Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用更自然、简洁的句子并修正语法错误；使用连接词使回答更连贯；提供更具体的例子说明老师的教法如何帮助记忆。注意句子数量不超过5句。

例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my secondary school English teacher because she used fun activities to help us remember vocabulary. For example, she ran short role-plays and word games that made new phrases stick. Her energetic style made lessons enjoyable, so I felt more confident using English.

提案: 回答要更直接并组织成主题句加具体原因；用连接词（for example, however）使结构清晰；减少填充词并控制句子长度，每句明确表达一个观点。

例: I'm not sure. I enjoy helping others learn because it feels rewarding; however, I worry about having to repeat explanations often, which can be tiring. If I become a teacher, I would try to use varied methods to keep lessons engaging.

提案: 避免重复，先给主题句说明是哪位老师，再用具体事例说明她如何帮助你；使用过去时和条件句保持时态一致；压缩为不超过5句。

例: Yes. I still remember my secondary school Chinese teacher because she supported me during exam stress. For instance, she stayed after class to explain difficult topics and gave useful study plans, which calmed me down and improved my grades.

提案: 用更自然表达解释原因并用条件句说明愿望；修正语法（haven't been in touch）；减少冗余并用连接词使句子流畅。

例: No, I haven't been in touch with them because primary school was a long time ago. However, if I get the chance, I would like to visit them because I think they would appreciate seeing former students.

提案: 修正语法和用词（eg. 'think all the things in the bad way' unclear）；用具体例子说明帮助的方式（例如纠正发音、提供学习策略）；用连接词列出几个具体帮助点，控制句数。

例: She helped me in several ways. For example, she corrected my pronunciation during speaking practice and gave me clear strategies for remembering vocabulary, which reduced my stress and improved my confidence.

提案: 这段表达混乱且含糊，应先给直接答案，再用1–2句具体说明原因；修正词汇错误（bought→both）和代词；避免重复并使用连接词如 'because' 或 'both'.

例: No, I don't prefer one group over the other because I appreciate teachers from both stages. Both my primary and high school teachers taught me important things: primary teachers built my basics, while high school teachers helped me develop study skills.

× She is very funny and us always use a lot a lot of different approach to help me to remember a lot of different phrases and vocabulary and I like it very much.

✓ She is very funny and always uses a lot of different approaches to help me remember many phrases and vocabulary, and I like her very much.

原句中“us”用法错误，應為主語“she”或動詞形式；此外有主謂一致和可數名詞複數形式問題。修改要點：1) 把“us”改為句子主語“she”或刪除，使動詞與主語一致；2) “use”改為“uses”以符合第三人稱單數；3) “a lot a lot of different approach”改為“a lot of different approaches”使“approach”變複數；4) 刪去多餘的“to”使“help me remember”成為正確的動詞短語；5) 用“many phrases and vocabulary”或“a lot of vocabulary”更自然；6) 最後表達喜歡老師用“like her”而不是“like it”。建議平時注意主語與動詞的一致，代詞要正確指代，名詞單復數要匹配。

× To be honest I'm not sure because sometime when I help people to solve the problems and help them to learn new things, I feel really happy of it.

✓ To be honest, I'm not sure, because sometimes when I help people solve problems and help them learn new things, I feel really happy about it.

原句有時態和詞形小錯誤：1) “sometime”應為頻率副詞“sometimes”；2) 不需要“to”在“help people to solve”中，可用“help people solve”；3) “the problems”改為泛指“problems”；4) “feel really happy of it”應為“feel really happy about it”。建議：注意副詞形式（sometime vs sometimes），固定搭配（help someone do sth），以及介詞搭配（happy about sth）。

× But as some time umm I need to keep repeat and repeat to explain something, I feel tired.

✓ But sometimes I need to keep repeating myself to explain something, and I feel tired.

錯誤點：1) “some time”應為頻率副詞“sometimes”；2) “keep repeat and repeat”語法不正確，應用動名詞“keep repeating”或“repeat something again and again”；3) 若強調是自己反覆解釋，可用“keep repeating myself”；4) 連接詞和標點改善為“and”。建議：注意使用正確的副詞形式與動名詞結構來表達持續動作。

× Yes, I remember a lot of good teachers and one is my Chinese teacher in my secondary school because she helped me a lot and when I feel confused and stressed about my exam, she will help me.

✓ Yes, I remember a lot of good teachers, and one is my Chinese teacher from secondary school because she helped me a lot, and when I felt confused and stressed about my exams, she helped me.

原句存在時態不一致和代詞指代時間錯亂：1) 前半使用過去經驗應用過去時，“she helped me a lot”是對的，但後半用“when I feel ... she will help me”把敘述變為將來，與回憶不符。應統一為過去時例如“when I felt... she helped me”。2) “my exam”改為複數或具體“my exams”更自然。建議：敘述過去經驗時保持過去時一致，注意時間表達的一致性。

× No, because actually for me is a very long time ago, so I haven't in touch with them, but I hope that if I have a chance I will go to visit them and I think they will appreciate it.

✓ No, because for me it was a very long time ago, so I haven't been in touch with them, but I hope that if I have the chance I will go and visit them, and I think they would appreciate it.

錯誤與建議：1) “for me is a very long time ago”語序與時態錯誤，應為“for me it was a very long time ago”；2) “I haven't in touch with them”缺少助動詞和過去分詞，正確為“I haven't been in touch with them”；3) “if I have a chance”用“the chance”或“the opportunity”更自然；4) “I think they will appreciate it”若為假設，使用“would appreciate it”更禮貌且與“if I have the chance”搭配。建議注意助動詞和完成時結構，以及時態與語氣的一致。

× My favorite teacher helped me to solve the problems and also help me to think all the things in the bad way when I feel stressed, just like she would help me to fix my pronunciation and I really thanks.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me solve problems and also helped me to look at things from a different perspective when I felt stressed. She also helped me improve my pronunciation, and I really thank her.

錯誤點：1) 時態不一致，敘述過去經驗應統一用過去時，“helped”而不是混用“help”或“would help”；2) “think all the things in the bad way”表達不自然，改為“look at things from a different perspective”或“not think negatively”；3) “when I feel stressed”改為過去時“when I felt stressed”；4) “I really thanks”錯誤，應為“I really thank her”或“I am really thankful”。建議：保持時態一致，使用自然習慣搭配，代詞和動詞形式要正確。

× No, I think, umm, I bought 3. Thankful for my primary teachers and high school teacher. I don't have a teacher that I love, he or he more. And yeah, I both love them very much.

✓ No, I think, umm, I have three. I'm thankful for my primary teachers and my high school teacher. I don't have a teacher that I love more than the others. I love them both very much.

多個錯誤：1) “I bought 3”拼寫和用詞錯誤，應為“I have three”或“I meant three”表示數量；2) “Thankful for...”缺主語，應為“I'm thankful for...”；3) “I don't have a teacher that I love, he or he more”代詞和比較結構錯誤，應為“I don't have a teacher that I love more than the others”或“I don't love one more than the others”；4) “I both love them very much”若指兩類老師可用“I love them both very much”。建議：注意動詞和主語、代詞指代及比較結構的正確表達。