Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构和语法需更准确，避免冗长与重复；回答要更自然并直接回应问题。可以用一到两句主题句说明喜欢的原因，再用一到两句具体事例支持。注意时态和固定搭配（例如："started here" 应为 "started school" 或 "first came here"；"attached great importance to" 更自然为 "placed great importance on"；"all rounds development" 应为 "all-round development"）。

例: My favorite teacher is Mrs. Wong, my secondary school chemistry teacher, because she emphasized all-round development. For example, she regularly demonstrated experiments in class rather than just explaining the concepts, which made the lessons much more engaging and practical.

提案: 表达要更简练、语法更准确并用衔接词连接观点。修正常见搭配错误（"providing to apply PhD" 应为 "preparing to apply for a PhD"；"pass my knowledge" 应为 "pass on my knowledge"；避免重复如 "pleasant" 与 "sense of achievement" 可合并成一条理由）。

例: Yes, I hope to become a teacher or a university professor. I am currently preparing to apply for a PhD in the United States because I enjoy passing on my knowledge to students and find teaching very rewarding.

提案: 回答要合并短句，避免片段句（如 "In my primary school."），並補充具體細節使描述更生動（例如：具體做了哪些教學方法）。注意詞彙準確性（"literacy" 可能不合適，可改為 "reading and writing" 或 "language"）。

例: Yes, I still remember my primary school Chinese teacher, Mr. Liu. He was strict but very supportive; when my Chinese grades were low he spent extra time after class helping me with reading and writing, and his explanations helped me improve significantly.

提案: 回答已較自然，但可更精簡并用連接詞增加流暢性。用更地道的表達替換生硬句式（如 "it is pleasant to talk about our daily lives to each other" 改為 "we enjoy catching up about our lives"）。

例: Yes, definitely. We have a WeChat group with my primary classmates and teachers, and we often use it to discuss things and catch up about our daily lives.

提案: 語句需更通順、語法正確並避免冗餘或不自然的表達（如 "Misses Leo" 應為 "Miss Leo"；"investing extra time" 改為 "spent extra time"；最後一句不完整且語意不明）。建議給出更具體結果和感受，並用連接詞連貫句子。

例: My favourite secondary school teacher, Miss Leo, helped me by spending extra time after class to explain difficult concepts. As a result, my grades improved significantly and I became more confident in chemistry, even though I had less free time.

提案: 回答應更簡潔並修正語法與搭配（如 "it is truth" 改為 "it's true"；"shared more memories with" 改為 "have more memories of"；"give me many advice" 改為 "give me a lot of advice"）。可用一兩句比較並舉例說明哪方面更幫助你。

例: It's hard to choose, but I have more memories of my high school teachers because I spent more time studying with them. They have been very helpful, offering practical advice about daily life and preparing me for the workplace.

× Yes, my favorite teacher is Mrs. Wong, who is teaching chemistry in my secondary school.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is Mrs. Wong, who teaches chemistry at my secondary school.

句子中使用「who is teaching」會產生冗長的現在進行式，描述職業或常態時應使用一般現在時「teaches」。此外介詞習慣用法是 "teach ... at school" 而非 "in my secondary school"（可用但常見改為 at）。建議在描述職業常態或經常發生的事時使用一般現在時。

× I remember when I was started here, she often attached great importance to all rounds development, so she often demonstrated experiments in classes, not only offered the concepts.

✓ I remember when I started here, she often attached great importance to all-round development, so she often demonstrated experiments in class, not only offered the concepts.

原句中「was started」是被動過去，與說話意圖不符，應使用主體的過去式「I started」。此外「all rounds」應為合成形容詞 "all-round"，表示全面的發展；"in classes" 指多堂課但此處表述更常用單數「in class」來表示上課時。建議把動詞改為簡單過去，名詞短語用正確形容詞形式。

× Yes, I want to be a teacher or a professor in university. Actually now I am providing to apply PhD in America.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher or a university professor. Actually, now I am preparing to apply for a PhD in America.

原句「providing to apply」用法錯誤，應使用 "preparing to" 表示正在準備做某事，或 "planning to"。另外申請博士學位正確搭配是 "apply for a PhD"。同時 "in university" 更自然為 "a university professor"。建議使用固定搭配 "prepare to" / "apply for"。

× I think pass my knowledge to students is a pleasant thing and I can feel a sense of achievement from it.

