Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, give two specific supporting details (what she did and an example), and finish with a short concluding sentence. Use linking words such as Because and For example to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher at school was my English teacher because she listened carefully to students and gave practical help. For example, she reviewed my essays one-on-one and suggested improvements, which improved my grades. I still keep in touch with her because she encouraged me to keep learning.

提案: Answer directly then give a concise reason and a brief example; avoid repetition and fillers. Use linking words (because, therefore) and correct grammar for clarity (e.g., 'I am not good at teaching others').

例: No, I do not want to be a teacher in the future because I find explaining concepts to others difficult. For instance, when I tried tutoring a classmate, I struggled to make the ideas clear, so I prefer a career that relies more on individual work.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the teacher and why you remember him. Replace vague phrases with specific details (what he did, how he spoke to students). Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid hesitations.

例: Yes. I still remember my management professor from university because he motivated students and explained concepts clearly. For example, he held weekly Q&A sessions and gave practical career advice, which made his classes memorable.

提案: Start with a direct answer and give two concise reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Be specific about timeframes or examples and avoid awkward phrasing.

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because many years have passed since I left school and several teachers have moved to other cities. As a result, tracking them down has been difficult.

提案: Open with a clear topic sentence summarizing how she helped, then give specific examples (e.g., reviewed assignments, gave extra lessons). Use correct grammar and linking words (for example, and therefore) and avoid vague phrases like 'a lot of things'.

例: She helped me by closely monitoring my grades and offering extra tutoring when I was confused. For example, she reviewed my test mistakes with me after class and gave practice problems, which improved my marks significantly.

提案: State your preference directly, then give two contrasting reasons using linking words (because, whereas). Be specific about what 'familiar' and 'formal' mean (examples of behaviour). Correct grammar (e.g., 'teachers were familiar' and 'high school teachers were more formal').

例: Yes, I prefer my primary school teachers because they were very familiar and attentive to each student. In contrast, high school teachers were more formal and focused on exams rather than personal problems, so I felt less supported.

× Yes, of course I have a favorite teacher when I was in this school.

✓ Yes, of course I had a favorite teacher when I was at this school.

The original mixes present 'have' with past time 'when I was in this school'. Use past tense 'had' to match past time. Also use preposition 'at' for a school rather than 'in'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense with time markers: 'when I was at this school'.

× Uh, there is a one ma'am.

✓ Uh, there is one ma'am.

The phrase 'a one' is ungrammatical; use either the article 'a' with a noun ('a ma'am' is odd) or the numeral 'one'. Better: 'There is one ma'am' or more natural 'There is one teacher' or 'One of my teachers.' Suggestion: Avoid combining 'a' with 'one'.

× Uh, she's uh, my favorite teacher.

✓ She was my favorite teacher.

The response refers to a past period ('when I was in this school'), so use past 'was' rather than present 'is'. Suggestion: Keep pronoun reference and tense consistent: 'She was my favorite teacher.'

× her helping nature is uh, very amazing.

✓ Her helpful nature was very admirable.

Use adjective 'helpful' rather than noun 'helping' to describe 'nature'. Also match past tense with previous context and choose 'admirable' (or 'amazing') appropriately. 'Very amazing' is informal and redundant. Suggestion: Use 'helpful' + adjective like 'admirable' or 'wonderful', and match tense.

× So she was still my favorite teacher and I still connected with her.

✓ So she remained my favorite teacher and I stayed in touch with her.

'Was still' is awkward; use 'remained'. 'Connected with' is incorrect collocation for maintaining communication; use 'stayed in touch with'. Use past tense to match context. Suggestion: Use verbs that collocate: 'remained' and 'stayed in touch'.

× To be very honest, I do not want to be a teacher in the future.

✓ To be very honest, I do not want to be a teacher in the future.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; it uses present simple to express future intention. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× I am not good at uh, teaching other things, uh, to people very easily.

✓ I am not good at teaching other things to people.

Remove unnecessary adverb 'very easily' which is awkward here; 'good at teaching' correctly uses '-ing' after 'good at'. The original is repetitive and disfluent; simplify. Suggestion: Keep 'good at' + gerund: 'good at teaching' and avoid filler words.

× And uh, as a result, it is a very difficult task for me, so I just do not want teacher in the future.

✓ As a result, it is a very difficult task for me, so I just do not want to be a teacher in the future.

