Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct pronouns and singular/plural agreement. Use linking words (for example, because, and) and avoid redundancy.

例: My favourite teacher is Kalvir Kaur. She stands out because she has deep knowledge of many subjects and uses unique teaching methods. For example, she uses real-life examples and group activities, which helped me understand difficult topics quickly.

提案: Give a direct, well-structured response: state a clear opinion, then support it with one or two concise reasons. Use correct tense and vocabulary (e.g., 'I will not become a teacher' or 'I don't want to be a teacher'), and avoid repetition.

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher. I plan to work as a nurse, which is a very different profession and requires specific medical training. However, I would help my own children with their schoolwork at home if they need support.

提案: Answer directly and add a specific memory or example. Correct repetition and grammar, and finish your thought. Use linking words (for example, because or so) to explain why you remember them.

例: Yes, I still remember my math teacher, Harpreet Singh. He was very strict, especially with students who did not do their homework, but he helped us improve by giving extra practice problems and clear explanations. Because of his strictness, I became more disciplined in my studies.

提案: Respond simply and clearly. Use correct verbs (e.g., 'in touch') and explain with one clear reason. Avoid repeating words and be concise.

例: No, I'm not in touch with any of my primary school teachers. My primary school was far from my current home, so we lost contact after I moved away.

提案: Start with a topic sentence naming one or two ways the teacher helped you, then give a specific example. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Link points with words like 'for example' or 'also'.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by explaining difficult topics clearly and teaching me how to take effective notes. For example, he showed me a note-taking method that organised information into headings and bullet points, which made revision much easier.

提案: Give a clear comparative answer: state which you prefer or say you like both, then explain specific differences with clear language and examples. Use linking words (however, because) and avoid vague statements.

例: I like both my primary and high school teachers for different reasons. Primary teachers helped me build basic skills and confidence, while high school teachers focused more on subject knowledge and critical thinking. However, I appreciate the foundational care I received in primary school because it prepared me for later studies.

× Yes I have my favorite teacher that's name is Kalvir Kaur she's my one of the most favorite teacher due to their vast knowledge of each and everything and also their teaching Also his her teaching method is very unique as compared to other teachers.

✓ Yes, I have a favorite teacher. Her name is Kalvir Kaur. She is one of my most favorite teachers because of her vast knowledge of many subjects and her teaching method, which is very unique compared to other teachers.

Multiple pronoun errors: 'that's name' should be 'her name' (incorrect demonstrative and missing possessive pronoun). 'she's my one of the most favorite teacher' has wrong word order and article use; correct is 'one of my most favorite teachers'. 'their' is a plural or gender-neutral pronoun used incorrectly for a singular female, so use 'her'. 'Also his her' is mixed/conflicting pronouns; choose 'her'. Suggestion: use consistent singular pronouns to match the teacher's gender and correct word order for 'one of my most favorite teachers'.

× Frankly speaking, I don't think so. I became a teacher in a future because my professional is very different. I am a nurse nurse so I have a no no enough knowledge to become a teacher. But definitely when my when I have a children in in a future so I can I.

✓ Frankly speaking, I don't think so. I will not become a teacher in the future because my profession is different. I am a nurse, so I do not have enough knowledge to become a teacher. But definitely, when I have children in the future, I might teach them.

Errors: 'I became a teacher in a future' uses past tense 'became' instead of future expression; should be 'I will not become' or 'I will not be a teacher in the future' (future tense). 'my professional' is wrong word choice; use 'my profession'. Repetition 'nurse nurse' and 'no no enough' are redundant and ungrammatical; correct to 'I am a nurse' and 'do not have enough knowledge'. Fragment 'so I can I' incomplete; clarify intention: 'I might teach them'. Suggestion: use correct future forms (will + base verb) and nouns like 'profession', avoid repetition, and complete the final clause.

× Yes, I have a teacher from my past past and I still remember that there's name is Harpreet Singh. He's a math teacher teacher and he's very strict to all of the student who cannot do their work and also he he's very.

✓ Yes, I have a teacher from my past and I still remember that his name is Harpreet Singh. He was a math teacher and he was very strict with any students who could not do their work.

Problems: 'there's name is' incorrectly uses 'there's' and should be 'his name is' (possessive pronoun). 'past past' is repetition. 'teacher teacher' is repeated. Use past tense 'was' if referring to a past teacher. 'strict to all of the student' has wrong preposition and number; correct is 'strict with any students' or 'strict with all students'. The sentence ends incomplete 'and also he he's very.' Remove repetition and complete thought. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronouns, correct prepositions ('strict with'), match singular/plural, and avoid repetitions.

× No, I am not a touch any of my primary. I'm not a touch with any of my primary school teacher because because my my primary school is very far from my hometown. So that's why I cannot touch anybody.

✓ No, I am not in touch with any of my primary school teachers because my primary school is very far from my hometown. So that's why I cannot keep in touch with them.

Errors: 'I am not a touch' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'I am not in touch' or 'I am not in contact'. 'any of my primary' missing noun; use 'primary school teachers'. Repetition 'because because my my' should be single 'because my primary school'. 'cannot touch anybody' wrongly uses 'touch' for 'contact' or 'keep in touch with'; correct to 'keep in touch with them'. Suggestion: use the idiom 'in touch with' and include correct nouns and pronouns.

× There are many methods of methods when my my favorite teacher helped me a lot while I was studying. First of all he teach me about he teach me about my work and also sometime he helped me to make some of a good notes and good.

✓ There were many methods my favorite teacher used to help me while I was studying. First of all, he taught me about my work and sometimes he helped me make good notes.

Problems: 'There are many methods of methods' is redundant; use 'There were many methods' (past tense) or 'many methods my teacher used'. 'my my' repeated. Verb tense: 'he teach me' should be past 'he taught me' because referring to past help. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'helped me to make some of a good notes and good' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me make good notes'. Suggestion: use past tense when describing past events, avoid redundancy, fix word order, and use correct quantifiers like 'some' or 'good' appropriately.

× Frankly speaking, I love both of them, primary or secondary school or high school teacher, because they both are very they both are very different from each other. In a primary school, we have no knowledge about each and every single so they can teach very well. But in a high school, we have a knowledge about each and everything but but he can teach values of our money.

✓ Frankly speaking, I love both my primary and my high school teachers because they are very different from each other. In primary school, we have little knowledge about many things, so teachers can teach the basics very well. But in high school, we have more knowledge about various subjects, and teachers can teach us more advanced material and important values.

Many sentence structure and word choice errors: 'both of them, primary or secondary school or high school teacher' is confused; simplify to 'both my primary and high school teachers'. Repetition 'they both are very they both are very different' remove duplication. 'we have no knowledge about each and every single' is ungrammatical and exaggerated; use 'little knowledge about many things'. 'but but he can teach values of our money' is unclear and wrong ('values of our money' makes no sense); likely meant 'teach values' or 'teach moral values' or 'teach the value of money'. Suggestion: clarify comparisons, remove repetitions, use appropriate quantifiers ('little', 'more'), and express 'value of money' correctly if intended.