Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix repetitions and article/noun agreement (e.g., “a very reliable teacher,” “when we have problems”).

例: Yes — I have a favorite teacher. He is kind but also strict, and he is very reliable; for example, he stays after class to help students who have problems. Because of his support, I feel more confident in my studies.

提案: Begin with a clear direct answer and then give specific reasons linked logically. Avoid vague phrases and use natural expressions (e.g., “like a second parent” instead of “second mother”). Use one linking phrase such as “because” or “for example.”

例: No, I don’t. Teaching is a big responsibility because you act like a second parent to the students. For example, you must be very patient and understanding when children struggle with lessons.

提案: Organize the answer: state clearly whether you remember the teacher, then give two specific, grammatically correct details. Avoid filler words and correct tense/word choice (e.g., “relaxed,” “she taught us things not related to school”). Use linking words such as “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I remember one teacher from my past, although I can’t recall her name. She was very relaxed and treated us like friends, which made lessons enjoyable; for example, she taught us life skills such as basic cooking and teamwork that were not part of the normal curriculum.

提案: Answer directly, then give a clear, succinct reason. Correct grammar (e.g., “I’m not in touch with my primary school teachers” and “because I’m a bit shy about contacting them on Facebook”). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like “not in a good shape.”

例: No, I’m not in touch with my primary school teachers. I’m a bit shy about adding them on Facebook because I don’t feel comfortable sharing my current photos or personal updates with former teachers.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and the help they provided. Use correct tense and clearer wording (e.g., “I still use this skill today”). Provide a specific example of how you apply critical thinking. Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: My favorite teacher was my math teacher, and he taught me to think critically. For example, when I decide how to manage my time for assignments, I analyze the pros and cons of each option and choose the most efficient plan.

提案: Answer directly and give clear comparative reasons. Use correct sentence structure and linking words such as “because” and “whereas.” Replace vague phrases (“doing some stuff”) with specific examples (e.g., “playing games, arts and crafts”).

例: Yes, I prefer primary school teachers to high school teachers because primary teachers made learning fun with games and crafts, whereas high school teachers were stricter and more focused on exams.

× He is so kind, very strict and very reliable teacher.

✓ He is very kind, very strict, and a very reliable teacher.

Sentence has parallel adjectives but misses an article before 'teacher' and inconsistent adverb use. Add the article 'a' before 'very reliable teacher' and include commas to separate adjectives. Use 'very' for consistent emphasis: 'very kind, very strict, and a very reliable teacher.'

× He often helps us whenever we we got problems.

✓ He often helps us whenever we have problems.

Original repeats 'we' and uses past tense 'got' with 'whenever' which requires present simple when referring to habitual actions. Correct to 'we have' for subject-verb agreement and consistent tense; remove the duplicate 'we'.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher because it is a big responsibility.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher because it would be a big responsibility.

Using 'it is' is grammatical but sounds odd when explaining a hypothetical future role. Use modal 'would' to indicate hypothetical consequence of becoming a teacher: 'it would be a big responsibility.' This fits the conditional attitude about a future choice.

× You will be the second mother of those children.

✓ You will be like a second mother to those children.

Use the expression 'like a second mother' or 'a second mother to' rather than 'the second mother of.' Also change preposition to 'to' for correct collocation: 'a second mother to those children.'

× You need to be more patient and understanding to these individuals.

✓ You need to be more patient and understanding with these individuals.

The verb phrase 'be patient/understanding with' takes the preposition 'with,' not 'to.' Change 'to' to 'with' for correct pronoun/phrase collocation.

× I have a teacher in mind but I forgot her name.

✓ I have a teacher in mind, but I forgot her name.

Grammatically this sentence is acceptable but needs a comma before 'but' to join independent clauses. No pronoun error; punctuation improves clarity.

× She's so chill so relax and it feels like we are not studying.

✓ She's so chill and so relaxed that it feels like we are not studying.

Use the adjective 'relaxed' (not the verb 'relax') to describe a person. Use parallel structure 'so chill and so relaxed' and 'that' to show result: 'so ... that ...' for clarity.

× Like we were just friends and we he taught me He taught us some stuffs that's not related to the school.

✓ It felt like we were just friends, and he taught us some things that were not related to school.

Multiple problems: extra words 'we he' and repeated 'He taught'; 'stuffs' is nonstandard—use 'things'; use past tense 'were' for a past teacher; remove 'the' before 'school.' Reorder to form two coordinated clauses with correct pronouns and verb tenses.

× No, I don't have in touch in my previous primary school teachers.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers anymore.

Correct collocation is 'be in touch with someone.' Remove 'have in touch in' and use 'I'm not in touch with.' Also 'previous' is redundant with 'primary'; add 'anymore' for clarity about the present state.

× It is because I am a little bit shy to add them in Facebook and I don't want to see.

✓ It's because I'm a little shy to add them on Facebook, and I don't want them to see me.

Use 'on Facebook' not 'in Facebook.' 'A little bit shy' can be shortened to 'a little shy.' The second clause needs an object: 'I don't want them to see me.' Adjust contractions for natural speech.

× I don't want them to see me that I'm not in a good shape right now.

✓ I don't want them to see that I'm not in good shape right now.

Remove the extra pronoun 'me' before 'that.' Use 'in good shape' (no article) for idiomatic expression. The clause 'see that' is correct to indicate someone noticing a state.

× My favorite academic teacher is math.

✓ My favorite academic subject is math, and my favorite teacher is my math teacher.

Mixes 'teacher' and 'subject.' Clarify by saying 'favorite subject is math' or specify 'my favorite academic teacher is my math teacher.' Provide both options for clarity.

× He taught me how to think critically in every situation and I skip adapting it up until now and I keep using it in every decision I made.

✓ He taught me how to think critically in every situation, and I have kept applying it until now; I still use it in every decision I make.

Use present perfect 'have kept applying' to indicate an action started in the past and continuing to the present. 'Skip adapting' is incorrect—use 'kept applying' or 'continued to apply.' Change 'I made' to 'I make' for present habitual usage. Split into clearer clauses and correct verb tenses.

× I prefer to like primary school teachers more than high school teachers.

✓ I prefer primary school teachers to high school teachers.

'Prefer to like' is redundant; use 'prefer A to B.' Remove 'more than' and use correct structure: 'prefer X to Y.' This corrects verb choice and comparison structure.

× It is because primary school is just for playing and doing some stuff.

✓ It's because primary school is just for playing and doing some things.

Use 'things' instead of informal 'stuff' in this context for standard English. Contraction 'It's' is more natural. No preposition error, but word choice improved.

× Unlike the high school teachers. They so strict and serious that we have to do this, do that.

✓ Unlike high school teachers, they were so strict and serious that we had to do this and that.

Original includes a sentence fragment 'Unlike the high school teachers.' Combine into one sentence using a comparison clause. Add past tense 'were' to match past context and 'had to' for obligation. Use 'this and that' for idiomatic phrasing and include verb 'were' for correct sentence structure.