Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子语法和词汇有些错误，表达不够自然。注意时态一致（过去时），用更恰当的形容词（supportive 而不是 supportable）。回答可更简洁并补充具体例子来支持观点，例如老师做了什么具体事情帮助你。控制在3-4句内并使用连接词。

例: Yes. My favourite teacher was my junior high school English teacher. She was very supportive and often stayed after class to explain difficult grammar points. Because of her encouragement, I gradually gained confidence in speaking English.

提案: 表达理由时时态和语法存在问题，语句冗长且不够自然。应使用现在或现在完成时说明一般能力与性格（I wasn't a good student → I wasn't a strong student），并用更自然的连接词（firstly, secondly, because）。尽量给出一到两个清晰具体的原因，每个原因一句话。

例: Probably not. I wasn't a particularly strong student myself, so I don't feel confident guiding others academically. Also, I tend to lose patience in stressful situations, which would make teaching difficult for me.

提案: 回答信息重复，且存在代词和语法错误（they she）。保持简洁并避免重复同一信息。使用连接词（for example, for instance）并给出具体细节如某次帮助的例子。注意时态和主谓一致。

例: Yes, I remember my junior high English teacher very well. She was extremely supportive; for example, she often stayed after class to explain difficult grammar points and gave me extra exercises to practise.

提案: 句子中有主谓不一致（she were）和时态混用。回答要更直接并逻辑清楚：先回答是否保持联系，然后说明原因，最后可以提到将来可能的计划。避免提供不必要的细节并控制句子数量。

例: No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers since I graduated. I was busy focusing on my studies, and they were also occupied with work. I do plan to contact one or two teachers who had a big influence on me when I have some free time.

提案: 句子结构混乱且重复（All my English studying...）。应先给主题句说明她如何帮助你，随后用一两句具体例子支持。使用更自然的动词短语（explain complex grammar, give extra practice）并注意时态一致。

例: She helped me a lot with grammar and practice. For example, she would explain difficult grammar points in simple terms and gave me extra exercises and personalised feedback, which really improved my confidence and results.

× I like my English teacher in junior high school because she was very supportable on my study.

✓ I liked my English teacher in junior high school because she was very supportive of my studies.

错误类型：过去时使用与形容词/介词搭配不当。说明：句子描述的是过去的经历，应使用过去时 "liked"。"supportable" 不是合适的词，应使用形容词 "supportive" 表示“支持的”。此外，常用搭配是 "supportive of"，而非 "supportable on"。最后，"my study" 更自然的复数形式是 "my studies"。建议：把动词改为过去式，把形容词和介词改为正确搭配，并使用复数名词。

× She always encouraged me when I faced some difficulties.

✓ She always encouraged me when I faced some difficulties.

该句基本正确，时态一致（过去时）。可保留原句。若需微调，可将 "faced some difficulties" 改为更自然的 "faced difficulties"。

× Maybe not. Firstly, I'm not good at studying when I was a student, so I cannot lead students on a right direction.

✓ Maybe not. Firstly, I wasn't good at studying when I was a student, so I couldn't lead students in the right direction.

错误类型：时态错误与介词/短语搭配。说明：句中先说当前可能不想当老师，但后文描述的是过去（“当学生时”），应使用过去时态 "wasn't" 和 "couldn't"。短语 "lead students on a right direction" 不自然，正确搭配为 "lead students in the right direction"。建议：将与过去事实相关的动词改为过去式，并使用固定短语 "in the right direction"。

× Second, I am lack of patience so I cannot help others.

✓ Second, I lack patience, so I couldn't help others.

错误类型：代词/动词搭配与时态问题。说明：英语中不说 "I am lack of..."，应直接用动词短语 "I lack patience"。上下文谈过去性格缺点以解释不愿意当老师，应使用过去时态 "couldn't help others" 或保持一般现在视具体含义。建议：把 "am lack of" 改为 "lack"，并根据上下文调整时态。

× Yes, she was my English teacher in my junior high school. She was very supportive of my English studying.

✓ Yes, she was my English teacher in junior high school. She was very supportive of my English studies.

错误类型：名词形式与搭配问题（同时涉及时态确认）。说明：句子描述过去老师，过去时 "was" 正确。短语 "English studying" 不自然，常用表达为 "English studies" 或 "my study of English"。建议：使用 "English studies"。

× For example they she always explained the grammar to me and stayed after class.

✓ For example, she always explained grammar to me and stayed after class.

错误类型：句子结构与多余词语。说明：原句中出现重复或多余的词 "they" 和 "she"，应删除多余部分。"the grammar" 可简化为 "grammar"。建议：去掉多余代词，保持主谓一致。

× No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers since I graduated because I was focusing on my studies and she were busy with her jobs.

✓ No, I haven't kept in touch with my primary school teachers since I graduated because I was focusing on my studies and they were busy with their jobs.

错误类型：代词与数的一致性（代词使用不当）和主谓一致。说明：句中指代 "primary school teachers" 应使用复数代词 "they" 和复数所有格 "their jobs"，而不是单数 "she" 和 "her jobs"。此外时态 "haven't kept" 与后面的原因短语搭配合理。建议：把代词改为复数以保持一致。

× I sometimes think about contacting one or two teachers who made a big impression on me, but so far I haven't found the time.

✓ I sometimes think about contacting one or two teachers who made a big impression on me, but so far I haven't found the time.

句子语法正确。时态搭配合理（现在时表示现在的想法，完成时表示至今未找到时间）。无需修改。

× All my English studying when I was in junior high school, my English teacher always helped me to explain the complex grammar and give me extra practice to improve my English study.

✓ Throughout my English studies in junior high school, my English teacher always helped me by explaining complex grammar and giving me extra practice to improve my English.

错误类型：句子结构与动词形式。说明：原句开头结构不完整，应将时间状语置于句首并使用介词短语 "Throughout my English studies"。动词搭配应为 "helped me by explaining... and giving..." 而不是 "helped me to explain... and give..."（老师是帮助学生，而非帮助我自己去解释）。最后重复的 "study" 可省略或改为 "English"。建议：重构句子，使用现在过去时态一致的动词形式和正确的动词不定式/动名词结构。

× So she's my favorite teacher.

✓ So she was my favorite teacher.

错误类型：主谓时态一致性。说明：整个段落在描述过去经历，应保持过去时态。句末 "she's"（she is）与前文过去时不一致，改为过去时 "she was" 更合适。建议：保持时态一致，若描述过去人物应全部用过去时。