Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct pronouns and verb forms. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "for instance") to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

例: Yes. My favourite teacher is Miss Kwan, my secondary physical education teacher, because she is patient and encouraging. For example, she showed me the correct way to run and gave personalised feedback so I improved my fitness and confidence.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases; choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. "activities" instead of "spots", "skills" instead of "still"). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I would like to be a physical education teacher in the future because I want to design fun and meaningful activities that help students build fitness and teamwork. For example, I would create weekly team challenges that improve skill and cooperation.

提案: Answer directly and provide a specific memory or example that explains why you remember the teacher. Use correct grammar ("guides me" not "guide my role") and more precise adjectives (e.g. "kind" instead of "cute") when appropriate.

例: Yes, I remember Miss Quan, my primary teacher, because she was patient and created fun lessons. For instance, she designed interactive games that helped us practise grammar while enjoying class, so I still remember those activities.

提案: Reply directly and give a clear reason with correct grammar and phrasing. Use linking words ("because", "so") and avoid awkward expressions like "I will date them" — say "I would invite them". Mention a specific plan if you could contact them.

例: No, I'm not in touch with them because they no longer teach at the school and I don't have their phone numbers. If I had their contact details, I would invite them to lunch to catch up and thank them for their support.

提案: Be specific about the help and use correct verb tenses. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two concrete examples of how she helped (advice, resources). Use linking words like "for example" or "for instance".

例: She has helped me a lot with career choices by giving practical advice and resources. For example, she suggested courses to research, introduced me to alumni, and helped me compare different job paths so I could decide more confidently.

提案: Make a clear comparison: state which you prefer and give a specific reason with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like "makes me more impressive" — instead say "had a greater influence on me". Limit to two sentences and use linking words such as "because" or "although".

例: I prefer my high school teachers because they had a greater influence on my studies and motivation. For example, my high school teachers challenged me with projects and feedback that improved my skills, whereas I have fewer clear memories from primary school.

× She is very kindly and patient and positive.

✓ She is very kind, patient, and positive.

'Kindly' is an adverb meaning 'in a kind manner', but an adjective 'kind' is needed to describe a person. Also add commas between coordinate adjectives. Use 'kind' not 'kindly'. Improve by using adjectives to describe people and separate them with commas.

× He always guide me how to do some correct things.

✓ She always guides me on how to do things correctly.

Pronoun 'He' conflicts with earlier 'She'; use 'She'. Subject-verb agreement requires 'guides' for singular third-person. 'Guide me how to do' is unnatural; use 'guides me on how to' or 'shows me how to'. Use 'correctly' (adverb) to modify the verb.

× I want to do as same as my secondary physical education teacher and I want to become a physical education teacher in the future because I want to create some meaningful interesting spots for my still.

✓ I want to be like my secondary physical education teacher and become a physical education teacher because I want to create meaningful and interesting activities for my students.

'Do as same as' is incorrect; use 'be like' or 'do the same as'. 'Spots' is wrong in this context; likely 'activities' or 'lessons'. 'My still' is incorrect; likely 'my students'. Rephrase for natural English and correct word choices.

× She is a very cute, patient and positive teacher.

✓ She is a very kind, patient, and positive teacher.

'Cute' is uncommon to describe a teacher's professional qualities; 'kind' fits better. Also add commas between adjectives and before 'and' in a list for clarity.

× She always guide my role how to make more better and create many interesting games for us.

✓ She always guides me on how to improve and creates many interesting games for us.

Subject-verb agreement: 'guides' and 'creates' for singular third-person. 'My role' is unclear; likely 'me' or 'my skills'. 'Make more better' is ungrammatical; use 'improve'. Rephrase to natural collocations.

× No I haven't because my primary school teachers are leave primary school already and I didn't have their number so I cannot contact they.

✓ No, I haven't, because my primary school teachers have already left the school and I don't have their numbers, so I cannot contact them.

'Haven't' needs object/context; use full clause. Use present perfect 'have left' for change of state. 'Didn't have' should be 'don't have' to match present relevance. 'Contact they' should be 'contact them'. 'Number' pluralized to 'numbers'.

× If I have their phone number I will date them for some lunch or dinner and talk about what happened in those.

✓ If I had their phone numbers, I would invite them to lunch or dinner and talk about what happened then.

This is a hypothetical present contrary to fact, so use second conditional: 'If I had... I would...'. 'Date' is incorrect in this context; use 'invite' or 'ask out'. 'Phone number' plural. 'In those' is unclear; use 'then' or 'back then'.

× She helps me a lot when I am feeling unlocked like I don't know how to choose my future job and she will makes many suggestions and help me find different research to give me the guide and help me to select my.

✓ She helps me a lot when I feel unsure, for example when I don't know how to choose a future career; she gives me many suggestions, helps me do research, and guides me in making my choice.

Use 'feel unsure' instead of 'feeling unlocked'. Maintain consistent present tense: 'helps', 'gives', 'helps'. 'Will makes' is wrong; use 'makes' or 'gives'. 'Find different research' should be 'do research' or 'find different resources'. 'Select my' incomplete; complete as 'making my choice' or 'choosing my career'.

× Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

✓ Do you like your primary school teachers more than your high school teachers?

No grammatical change required; sentence is correct. No correction needed.

× I like my high school teacher more than my primary school student teachers because my high school teachers makes me more impressive and because my primary school memories are lost a lot so I didn't remember loss of my primary school.

✓ I like my high school teachers more than my primary school teachers because my high school teachers impressed me more, and many of my primary school memories are lost, so I don't remember much from primary school.

Subject-verb agreement: 'teachers make' or 'teachers impressed' (use past 'impressed' for specific impression). 'Primary school student teachers' is incorrect; remove 'student'. 'Makes me more impressive' is incorrect meaning; use 'impressed me more'. 'Didn't remember loss of my primary school' is ungrammatical; use 'I don't remember much from primary school'. Use consistent tense and correct collocations.