Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the teacher, then give one or two specific details (why you liked them, a memory). Avoid filler words and incomplete phrases. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my middle-school Chinese teacher because she made lessons fun and encouraged me to speak more. For example, she organized small group activities that improved my confidence and pronunciation.

提案: Improve grammar and fluency by using full sentences and smoother linking. Begin with a clear statement of intent, then explain two specific reasons using linking words like because or so. Keep it natural and avoid pauses.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy helping students understand subjects and discover their strengths. I find this work very rewarding, so I am motivated to develop skills in lesson planning and student guidance.

提案: Be more specific and correct vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence (name or subject), then give a concrete example of what they said or did and its impact on you, using linking words like because or for example.

例: Yes, I remember my chemistry teacher from high school. For example, she often encouraged me to be honest about my weaknesses, which helped me focus on improving specific skills rather than pretending I understood everything.

提案: Use correct expressions and clearer tense. Answer directly whether you are in touch, then give a brief reason using past tense for why you lost contact. Replace awkward phrases like “telecommunication facilities” with “contact details” or “their phone numbers.”

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I did not keep their contact details when I left school. As a result, I lost contact with them and have not been able to reconnect.

提案: Clarify the meaning and give a concrete example. Start with a clear topic sentence about how the teacher helped you emotionally or academically, then explain specifically using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid unclear phrases and filler words.

例: She helped me decide who my real friends were when I felt confused. For example, she advised me to pay attention to how people treat me consistently, so I could choose friends who genuinely support me.

提案: Make the comparison clearer with a concise topic sentence and specific contrasts. Use linking words like whereas or while to show differences, and give concrete examples of what primary teachers taught versus what high school teachers focused on.

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they focused on basic skills and personal development, such as spelling and reading. In contrast, my high school teachers were more focused on exam scores and academic results.

× My favorite teacher is my Chinese teacher, and she was young when she taught me in.

✓ My favorite teacher is my Chinese teacher, and she was young when she taught me.

The sentence has an extra preposition 'in' at the end which is incorrect. Remove the extraneous word. Also ensure past-tense 'taught' is correct for a past action. Suggestion: omit the trailing 'in' to produce a complete clause.

× In middle school and, uh, she, I think eyes.

✓ She taught me in middle school, and I think she had kind eyes.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Reorder to a complete sentence: state when she taught you ('in middle school') and then add the observation about her 'eyes'. Use a full clause 'I think she had kind eyes' for clarity.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher. I believe a teacher's.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher. I believe a teacher's role is important.

The fragment 'a teacher's.' is incomplete. Complete the noun phrase by adding the object ('role is important') to convey the intended meaning. Ensure sentences are complete thoughts.

× My responsibility is to help students understand the subject and discover their strengths, and I think that is very rewarding career.

✓ My responsibility is to help students understand the subject and discover their strengths, and I think that is a very rewarding career.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'very rewarding career'. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× Yes, I have. She was my chemical teacher and she told me how to how to be honest with myself.

✓ Yes, I have. She was my chemistry teacher and she taught me how to be honest with myself.

Use the noun 'chemistry teacher' rather than 'chemical teacher'. Remove duplicate 'how to how to' and use 'taught me' for clarity. This corrects word choice and a repetition error.

× I would like to have touch with my primary school teachers, but I don't have telecommunication facilities at that age so I lost touch with them.

✓ I would like to keep in touch with my primary school teachers, but I didn't have telecommunication facilities at that time, so I lost touch with them.

Use the common expression 'keep in touch with' rather than 'have touch with'. Use past tense 'didn't have' and 'at that time' instead of 'at that age' to refer to a past period. This fixes preposition and tense choice.

× At my confused time, I don't know uh, who's my best friend who's not? And my teacher taught me there's no benefit between close friend and if you are close and they will not benefit for you.

✓ When I was confused and didn't know who my real friends were, my teacher taught me that being close to someone does not always benefit you.

The original contains awkward phrasing and tense inconsistencies. Rephrase to a clear past-time clause 'When I was confused' and use 'didn't know who my real friends were'. Express the lesson as 'my teacher taught me that being close to someone does not always benefit you' to correct grammar and clarity.

× Yes, I prefer liking my primary school teachers.

✓ Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers.

'Prefer liking' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'prefer' followed directly by the object ('my primary school teachers') or 'like my primary school teachers more' to express the intended meaning.

× But in my high school teachers, they are more focused on the scores.

✓ But my high school teachers were more focused on scores.

The phrase 'in my high school teachers' is incorrect. Use 'my high school teachers' as the subject. Also align tense with prior sentence (past) and remove the definite article before 'scores' unless specific scores are meant.