Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and include one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was my research advisor during my final years at university. He supported me a great deal by teaching research methodology and practical skills, and he also helped me improve my time-management. Because of his guidance I completed my project on time and learned how to plan my work effectively.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, correct key vocabulary and reduce hesitations. Use linking words to explain reasons and provide a brief alternative preference. Fix pronunciation-related word choices (career) and verb agreement.

例: No, I don't. I would not like to be a teacher because I dislike repeating the same material every day. Instead, I prefer a career that offers variety and new challenges, where I can work on different goals and with diverse people.

提案: Be more fluent and correct grammar; use linking words and specific examples. Correct mistakes (a/my, role play) and avoid trailing fragments. Keep answer concise and structured: topic sentence + two supporting details.

例: Yes, I still remember my high-school English teacher, Mrs. Ganzana. She made lessons very interesting by using role-play and games, and she encouraged us to speak aloud in class, which improved my confidence.

提案: Give a clear, concise answer and explain briefly with coherent reasons. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. State when and why contact stopped using simple, accurate vocabulary and one linking phrase.

例: No, I'm not. I lost touch with my primary school teachers because many years have passed and I moved to a different town, so we lost contact.

提案: Use correct verb forms and organize details logically. Start with a topic sentence then give specific examples with linking words. Replace vague phrases with concrete outcomes and avoid fillers.

例: He helped me improve both academic and personal skills. For example, he provided textbooks, journal articles and step-by-step research methodology guides, which helped me design my study and write a clear research report.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two clear reasons using linking words. Correct grammar (teachers, college?) and be specific about memories or activities. Keep sentences concise and coherent.

例: I prefer my high-school teachers because I have stronger memories of that time. The atmosphere with my friends was more enjoyable, and the teachers involved us in more activities, which made learning fun.

× My favorite teacher was my research advisor in the final years in my university.

✓ My favorite teacher was my research advisor in my final years at university.

Use of articles and prepositions: 'in my university' is awkward; use 'at university' or 'at my university'. Also 'the final years in my university' is better as 'my final years at university' for natural phrasing. Tense 'was' is correct because it refers to past period.

× He support me a lot and taught me not only in academic subject like methodology of research but also he taught me about time management.

✓ He supported me a lot and taught me not only academic subjects like research methodology but also about time management.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'He support' should be past 'He supported' to match 'taught'. Also pluralize 'subject' to 'subjects'. Word order: 'methodology of research' is more natural as 'research methodology'. Remove redundant 'he taught me' repetition and simplify.

× I suppose not.

✓ I suppose not.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It uses present simple correctly to express attitude.

× I do not want to be a teacher because I don't enjoy repeating, uh, the material, the same material every day.

✓ I do not want to be a teacher because I don't enjoy repeating the same material every day.

Remove filler and extra commas. 'Repeating the same material' is correct gerund phrase. Keep verb forms consistent.

× I prefer a carrier that offer a variety and different in the new goal or new child.

✓ I prefer a career that offers variety and different goals or different children.

Multiple issues: 'carrier' should be 'career'. Subject-verb agreement: 'that offers' (third person singular). 'a variety' can be 'variety' without article. 'different in the new goal or new child' is unclear; likely means 'different goals or different children' if referring to teaching different students. Make nouns parallel.

× Yes, 1 teacher I still remember is Mrs. Ganzana.

✓ Yes, one teacher I still remember is Mrs. Ganzana.

Use the word 'one' not digit '1' in formal writing. Sentence otherwise okay.

× She was a my English teacher at high school and made lesson very interesting.

✓ She was my English teacher at high school and made lessons very interesting.

Remove extra article 'a' before 'my'. Pluralize 'lesson' to 'lessons'. 'At high school' is acceptable; could also be 'in high school'.

× She encouraged me to speak loud in class and often use role pay and games to build our confidence.

✓ She encouraged me to speak loudly in class and often used role play and games to build our confidence.

'Speak loudly' uses adverb form. 'Encouraged me to speak' is fine, but parallelism demands past tense 'often used' to match 'encouraged'. 'Role pay' should be 'role play'.

× So this she is my English.

✓ So she is my English teacher.

Word order and missing noun: 'this she is my English' is ungrammatical. Correct order: 'So she is my English teacher.'

× No, I I do not still in touch with my teacher with my teacher, especially primary school because it's just a long year that I moved to non tabooly not used into Norcons 1 and I think it's just.

✓ No, I am not still in touch with my teachers, especially my primary school teachers, because many years have passed since I moved and I no longer use the language in that context.

Major sentence structure and tense issues. Use 'I am not in touch' (verb 'to be' + preposition). Plural 'teachers'. Clarify time: 'many years have passed' instead of 'a long year'. Remove unclear fragments 'non tabooly' and 'Norcons 1' and replace with clear explanation 'I no longer use the language in that context.' Keep tense present perfect to indicate time elapsed.

× My favorite teacher helped me improve both personal and academic skills.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me improve both my personal and academic skills.

Add possessive 'my' for clarity. Past tense 'helped' is correct.

× For example, he provide a range of materials and clinical research methodology guides, textbooks or even journal article.

✓ For example, he provided a range of materials and clinical research methodology guides, textbooks, or even journal articles.

Past tense 'provided' to match 'helped'. Pluralize 'article' to 'articles'. Add commas for clarity.

× Give me uh, get intro step by step.

✓ He gave me step-by-step introductions and guidance.

Original is fragmented and lacks subject. Use past tense 'gave' and hyphenated 'step-by-step' and provide clear noun 'introductions and guidance'.

× I prefer my high school teacher because I have stronger memories of high school with the atmosphere my friends and I think that were more enjoyable than primary school and the teacher and college me in activity.

✓ I prefer my high school teachers because I have stronger memories of high school, the atmosphere, and my friends; I think those were more enjoyable than primary school, and the teachers involved us in activities.

Multiple issues: pluralize 'teachers'. Improve sentence structure and parallelism. 'The teacher and college me in activity' is unclear; likely means 'the teachers involved us in activities.' Use past tense 'involved' and plural 'activities'.