Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler words, and give one or two specific details about why you liked her (for example what she did in class). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: Yes, I do. My favourite teacher at university was my English professor because she always encouraged us to ask questions and think independently. For example, she set weekly discussion groups that helped me become more confident speaking.

提案: Give a direct answer then support with a clear reason and one specific example of what you enjoy about teaching. Remove repetitions and unnecessary hesitations. Keep it to two or three sentences with linking words like "because" or "so."

例: Yes, I would like to be a full-time teacher in the future because I enjoy helping people learn. For instance, in my current role as a tutor I find it rewarding when students understand a difficult concept after I explain it.

提案: Answer directly and reduce repetition. State who the teacher was and one memorable action or lesson. Use precise language and a linking word to connect the reason you remember her.

例: Yes, I still remember my university supervisor because she encouraged independent thinking. For example, she regularly assigned open-ended projects that required us to develop our own arguments and research.

提案: Be clear and concise. Say "No" then give a brief reason and, if possible, mention a short circumstance or what you would do to reconnect. Avoid incomplete sentences and filler phrases.

例: No, I'm not. I lost contact with them after I graduated and I don't have their phone numbers anymore, so it's difficult to keep in touch. If I wanted to reconnect, I would try to contact the school office or search for alumni groups online.

提案: Provide a specific example of help and use correct pronouns and phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete example of how she helped (e.g., extra lessons, feedback). Use linking words like "for example" or "such as."

例: She helped me improve my language skills by offering extra practice and detailed feedback. For example, she gave me weekly writing assignments and reviewed them with me, which helped me correct mistakes and build confidence.

× She was a a professional in my universities, my university, umm, she was my best love teacher because they always encouraged me to uh, ask questions and think for myself.

✓ She was a professional at my university; she was my favorite teacher because she always encouraged me to ask questions and think for myself.

Errors: duplicated article 'a a', incorrect plural 'universities' and awkward phrase 'best love teacher', and pronoun disagreement 'they' referring to one teacher. Use singular 'university' with preposition 'at' and 'favorite teacher' instead of 'best love teacher'. Use 'she' to refer to the single teacher. Remove filler words. Suggestion: say 'She was a professional at my university; she was my favorite teacher because she always encouraged me to ask questions and think for myself.'

× Actually, I, I'm currently working as a patron, patron Alexis, so I also want to be a full time teacher in the future because I enjoy, uh, I enjoy teaching, teaching everyone and enjoying, umm, teaching others to learn.

✓ Actually, I'm currently working as a patron at Alexis, so I also want to be a full-time teacher in the future because I enjoy teaching and helping others learn.

Errors: repetition and unclear phrase 'patron, patron Alexis'; missing preposition 'at' before place name; 'full time' should be hyphenated as 'full-time' when used as an adjective; unnecessary repetition 'I enjoy, I enjoy' and awkward 'enjoying, teaching others to learn.' Simplify to a clear structure: 'I enjoy teaching and helping others learn.'

× Yes, I definitely have a teacher that I, I, I recently remember until now, she was served professional in my, at my university.

✓ Yes, I definitely have a teacher whom I still remember; she was a professional at my university.

Errors: awkward 'that I recently remember until now' — use 'whom I still remember' or 'I still remember'; 'served professional' is incorrect; use 'was a professional' and preposition 'at my university.' Also remove repeated filler words. Suggestion: 'whom I still remember' or 'I still remember.'

× She was in a class of her room and she always, uh, encouraged me to think for myself.

✓ She taught a class in her room, and she always encouraged me to think for myself.

Errors: 'in a class of her room' is ungrammatical. Better: 'taught a class in her room' or 'held classes in her classroom.' Remove filler 'uh'. Maintain past tense 'taught' to match context.

× No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teacher because I lost contact. I lost consult after I graduated from my school so I don't have any information on their phone number so it's hard to keep in touch with them. But.

✓ No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost contact after I graduated, and I don't have their phone numbers, so it's hard to keep in touch with them.

Errors: tense and word choice: 'I lost contact' is acceptable but 'I lost consult' is incorrect—use 'lost contact after I graduated.' 'My school' can be omitted. 'Their phone number' should be plural 'their phone numbers' when referring to multiple teachers. Combine fragments and remove trailing 'But.'

× She encouraged me to learn language, uh, languages. So she always pushed myself and gave the extra mile to uh to help me learn, uh, learn something I am not good at and give me some useful.

✓ She encouraged me to learn languages. She always pushed me and went the extra mile to help me learn things I was not good at and gave me useful advice.

Errors: 'learn language, languages' inconsistent; reflexive use 'pushed myself' is wrong—should be 'pushed me' (incorrect reflexive pronoun relates to type 15 but here fix). 'Gave the extra mile' incorrect verb collocation—use 'went the extra mile.' 'Learn something I am not good at' should use past 'was not good at' to match context. 'Give me some useful' incomplete; specify 'gave me useful advice' or 'help.' Suggestions: use correct object pronoun, correct collocations, and consistent tense.