Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct pronouns and be concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct gender/pronoun for the teacher, and add one brief specific detail about why she is your favorite. Avoid redundant words.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my chemistry teacher, Ms. Bini Chopra. She is very supportive and explains difficult topics clearly, which helped me understand lab work better.

提案: Good direct response and reason. Improve by expanding slightly with a linking word and a specific motivation for nursing to make the answer more informative while staying concise.

例: No, I don't. I want to pursue a career in nursing because I enjoy helping people and I am interested in healthcare, so nursing fits my skills and goals.

提案: Fix pronoun consistency and make the answer more coherent with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific traits or an example of how the teacher helped you. Avoid vague phrases like "nature" and correct grammar (tackle → tackles).

例: Yes, I still remember my chemistry teacher, Ms. Chopra. She was hardworking and patient; for example, she stayed after class to explain difficult topics and encouraged me to improve my exam scores.

提案: Good idea and specifics, but reduce repetition and improve fluency. Use linking words to organise the information (for example, "usually" and "but"). Remove repeated phrases like "through mobile phones".

例: Yes, I am. I usually meet some of my primary school teachers on weekends, but on busy days I stay in touch by phone, either by call or SMS.

提案: Clarify and organise your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then list具体 ways she helped with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "encourage" → "encouraged", "stay back after class"), and avoid repetition. Provide one concrete example of help.

例: My favourite teacher helped me in several ways. For instance, she encouraged me when I was demotivated and routinely stayed after class to clarify my doubts, and before exams she reviewed difficult concepts with me so I felt more confident.

× The teacher is of chemistry.

✓ The teacher teaches chemistry.

'Of' is incorrect here. Use 'teach/teaches chemistry' to show subject; verb 'teaches' agrees with singular teacher (third person). Suggestion: say 'She teaches chemistry.'

× Her name is Bini Chopra, and he is very nice and very supportive.

✓ Her name is Bini Chopra, and she is very nice and very supportive.

Pronoun 'he' does not agree with 'Her name'; speaker previously used 'Her', so the correct pronoun is 'she'. Ensure pronouns agree in gender and antecedent.

× No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I want to pursue career in nursing.

✓ No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I want to pursue a career in nursing.

The noun 'career' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Use 'pursue a career in nursing' as the standard collocation.

× Yeah, definitely my chemistry teacher, I still remember him because of her nature and she is very hardworking and always ready to help me.

✓ Yeah, definitely my chemistry teacher. I still remember her because of her nature; she is very hardworking and always ready to help me.

Mixed pronouns 'him' and 'her' cause agreement errors. Use consistent pronoun 'her' for female teacher. Also split run-on into two sentences and keep pronoun antecedent consistent.

× She is very polite and always tackle all the problems and motivate me to score good marks.

✓ She is very polite and always tackles problems and motivates me to score good marks.

Subject-verb agreement with singular 'She' requires verbs 'tackles' and 'motivates' (third person singular). Also 'all the problems' can be shortened to 'problems'.

× I'm still in touch with my primary school teachers through mobile phones and on weekends I make sure to meet them and but on my busy days I stay connected with them through mobile phones like through SMS or calls.

✓ I'm still in touch with my primary school teachers by phone, and on weekends I make sure to meet them, but on busy days I stay connected through SMS or calls.

Use 'by phone' instead of 'through mobile phones' for natural English; remove redundant phrases. 'But' should not be combined with 'and' in that position. Streamline to avoid repetition.

× Uh, my favorite teacher is a chemistry of chemistry.

✓ Uh, my favorite teacher is a chemistry teacher.

Phrase 'chemistry of chemistry' is incorrect. Use noun compound 'chemistry teacher' to indicate the subject the teacher teaches.

× She helped me to encourage.

✓ She helped to encourage me.

The verb 'encourage' needs an object; correct word order is 'helped to encourage me' or 'encouraged me'. More natural: 'She encouraged me.'

× She always helped me when I am demotivated and still stay back in after the class to clear my all the doubts.

✓ She always helps me when I am demotivated and stays after class to clear all my doubts.

Mixing past 'helped' with present 'am demotivated' is inconsistent. Use present simple 'helps' for habitual action. 'Stay back in after the class' is ungrammatical; use 'stays after class'. Use 'all my doubts' word order.

× And during my exams she always helped me to make difficult concepts.

✓ And during my exams she always helped me understand difficult concepts.

'Make difficult concepts' is incorrect; use 'understand difficult concepts'. 'Helped me understand' is the correct collocation for assistance with comprehension.