Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make sentences more natural and grammatically correct, use linking words, and be slightly more specific. Keep to under five sentences. Correct plural/singular and tense errors (e.g., use "uses games and real-life topics"). Add one concrete example of a classroom activity.

例: Yes — my favourite teacher is my English teacher because she makes learning fun and engaging. For example, she often uses games and real-life topics, such as role-plays about ordering food, which help me practice speaking. As a result, I feel more confident speaking in class.

提案: Good direct response and clear reasons. Improve by adding a linking phrase and a specific brief example to support your lack of confidence. Keep it concise and natural (avoid repetition like "leading group or giving lessons").

例: No, I don't think so because I don't feel confident explaining things clearly. For instance, when I tried to lead a group project at school, I struggled to give clear instructions and felt anxious, so I prefer other roles.

提案: Improve grammar and add linking words and one specific memory or activity to make the answer more vivid. Correct plural/singular errors ("games", "things") and consider adding a short result sentence.

例: Yes — I remember Miss Benjamin, who was very confident and energetic. She frequently used games in class, such as vocabulary competitions, which made lessons fun and helped me remember words much better.

提案: Fix tense and grammar (use present perfect/ past simple correctly) and use linking words to connect reasons. Be concise and specific about when you moved or how contact was lost.

例: No, I haven't kept in touch with them. I moved to a different city after primary school, so over time we gradually lost contact and haven't stayed in touch since.

提案: Clarify unclear phrases ("low pay activity" unclear) and correct grammar ("mistake" → "mistakes"). Use linking words and give a specific example of an activity and measurable result. Keep within five sentences.

例: She helped me improve my English and become more confident speaking it. For example, she used low-pressure speaking activities, like short pair conversations, and gave encouraging feedback after every class, which made me less afraid of making mistakes. As a result, I now speak more in class and volunteer answers regularly.

提案: This answer has several grammar and clarity issues. Fix tense and agreement ("I prefer my high school teachers"), avoid vague phrases ("sticker", "this cut line"), use linking words and give one clear, specific contrast example. Keep to fewer than five sentences.

例: I prefer my high school teachers because, as I grew older, they gave me more freedom and encouraged independent thinking. In contrast, my primary school teachers were stricter and focused more on rules; for example, in primary school we had to line up quietly before every lesson, which felt rigid.

× For example, she used game and real life topic that helped me practice speaking.

✓ For example, she used games and real-life topics that helped me practice speaking.

Countable nouns 'game' and 'topic' need plural forms when referring to more than one; 'real life' as a compound adjective should be hyphenated: 'real-life'. Using plural nouns matches the intended meaning and keeps noun forms consistent with 'used'. Suggestion: Use plural for countable things and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns, e.g., 'games' and 'real-life topics'.

× I don't feel confident enough to explain things clearly and have never enjoyed leading group or giving lessons.

✓ I don't feel confident enough to explain things clearly and have never enjoyed leading groups or giving lessons.

The noun 'group' is countable and here refers to group activities in general, so it should be plural 'groups'. Parallel structure requires both objects to be in compatible forms. Suggestion: Use plural 'groups' when speaking generally about leading more than one group.

× Yes, her name was Miss Benjamin and she was very confident and energetic.

✓ Yes, her name was Miss Benjamin, and she was very confident and energetic.

This sentence mainly needs a comma before the conjunction for readability; grammatically it's acceptable. No article error; however, repositioning punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'and' when joining two independent clauses.

× She frequently used game in class which made lessons fun and helped me remember thing much better.

✓ She frequently used games in class, which made lessons fun and helped me remember things much better.

'Game' and 'thing' are countable nouns that should be plural when speaking generally: 'games', 'things'. Also add a comma before 'which' to separate the nonrestrictive clause. Suggestion: Make countable nouns plural in general statements and use a comma before 'which'.

× It has been a long time and I have not keep in touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ It has been a long time, and I have not kept in touch with my primary school teachers.

After 'have' the past participle 'kept' is required (present perfect). 'Keep' is base form and incorrect here. Suggestion: Use present perfect correctly: 'have kept'.

× I move to a different city after primary school so we gradually lost contact.

✓ I moved to a different city after primary school, so we gradually lost contact.

The action of relocating is in the past, so the past tense 'moved' is required instead of 'move'. A comma before 'so' improves clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense for completed actions in the past: 'moved'.

× For example, she used low pay activity and gave encouraging feedback after every class, which made me less afraid of making mistake.

✓ For example, she used low-pressure activities and gave encouraging feedback after every class, which made me less afraid of making mistakes.

'Low pay activity' is incorrect and probably intended as 'low-pressure activities' (adjective choice). 'Activity' should be plural 'activities' if general, and 'mistake' should be plural 'mistakes'. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjectives ('low-pressure') and plural nouns when generalizing ('activities', 'mistakes').

× Because of her support, I am now speaking more.

✓ Because of her support, I now speak more confidently.

'Speaking more' is vague; to match meaning and natural present-tense state, use 'speak more confidently' or 'speak more often'. Also 'am now speaking more' is a continuous form that is less natural here. Suggestion: Use simple present for general states: 'I now speak more confidently.'

× I preferred my high school teacher as I grew older they gave me more freedom and encouraged me to think for myself.

✓ I preferred my high school teachers; as I grew older, they gave me more freedom and encouraged me to think for myself.

Subject 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'they'. Add punctuation and a comma after the subordinate clause 'as I grew older'. Suggestion: Ensure subjects and pronouns agree in number and use commas to separate clauses.

× Whereas my primary school teacher were sticker and more focused on this cut line.

✓ Whereas my primary school teachers were stricter and more focused on discipline.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match context; 'sticker' is incorrect word choice — likely intended 'stricter'. 'This cut line' is unclear; probably meant 'discipline' or 'rules'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective 'stricter' and clearer noun 'discipline' or 'rules'.

× For example, my high school tea English teacher.

✓ For example, my high school English teacher did this.

Original fragment lacks a verb and is incomplete. Add a verb to form a complete sentence and clarify the example. Suggestion: Ensure each sentence has a subject and verb; revise fragments into full sentences such as 'For example, my high school English teacher did this.'