Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I did) then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid filled pauses (uh) and repetition. Mention a concrete detail about the teacher or why you liked them.

例: Yes, I did. My favourite teacher was my English teacher because she made lessons fun and inspired me to learn. For example, she used games and stories to explain grammar, which made it easier to remember and sparked my interest in languages.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then briefly explain the reason and a condition if needed. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'if' correctly. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'my English isn't very good').

例: I don't think I will become a teacher right now because my English isn't very good. However, if I improve my language skills through study and practice, I might consider teaching in the future.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific memory or example that illustrates why you remember the teacher. Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Provide one or two descriptive details linked with 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, I do. I remember my primary school teacher because she was very kind and patient. For example, she stayed after class to help me with reading, which made a big difference in my confidence.

提案: Respond clearly and sensitively. Give a brief explanation in one or two sentences with correct grammar. Avoid fragmented sentences and provide a linking phrase like 'because' or 'unfortunately'.

例: No, I'm not. Unfortunately, I'm not in contact with them because some of my former teachers have passed away, and I also moved to a different city.

提案: Make your meaning clear: explain specific ways the teacher helped you (academic, emotional, or practical). Use clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Give one concrete example of help using linking words like 'for example' or 'for instance'.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by encouraging me to read more and by giving individual feedback. For instance, she recommended simple books and praised my progress, which boosted my confidence and improved my reading skills.

提案: State your preference clearly, then give specific reasons or comparisons. Avoid vague adjectives like 'beautiful' that aren't relevant; focus on qualities such as kindness or support. Use linking words like 'because' and 'whereas' to compare.

例: I prefer my primary school teachers because they were more patient and supportive. For example, they spent more time helping students individually, whereas high school teachers focused more on exams.

× Yes, I have, uh, when I was uh, a child, uh, I uh, prefer uh, English language teacher because, uh, it is job. My dream was my dream.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child, I preferred my English teacher because that was my dream job.

Student used present tense 'have' and 'prefer' while referring to past time 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'did'/'preferred' to match the time reference. Also clarify 'English language teacher' to 'my English teacher' and 'it is job' to 'that was my dream job' for grammatical and semantic correctness.

× Uh, I think that, uh, I can't, uh, will be a teacher because my English, uh, isn't very well, but uh, if I, uh, improve my English, it is, will be.

✓ I think that I can't be a teacher because my English isn't very good, but if I improve my English, I will be able to.

Original mixes modal and future incorrectly ('can't will be'). Use 'can't be' for present inability and 'I will be able to' or 'I will be' for future possibility. Also use adjective 'good' rather than adverb 'well' to describe 'English'.

× Uh, yes, I have. Uh, I, uh, remember my, uh, story. Uh, teacher, uh, she's very kind and, uh, was clever.

✓ Yes, I do. I remember my teacher. She was very kind and clever.

Use 'do' for short answer in present ('I do' or 'yes' alone). 'Remember' can be present, but 'she's very kind and was clever' mixes present and past; choose past 'was' if referring to past teacher. Remove unnecessary filler words and correct sentence fragments 'remember my story' to 'remember my teacher' for clarity.

× No, I'm not because some teacher. Have died.

✓ No, I'm not, because some of my teachers have died.

Original is fragmented and missing preposition 'of' and subject agreement. 'Some teacher' should be 'some of my teachers' and 'Have died' should be attached to subject with correct capitalization and punctuation. Use present perfect 'have died' to indicate past events with present relevance.

× My favorite teachers always said you couldn't eat because you, you was very, you were very clever.

✓ My favorite teacher always said I couldn't eat because I was very, I was very clever.

Pronouns are confused: 'you' should be 'I' if speaking about personal experience. Subject-verb agreement 'you was' is incorrect; use 'I was'. Also 'couldn't eat' likely incorrect meaning—if intended meaning different, rephrase. Remove repetition and ensure consistent pronoun usage.

× I like primary school teachers because there is there were a lot of clever and beautiful teachers.

✓ I like primary school teachers because there were a lot of clever and kind teachers.

Original mixes 'there is' and 'there were' together. Use past 'there were' to refer to primary school period. Replace 'beautiful' with 'kind' unless appearance is intended; 'kind' better fits praise. Keep tense consistent.