, Staffs.

✓ It's hard to say because my primary school teachers taught me how to be a good person, and my high school teachers taught me more academic subjects.

句中形容词、副词和词汇使用不当："It's hard to speak" 更自然为 "It's hard to say"；"my primary school teaches me" 时态应该是过去式 "taught"；"academical" 不是常用词，应使用形容词 "academic"，并与名词 "subjects" 搭配。"Staffs" 用法错误，应为 "subjects"（科目），"staff" 指教职工。建议积累常用搭配如 "academic subjects" 和注意形容词/名词的正确形式。