Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency by finishing sentences and avoiding repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “for instance” or “because”). Also correct small grammar issues and avoid repeating ideas (e.g., ‘inspired me’ and ‘encouraged me’ convey similar points). Keep responses to a maximum of 4–5 concise sentences.

例: Yes — my favorite teacher was my high-school English teacher because she made lessons fun and encouraged independent thinking. For instance, she used role-plays and group projects that helped me speak more confidently. Because she was patient and gave useful feedback, I still remember many of her teaching methods and try to apply them whenever I study English.

提案: Polish grammar and sentence structure: use correct forms (e.g., “a part-time tutor”), and link ideas clearly with connectors like “because” or “however.” Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples. Avoid adding contrasting ideas unless you explain them with reasons.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because I find teaching rewarding and I enjoy helping others. Currently I work as a part-time tutor, and for example I helped a student improve their grades by designing weekly practice tests. However, I know teaching can be demanding, so I plan to learn classroom management techniques before taking a full-time role.

提案: Avoid repeating information already given (this repeats the favorite teacher answer). Provide one new specific memory or example that shows why you remember them. Use past-tense consistently and link sentences (for example, “for example,” “because”). Keep it concise and grammatically correct (e.g., “encouraged me”).

例: Yes — my high-school English teacher stands out because she used unusual activities to teach grammar. For example, she organised weekly debates and creative-writing workshops that made me more confident speaking and writing. Because of those activities, I became more motivated to study languages.

提案: Good clear answer and reasons. To improve further, add a brief linking phrase and a concluding remark or example (e.g., a specific reason why you didn’t keep in touch). Keep sentences varied and avoid small filler words.

例: No, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers because I lost contact after graduation. For example, I moved cities for university and several teachers retired, so we simply drifted apart. I do sometimes think about contacting the school to send a thank-you note.

提案: Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., ‘inspired me to love learning’, ‘encouraged me to ask questions’, ‘sparked my interest’). Provide one specific example of help (e.g., a method, feedback, or a particular assignment) and use linking words like “for example” or “because.” Limit to 3–4 clear sentences.

例: She inspired me to love learning by making lessons interactive and giving personalised feedback. For example, she corrected my essays with helpful comments and suggested books to read, which boosted my confidence. Because of her encouragement, I started asking more questions in class and improved quickly.

× She really inspired me to work harder and.

✓ She really inspired me to work harder.

The sentence ends with a conjunction 'and' but lacks the clause that follows, making it an incomplete sentence (sentence structure error). Remove the dangling 'and' to complete the thought. Suggestion: ensure every coordinating conjunction connects two clauses or phrases.

× I'm currently working as a part time in the tutor for students and I find it incredibly rewarding.

✓ I'm currently working part-time as a tutor for students, and I find it incredibly rewarding.

Incorrect article and word order: 'a part time in the tutor' is ungrammatical. Use the compound adjective 'part-time' and the noun 'a tutor' with correct preposition order (working part-time as a tutor). Also add a comma before 'and' for readability.

× I really enjoy helping others learn new things and I think teachers can have a huge impact on student lives, although teaching can be stressful and demanding.

✓ I really enjoy helping others learn new things, and I think teachers can have a huge impact on students' lives, although teaching can be stressful and demanding.

The phrase 'student lives' should show possession, so use the plural possessive 'students' lives' (students' lives) to indicate the lives that belong to students (subject-verb agreement/possessive form). Also add a comma before 'and' to separate clauses.

× She really inspired me to love learning languages and always encourage me to push myself.

✓ She really inspired me to love learning languages and always encouraged me to push myself.

Mismatch in verb tense: 'inspired' is past tense, so the coordinated verb should also be past tense ('encouraged') to maintain parallel structure. Use consistent past tense for actions that happened in the past.

× My favorite teacher is spined me to love learning.

✓ My favorite teacher inspired me to love learning.

'Spined' is incorrect; the correct past tense of 'inspire' is 'inspired'. Use the proper past tense verb form to describe a past action. Also change 'is inspired me' to just 'inspired me' for grammatical correctness.

× She always encouraged me to ask questions and make me feel confident about my abilities.

✓ She always encouraged me to ask questions and made me feel confident about my abilities.

Parallelism and pronoun usage: after 'encouraged me to ask questions and...', the second verb should match past tense and include the subject's effect on the object: 'made me feel' is correct. Using 'make me feel' mixes present with past and breaks parallel structure.

× Her passion for each subject was contagious and it really sparked me on interest in learning.

✓ Her passion for each subject was contagious, and it really sparked my interest in learning.

Incorrect preposition and pronoun: 'sparked me on interest' is incorrect. Use the collocation 'sparked my interest' to indicate that something caused interest in the speaker. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity.