Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Avoid repetition and minor grammar mistakes, and make the response slightly more concise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was Miss Sonika, who taught biology. She explained difficult concepts clearly and patiently, and she always used practical examples so we could understand and remember the topics better.

提案: Be more direct and avoid redundant phrases. Use a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give concise reasons with linking words (for example, because or since).

例: Not really. I don't see myself as a teacher because I lack patience and confidence in explaining others' doubts clearly, which are essential teaching skills.

提案: Reduce hesitations and avoid repeating the same point. Start with one clear topic sentence and then give specific examples of what she taught and how it helped, using linking words like moreover or as a result.

例: Yes, I still remember Miss Sonika. She taught biology, chemistry and physics exceptionally well; moreover, she helped me develop time management and critical-thinking skills, which later benefited my academic and professional choices.

提案: Make the answer more fluent by removing filler words and tightening the chronology. Use one linking word to connect ideas (for example, after or so).

例: Yes, I keep in touch with several primary school teachers. After I finished 12th grade and received my results, they congratulated me and I visited the school; now we stay connected through phone calls and WhatsApp.

提案: Good structure and specific details—improve by eliminating hesitations and making the sequence clearer with linking words such as for example or additionally.

例: She helped me in several ways. For example, she gave extra classes to clear my doubts patiently and used real-life examples, which made it easier for me to relate theory to practical situations.

× Yes, my favorite teacher was Miss Sonika who taught biology subject.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher was Miss Sonika, who taught biology.

The phrase 'taught biology subject' is unidiomatic; 'biology' alone is correct. A nonrestrictive relative clause needs a comma before 'who'. Suggestion: use 'who taught biology' and include a comma for clarity.

× She she always answered our questions with useful examples which made the subject more easier.

✓ She always answered our questions with useful examples, which made the subject easier.

There is an accidental repetition 'She she'. Remove duplicate word. 'More easier' is incorrect because 'easier' already contains the comparative '-er'; do not add 'more'. Also add a comma before the nonrestrictive 'which'.

× To be honest with you, not really because I don't think so that I have teaching skills in me, for example, patience and answering the doubts clearly and patiently.

✓ To be honest, not really, because I don't think I have teaching skills, such as patience and the ability to answer students' doubts clearly and patiently.

Unnecessary 'so' after 'don't think' should be omitted. Use 'I don't think I have' rather than 'I don't think so that I have'. 'Teaching skills in me' is awkward; use 'I have teaching skills'. 'Answering the doubts' should be 'the ability to answer students' doubts' for clarity and correct noun phrase. Also simplify 'To be honest with you' to 'To be honest'.

× So I don't think so I can be a teacher.

✓ So I don't think I can be a teacher.

Remove the unnecessary 'so' after 'don't think'. The correct structure is 'I don't think I can...'. This fixes awkward phrasing and verb-complement order.

× She taught me biology, chemistry and physics exceptionally.

✓ She taught me biology, chemistry, and physics exceptionally well.

The adverb 'exceptionally' should modify 'well'; use 'exceptionally well' to describe how she taught. Also add a serial comma for clarity.

× And uh and well also, she also, uh, taught me invaluable skills such as time management and critical thinking, which helped me in my career path.

✓ She also taught me invaluable skills, such as time management and critical thinking, which have helped me in my career path.

Remove filler 'And uh and well also' and duplicate 'also'. Use 'She also taught' at sentence start. Use present perfect 'have helped' to link past teaching to ongoing career impact. Keep comma before nonrestrictive 'which'.

× Yes, I am in touch with several of primary school teachers as I have recently finished my 12th grade and my results are out.

✓ Yes, I am in touch with several of my primary school teachers, since I have recently finished 12th grade and my results are out.

Use 'several of my primary school teachers' (include possessive 'my'). 'My 12th grade' is acceptable but 'finished 12th grade' is more natural without 'my'. Add comma and use 'since' or 'because' for reason.

× And uh, all the teachers congratulated me and even I went back to the school to see them.

✓ All the teachers congratulated me, and I even went back to the school to see them.

Move 'even' to correct position: 'I even went back...' Remove filler 'And uh' at start. Add comma before coordinating conjunction joining independent clauses.

× We now keep in touch through mobile phone and WhatsApp.

✓ We now keep in touch by mobile phone and WhatsApp.

Use 'by' with 'mobile phone' or 'on' with 'WhatsApp'. 'Through' is less natural here. Either 'by mobile phone and WhatsApp' or 'on WhatsApp' works.

× She helped me in various ways.

✓ She helped me in various ways.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. Included here to indicate it meets the list and requires no correction.

× For example, she took extra classes of mine for clearing my doubts more patiently and clearly.

✓ For example, she took extra classes for me to clear my doubts more patiently and clearly.

'Extra classes of mine' is unnatural; use 'extra classes for me'. Use infinitive 'to clear' to express purpose. Improve adverb order: 'more patiently and clearly' is acceptable but could be 'more patiently and more clearly' if emphasis is needed.

× She also took uh, real life examples so that I can relate these things with my studies.

✓ She also used real-life examples so that I could relate these things to my studies.

Use 'used' rather than 'took' with 'examples'. Hyphenate 'real-life'. Use past modality 'could' to match past context. Correct preposition: 'relate something to something', not 'with'.