Missing verb 'to be' before 'a teacher' makes the sentence ungrammatical. Also maintain 'to be a teacher' as the complement. Keep tense and infinitive form. Suggestion: Include the verb 'be': 'do not want to be a teacher'.

× Yes, of course. I have a 1 teacher from my past that I still remember.

✓ Yes, of course. I have one teacher from my past whom I still remember.

Use the word 'one' not numeral '1' in prose. Also use 'whom' or rephrase 'that I still remember' to 'whom I still remember' because the teacher is an object of 'remember'. Suggestion: Use words for numbers in speech and use correct relative pronoun 'whom' for people when object.

× It was in my graduation time.

✓ It was during my graduation.

'Graduation time' is awkward; 'during my graduation' or 'when I graduated' is natural. Keep past tense. Suggestion: Use natural time expressions: 'during my graduation' or 'when I graduated'.

× Uh, there is one, my uh, management, Sir.

✓ There was one: my management sir.

Maintain past tense 'was' to match previous past context. Also 'management Sir' is awkward but may be a title; keep capitalization and phrasing consistent. Suggestion: Use clearer phrasing: 'There was one: my management teacher'.

× He's a very, extremely good at, uh, helping and uh, speaking throughout the students.

✓ He was extremely good at helping and speaking with the students.

'A very, extremely good' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use one intensifier: 'extremely good'. Remove unnecessary article 'a' before 'extremely'. Use 'speaking with the students' not 'throughout the students'. Suggestion: Use a single adverbial intensifier and correct preposition 'with'.

× No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers.

This sentence is acceptable in present tense to describe current state. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× This is because there are a long time that we made before the my graduation time.

✓ This is because a long time has passed since my graduation.

Original has multiple issues: wrong verb 'made', incorrect article 'the my', and wrong structure. Use 'a long time has passed since my graduation' to express elapsed time. Suggestion: Use 'has passed since' for time elapsed and avoid 'made' in this context.

× So it is a very difficult to find them and they are also moving other cities so it is a difficult to touch with them.

✓ So it is very difficult to find them, and they have also moved to other cities, so it is difficult to get in touch with them.

Use infinitive 'to find', not 'a very difficult to find'. 'Moving other cities' should be 'moved to other cities'. 'Touch with them' is incorrect collocation; use 'get in touch with'. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and prepositions: 'moved to' and 'get in touch with'.

× Well, there are a lot of things include that my favorite teacher help me especially she's always taking care of my subjects Mark and she always stand by me whenever I feel little bit of confused in the subject.

✓ Well, there are a lot of things, including that my favorite teacher helped me. Especially, she always took care of my subject marks and she always stood by me whenever I felt a little confused about a subject.

Use 'including' to introduce examples. Match past tense 'helped', 'took care', 'stood by' to past context. Use plural 'marks' and 'a little confused about a subject'. Also 'help me' should be 'helped me'. Suggestion: Use 'including' + gerund, and keep verb tense consistent with past timeframe.

× So that's the nature I really wanted.

✓ So that's the kind of support I really wanted.

'The nature I really wanted' is unclear; 'kind of support' clarifies meaning. Use noun phrase matching context. Suggestion: Choose precise nouns ('support', 'care') instead of vague 'nature'.

× Yes, of course I like my primary teachers more than the high school teachers.

✓ Yes, of course I prefer my primary school teachers to my high school teachers.

Original is understandable but awkward. 'Prefer X to Y' is a more natural comparative structure. Ensure parallel nouns: 'primary school teachers' and 'high school teachers'. Suggestion: Use 'prefer ... to ...' or 'like ... more than ...' with parallel noun phrases.

× This is because when I was in primary, all the teachers are very familiar with me.

✓ This is because when I was in primary school, all the teachers were very familiar with me.

Mixing past time 'when I was' with present 'are' is inconsistent; use past 'were'. Also specify 'primary school'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: past for past time clauses.

× But if I talk about high school teacher, they are a little bit of formal about talking the personal difficulties and in these studies.

✓ But if I talk about high school teachers, they are a bit more formal when discussing personal difficulties and academic matters.

Use plural 'teachers' to match 'they'. 'A little bit of formal about talking the personal difficulties' is ungrammatical; use 'a bit more formal when discussing personal difficulties'. Replace 'in these studies' with 'academic matters'. Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and collocations: 'discussing personal difficulties' and 'academic matters'.