Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, avoid filler words (umm), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say when and why she stood out and give a short example of her kindness.

例: Yes, my favorite teacher was my primary school math teacher. She was very kind and patient, and she always explained difficult concepts using simple drawings. Because of her encouragement, I became more confident with numbers.

提案: Make a direct statement about your intention, use correct grammar, and give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases. Be specific about what you would teach or share.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy sharing my knowledge with others. For example, I would teach English conversation to help students feel more confident speaking in everyday situations.

提案: Use accurate vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and then provide a specific detail. Replace incorrect words (e.g., “T-shirt”, “horse teacher”) with correct nouns and avoid fillers.

例: Yes, I still remember my riding instructor from middle school. She taught me horse riding at the school club, and because she was supportive and patient, I improved quickly.

提案: Begin with a clear direct answer, use correct verb forms and articles, and give a concise reason using linking words. Mention if you would like to reconnect or not.

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers anymore because it has been many years and I do not have their contact details. However, I would like to reconnect if I could find them online.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: state one or two concrete ways the teacher helped you, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid vague nouns. Give a specific example of help or result.

例: My favourite teacher helped me build confidence and a passion for learning. For instance, she praised my small improvements and set interesting exercises, so I became more motivated to study.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with a concise reason using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases; compare with specific qualities instead of vague statements.

例: I don't prefer one over the other; it depends on the teacher. For example, my primary teachers were nurturing, while my high school teachers pushed me academically, and I appreciate both for different reasons.

× When I was a younger I memory the math teacher in the school.

✓ When I was younger I remember the math teacher at school.

Tense and word choice: 'was a younger' is incorrect; use 'younger'. 'I memory' is wrong because 'memory' is a noun; use present tense verb 'remember' to describe a past lasting memory. Also use 'at school' instead of 'in the school' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: say 'When I was younger, I remember the math teacher at school.'

× She is very kind and umm passionate for me.

✓ She was very kind and passionate to me.

Tense consistency and preposition/adverb usage: 'is' should match the past context 'When I was younger' so use 'was'. 'Passionate for me' is unnatural; use 'passionate about teaching' or 'passionate toward me' is not typical. Better: 'passionate to me' is still awkward; here 'passionate with students' or 'passionate about teaching' is clearer. Suggestion: 'She was very kind and passionate about teaching.'

× In my opinion, I my B GB I'm teacher in the future because sometime I would like to share my experience and gain the knowledge for the people actually, especially about the my remember that I, uh, work is, uh, interesting for many people.

✓ In my opinion, I want to be a teacher in the future because I would like to share my experience and help people gain knowledge; I remember that my work is interesting for many people.

Multiple issues: word order and missing/extra words. 'I my B GB I'm teacher' is garbled and should be 'I want to be a teacher'. Use 'would like to share' and 'help people gain knowledge' for clarity. 'the my remember that I' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'I remember that my work is interesting to many people.' Suggestion: speak in shorter clear sentences: 'I want to be a teacher in the future. I would like to share my experience and help people learn. I remember that my work is interesting to many people.'

× In my opinion, I my B GB I'm teacher in the future because sometime I would like to share my experience and gain the knowledge for the people actually, especially about the my remember that I, uh, work is, uh, interesting for many people.

✓ In my opinion, I want to be a teacher in the future because sometimes I would like to share my experience and help people gain knowledge; actually, I remember that my work is interesting to many people.

Also corrects adverb placement and preposition choice: use 'sometimes' and 'help people gain knowledge', 'interesting to many people' rather than 'interesting for many people.' Suggestion: practice planning your answer before speaking to avoid repetitions and filler words.

× Yes, I have a T-shirt for my past that I still remember.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my past that I still remember.

Wrong word: 'T-shirt' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation of 'teacher'. Also 'a teacher from my past' is the correct singular phrase. Suggestion: listen for context and choose the correct noun 'teacher'.

× She is a horse teacher.

✓ She was a horse-riding teacher.

Word choice and compound noun: 'horse teacher' is unnatural. Use 'horse-riding teacher' or 'instructor for horse riding.' Also match past tense 'was' if referring to past. Suggestion: say 'She was a horse-riding instructor.'

× She uh, teach about the horse riding club for me and she very kind for stronger.

✓ She taught me about the horse-riding club and she was very kind and encouraging.

Tense: 'teach' should be past 'taught' to match past reference. 'very kind for stronger' is incorrect; likely meant 'very kind and supportive/encouraging'. Use 'encouraging' (present participle) as adjective here. Suggestion: use 'taught me about the horse-riding club' and 'was very kind and encouraging.'

× So now I'm not still in touch with my primary school teacher because it's a long time ago and I haven't contact or e-mail to keep in touch my teachers when I was in primary school.

✓ So now I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because it was a long time ago and I didn't contact or email them when I was in primary school.

Tense consistency: use past 'it was a long time ago' and 'didn't contact' instead of 'haven't contact'. Also use plural 'teachers' if referring to multiple and include object 'them' after 'email'. Suggestion: 'I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because it was a long time ago and I didn't contact them then.'

× That's why I'm not keep in touch with my teachers.

✓ That's why I don't keep in touch with my teachers.

Verb form: 'I'm not keep' is ungrammatical. Use 'I don't keep in touch' for habitual present. If referring to past, use 'I didn't keep in touch.' Suggestion: choose correct auxiliary verb (do) for simple present negative: 'I don't keep in touch.'

× For my experience, I think my favorite T-shirt that help me is a passion and confident many teachers.

✓ From my experience, I think my favorite teacher who helped me gave me passion and confidence.

Multiple errors: 'T-shirt' should be 'teacher'. 'that help me is a passion and confident many teachers' is ungrammatical. Use 'gave me passion and confidence' and 'favorite teacher who helped me'. Suggestion: 'From my experience, my favorite teacher gave me passion and confidence.'

× I umm learn with them.

✓ I learned from them.

Tense and verb choice: 'learn' should be past 'learned' to match talking about past experiences. 'learn with them' is odd; 'learned from them' is correct. Suggestion: use 'learned from them' when referring to past learning.

× They have a lot of health to encourage me passion and.

✓ They did a lot to encourage my passion and confidence.

'Have a lot of health' is incorrect. Use 'did a lot to encourage...' or 'They encouraged my passion and confidence.' Also complete the sentence. Suggestion: 'They did a lot to encourage my passion and confidence.'

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

Question is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keep present tense for general preference questions.

× In my opinion is depends on teacher that's I found.

✓ In my opinion, it depends on the teacher I found.

Missing subject and incorrect word order: 'In my opinion is depends' should be 'In my opinion, it depends'. Include 'the' before 'teacher' and rephrase 'that's I found' to 'I found' or 'that I had.' Suggestion: 'In my opinion, it depends on the teacher I had.'

× I think both of primary and high school teacher were really high for me and I likes both of all because they encourage me to.

✓ I think both my primary and high school teachers were really helpful to me and I like them both because they encouraged me.

Plural/singular and verb agreement: use 'teachers' plural, 'were' fits past, 'I likes' should be 'I like' or past 'I liked'. 'really high' is incorrect adjective; likely 'really helpful'. Also complete 'encouraged me' rather than 'encourage me to.' Suggestion: 'I think both my primary and high school teachers were really helpful to me, and I like them both because they encouraged me.'