Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and consistent: start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, use consistent pronouns, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher at school was Mrs. Patel because she was kind and very hardworking. For example, she stayed after class to help students who were struggling, so I always felt supported. Because of her patience, I understood difficult lessons much better.

提案: Give a direct reason and support it with a clear, specific detail. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'teachers gets', 'it slips'). Use linking words to connect idea and keep the answer under five sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy helping others learn. For instance, when I explain a topic clearly and students understand, I feel more confident and respected. Therefore, teaching would be a rewarding career for me.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence naming the teacher, then add specific examples of what she did and use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'topics' not 'toppings'). Use linking words like 'for example' and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I still remember my primary teacher, Miss Ashish, because she was very patient and hardworking. For example, she often stayed after lessons to help students who didn’t understand difficult topics, and she explained things step by step so everyone could follow.

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with concise phrasing. Correct common errors (e.g., 'I am not in touch', 'university work', 'household chores') and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep within three sentences.

例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I am very busy with university work and household chores. As a result, I rarely have time to call or message them.

提案: Give a focused answer describing a specific way the teacher helped you, with one clear example. Use correct grammar (singular/plural agreement) and linking words like 'for example' or 'because'. Avoid repetition.

例: My favourite teacher helped me by explaining difficult topics patiently, which made challenging subjects much easier to understand. For example, she broke complex concepts into simple steps and gave extra practice, so I could improve my grades.

× Yes, of course, I have a favorite, my favorite in my school, which is very kind and very hardworking.

✓ Yes, of course, I have a favourite teacher at my school who is very kind and hardworking.

The original sentence misuses the relative pronoun 'which' for a person and repeats 'favorite'. Use 'who' for people and simplify phrasing. Also 'in my school' is better as 'at my school'. Use: 'who' for people and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× He gives me all of his effort to study good for study ourselves.

✓ He puts a lot of effort into helping me study well.

The original has subject-verb and collocation problems: 'gives me all of his effort' is unnatural and 'to study good' mixes adjective for adverb. Correct verb phrase is 'puts effort into' and use adverb 'well'. Also 'helping me study' clarifies purpose.

× So it's a good teacher.

✓ So he is a good teacher.

The original 'it's a good teacher' uses 'it' for a person. Replace with appropriate pronoun 'he' to match the teacher. Ensure clear subject reference.

× I remember he I remember my teachers very long time.

✓ I have remembered my teachers for a very long time.

The original repeats fragments and uses incorrect tense and pronoun. Use present perfect 'have remembered' to express continuing memory and 'for a very long time' for duration.

× She is very nice person.

✓ She is a very nice person.

Missing article 'a' before 'very nice person'. Also keep pronoun 'she' is fine. This is an article error but also pronoun line; correction adds 'a'.

× Yes, I want to be a teacher because I think teachers gets more confident about their jobs it slips a very good reputation and I think teachers gain the very good reputation in the school when they teach someone the.

✓ Yes, I want to be a teacher because I think teachers become more confident in their jobs and gain a good reputation at school when they teach others.

Multiple errors: 'teachers gets' should be 'teachers get' or rephrased; use 'become' or 'get' for change of state. 'about their jobs it slips a very good reputation' is unclear; rephrase to 'gain a good reputation at school'. 'teach someone the' is incomplete — use 'teach others'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and clearer phrasing.

× Yes, I remember my teacher which is I remember my teacher which is the name was Miss Ashish.

✓ Yes, I remember a teacher from the past; her name was Miss Ashish.

Avoid using 'which' for people and remove repetition. Use correct pronoun 'her' and a concise structure: 'her name was ...'. This fixes pronoun and structure problems.

× She was very kind and hardworking teacher and she explained difficult toppings, difficult, difficult topic very patiently.

✓ She was a very kind and hardworking teacher, and she explained difficult topics very patiently.

Missing article 'a' before 'teacher'. 'toppings' is wrong word; should be 'topics'. Remove repetition and ensure plural 'topics' if referring to multiple. Keep adverb 'very patiently' correctly placed.

× She's staying in the class after finishing our lectures to help the student which was which not understand properly.

✓ She stayed in the class after finishing our lessons to help students who did not understand properly.

The student used present continuous 'She's staying' incorrectly for a past habitual action; past simple 'stayed' fits the context. Use 'lessons' or 'lectures' consistently. Use 'students who did not understand' instead of 'which' and correct tense for understanding.

× Not at all. I am no touch with my primary school teacher because I am very busy.

✓ Not at all. I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because I am very busy.

Incorrect phrase 'no touch' should be 'not in touch'. 'In touch with' is the correct collocation. Keep articles as needed.

× I am very busy to in my universities works and other home chores.

✓ I am very busy with my university work and other household chores.

Use 'busy with' rather than 'busy to in'. 'universities works' is incorrect; use 'university work' (singular or uncountable). 'home chores' is better as 'household chores'. Adjust prepositions and noun forms.

× So I think I it still gives a It gives a time when we teach when we call with the teacher.

✓ So I think there is rarely time to call or speak with a teacher.

Original is incoherent. Rephrase to express the idea that there is little time to contact teachers. Use 'there is' for existence and 'call or speak with' for contact.

× So I don't have enough time to call or message in a with my.

✓ So I don't have enough time to call or message them.

Remove extra words and complete the object 'them' referring to teachers. Simplify to clear, grammatical sentence.

× I think I think teachers is a very teachers is very important role in our lives and the teachers who explain difficult topics very patiently is a good teachers she because any hard teachers we could not easily reading the subject, so good teacher always remember.

✓ I think teachers play a very important role in our lives, and teachers who explain difficult topics patiently are good teachers because without good teachers we could not learn subjects easily, so we always remember good teachers.

Many number and agreement errors: 'teachers is a very teachers is very important role' should be 'teachers play a very important role'. Use plural agreement 'teachers ... are good teachers'. 'reading the subject' is incorrect; use 'learn subjects'. Provide clearer connectors and correct noun/verb agreement.