✓ I think passing my knowledge to students is a pleasant thing and I can feel a sense of achievement from it.

此處主語從句的動名詞形式「passing」應作為主語使用，而不是不定詞缺少 to（*to pass*）或原形動詞。因此改為動名詞 "passing" 使整句語法正確。中文建議：在作主語時使用動名詞或不定詞並注意搭配。

× Yes, I remember my Chinese teacher, Mr. Liu. In my primary school. He was a really strict and helpful teacher.

✓ Yes, I remember my Chinese teacher, Mr. Liu, from my primary school. He was a really strict and helpful teacher.

原文把「In my primary school.」寫成短句導致句子不完整（句子沒有動詞），應合併到前句成為定語片語或重構為完整句。中文建議：避免使用片段句，確保每句都有主語和謂語。

× I remember at that time my Chinese grades were low, so he often invested more time after class to help me understand the literacy and concepts from the textbooks.

✓ I remember that at that time my Chinese grades were low, so he often spent more time after class helping me understand the literacy and concepts in the textbooks.

"invested more time" 在此語境不太自然，應用 "spent more time"。此外動詞後應接動名詞 "helping" 而不是不定式。介詞用法 "concepts in the textbooks" 比 "from the textbooks" 更自然。中文建議：常用 "spend time doing" 結構，並用正確介詞表達來源或所在。

× There is a chat group on WeChat among my primary classmates and my primary teachers.

✓ There is a WeChat group for my primary classmates and teachers.

原句冗長且重複 "primary"。更自然的表達為 "WeChat group for..."。同時簡化詞序使句子更地道。中文建議：避免重複詞語，使用更簡潔的名詞短語。

× We often have some discussions in this group and it is pleasant to talk about our daily lives to each other.

✓ We often have discussions in this group and it is pleasant to talk about our daily lives with each other.

"discussions" 前不需 "some"，省略更自然。介詞 "talk about ... with each other" 比 "to each other" 更合適表達彼此交談。中文建議：學習常用搭配，如 "talk about ... with ..."。

× My first teacher, Misses Leo in my secondary school, helped me by investing extra time.

✓ My first teacher in secondary school, Miss Leo, helped me by spending extra time.

稱呼應為 "Miss Leo" 而非 "Misses"。同時和前面類似，使用 "spending" 比 "investing" 更自然。"in my secondary school" 可簡化為 "in secondary school"。中文建議：注意尊稱拼寫和常見搭配 "spend time"。

× For example, after classes, she often helped me to understand the concepts in the textbooks.

✓ For example, after classes, she often helped me understand the concepts in the textbooks.

"helped me to understand" 可以接受，但更自然的用法是省略 to："helped me understand"。保持過去時態與上下文一致。中文建議：在 "help sb (to) do sth" 中常省略 to。

× Although I lost my leisure time for entertainment, ultimately my grades were improved and I was so.

✓ Although I lost my leisure time for entertainment, ultimately my grades improved and I was very happy.

"were improved" 不需被動語態，應用主動過去 "improved"。句末 "and I was so" 為不完整表達，應明確說出感受，如 "I was very happy" 或 "I was satisfied"。中文建議：避免使用不完整代詞短語（如 "so"）獨立成句，表達要完整。

× It is hard to choose, but it is truth that I shared more memories with my high school teachers as I spent more time on studying during the period.

✓ It is hard to choose, but it is true that I shared more memories with my high school teachers because I spent more time studying during that period.

原句中用詞錯誤 "it is truth" 應為 "it is true"。短語 "spent more time on studying" 更自然為 "spent more time studying"。使用連詞 "because" 替代 "as" 可更清楚表因果關係。中文建議：注意形容詞/名詞的正確形式（true vs truth）及固定動詞搭配。

× I must say that my school high school teachers are so helpful because they now give me many advice for daily lives and workplaces.

✓ I must say that my high school teachers are very helpful because they now give me much advice about daily life and the workplace.

"my school high school teachers" 冗餘且語序錯亂，應為 "my high school teachers"。"many advice" 用法錯誤，advice 是不可數名詞，用 "much advice" 或 "a lot of advice"。"daily lives" 改為不可數搭配 "daily life"，"workplaces" 改為單數或加定冠詞視語境，這裡用 "the workplace" 更通順。中文建議：注意可數/不可數名詞和詞序，學會常見搭配如 "give advice"。