Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更自然且句子更流畅，避免语法错误和重复表达。要先给出主题句，然后用最多两到三句支持细节，使用连接词如 because / so / for example 来组织信息。注意时态和数的搭配（e.g. “I’m not good at math” 而不是 “I am not a person who good at math”）。

例: Yes, my favorite teacher is my math teacher. Although I’m not very good at math, she is very patient and explains problems step by step, so I gradually gained confidence. For example, she broke down difficult questions into simple parts, which made learning much easier.

提案: 句子長度要控制在最多五句內，表達更精簡並注意語法（e.g. “major in early childhood education”）。使用連接詞如 because / and / so 並給出一個具體例子支持你的意圖，例如目前的工作怎麼幫助你。

例: Yes, I definitely want to be a teacher. I’m majoring in early childhood education and I tutor children in math and Chinese part-time, which gives me practical experience. Because of this work, I’ve learned how to explain concepts clearly and manage a small class.

提案: 避免重複並修正文法和詞彙錯誤（如 “she was so passionate” 而不是 “she is so passions”）。先說主題句，再給具體細節（她做了什麼使你記住她），用連接詞如 because / so / therefore。

例: Yes, I still remember my primary school math teacher, Linda. She was very passionate and used fun examples to explain concepts, so I gradually started to enjoy learning math. Because she encouraged me patiently, I improved my confidence in the subject.

提案: 表達可以更自然，注意時態和固定搭配（如 “I’m not in touch with her”）。先直接回答，再解釋原因和結果，用連接詞如 because / so / therefore，並給出具體例子說明她的教學如何影響你。

例: No, I’m not in touch with my primary teacher anymore because it was a long time ago. However, I still remember her teaching methods, such as breaking tasks into small steps, and I think those techniques will help me become a better teacher in the future.

提案: 句子要簡潔並修正語法（如 “she explained hard math questions in simple, step-by-step ways”）。使用具體例子說明教學方法如何幫助你，並用連接詞如 so / therefore 來表明結果。

例: She explained difficult math problems in simple, step-by-step ways and used clear examples to introduce counting concepts. As a result, I could remember methods more easily and organize my thinking logically.

提案: 回答要更凝練並注意語法和用詞（例如 “less stress” 改為 “less stressful” 或 “less pressure”）。給出具體對比細節（例如教學方式、課業負擔）並用連接詞如 because / whereas。

例: I prefer my primary school teachers because primary school was less stressful and the teaching was more relaxed. For example, teachers used playful activities which made learning enjoyable, whereas high school was more focused on exams and pressure.

× Actually I am not a person who good at math but she is very patient and she will teach me step by step and how like how to fix the problem and she always so nice to me that I made me like mad.

✓ Actually I am not a person who is good at math, but she is very patient and she teaches me step by step how to solve the problems, and she is always so nice to me that it made me very happy.

句子中缺少系动词“is”，导致定语从句不完整；另外代词和动词时态不一致（混用将来时和一般现在时），应使用一般现在时描述习惯性动作（she teaches）。“how like how to fix the problem”是不自然的表达，应改为“how to solve the problems”。最后“made me like mad”语义错误，原意应为感到高兴或敬佩，用“made me very happy”。建议：在定语从句中使用完整的动词结构（who is good），描述习惯性行为用一般现在时，避免口语化重复短语，选择恰当形容词表达情感。

× Now I'm a university student major and early childhood education and I also have a part time job tutoring student in subject like math and Chinese and this also I want to become a teacher down the road and.

✓ Now I'm a university student majoring in Early Childhood Education and I also have a part-time job tutoring students in subjects like Math and Chinese, and I want to become a teacher down the road.

原句中时态和动词形式错误：‘major and early childhood education’应为现在分词短语‘majoring in’来表示正在学习的专业；‘tutoring student’应为复数‘students’；‘subject like’应为复数‘subjects like’。句末多余连词‘and’应删除。建议：描述当前状态用现在分词或现在时，注意名词单复数一致，句子结尾避免残缺从句。

× Yes, as I say is my math teacher. Her English name is Linda. She is my primary school teachers.

✓ Yes, as I said, it is my math teacher. Her English name is Linda. She was my primary school teacher.

第一句时态和代词不当，‘as I say’应为过去说过的事实用过去式‘as I said’或持续情况用现在完成，后接主语宾语关系应为‘it is my math teacher’或‘it was…’. 第二句‘She is my primary school teachers’人称数不一致，teacher应为单数且若指过去应使用过去时‘was’。建议：注意代词指代清晰，主谓数一致，并根据时间背景选择正确时态。

× As I say I'm not a person who good at math, but she is so passions that I can gradually accept to like learning the news mass.

✓ As I said, I'm not a person who is good at math, but she is so passionate that I gradually came to enjoy learning new math.

‘who good at math’缺少系动词'is'；‘so passions’误用名词复数，应为形容词‘so passionate’；‘accept to like learning the news mass’结构不正确，意思应为逐渐喜欢上学数学，改为‘gradually came to enjoy learning new math’或更自然的表达。建议：区分形容词与名词，注意固定短语（come to enjoy），使用正确词序。

× Sadly no I'm not keep in touch with my primary teacher now because it's long time ago, but I still remember her teaching skill and I think these things will help me a lot and made me become a better teacher.

✓ Sadly no, I'm not in touch with my primary teacher now because it was a long time ago, but I still remember her teaching skills and I think these things will help me a lot and make me become a better teacher.

原句中动词短语不正确：‘I'm not keep in touch’应为被动态或固定短语‘I'm not in touch’；时间表达应使用过去时‘it was a long time ago’而不是现在时；‘teaching skill’应为复数‘teaching skills’；‘made me become’时态不一致，应用将来/现在表结果‘make me become’或‘have made me become’。建议：使用固定搭配‘be in touch’，时间描述与动词时态一致，主谓和数的一致性。

× She always explained the hard math question is very leveled ways like she was use very easy way to introduce the concept of the counting skill to us, so I can easily memorize and organize the logic.

✓ She always explained hard math questions in very simple ways; she used very easy methods to introduce counting concepts to us, so I could easily remember and organize the logic.

原句中动名词及短语使用错误：‘explained the hard math question is very leveled ways’语序混乱，应用‘explained ... in ... ways’结构；‘she was use’时态和语态错误，应为过去时‘she used’或过去进行时视上下文；‘memorize and organize the logic’叙述过去经历可用过去时‘could easily remember and organize the logic’。建议：注意动词+介词短语的固定搭配，保持时态一致，名词复数与可数名词一致（questions，methods）。

× I would say yes because in my primary school life is more like less stress so in that time I was learning in a chill and relaxing way. So I think that's one of the reason I think I'm like my primary school still teachers more.

✓ I would say yes because my primary school life had less stress, so at that time I was learning in a chill and relaxed way. So I think that's one of the reasons I like my primary school teachers more.

原句时态和形容词形式错误：描述过去的经历应使用过去时‘had less stress’；‘learning in a chill and relaxing way’形容词配对更自然为‘chill and relaxed’；‘one of the reason’应为复数‘one of the reasons’；‘I'm like my primary school still teachers more’语序混乱且代词错误，应为‘I like my primary school teachers more’。建议：描述过去用过去时，注意形容词形式，固定搭配‘one of the reasons’，保证主谓宾顺序清晰和复数一致。