Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and confident. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (umm, uh) and avoid repetition. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect reasons.

例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school English teacher from Australia because she helped me practice speaking during lunchtime. For example, we had short conversations every day, which improved my fluency and confidence.

提案: Give a clear, grammatical main sentence and then a concise reason. Avoid broken sentences and repetition. Use linking words like because or so to present your reason, and finish with a complete thought.

例: No, I don't. I don't think I would be a good teacher because I struggle to explain ideas clearly and prefer learning from others. Therefore, I admire teachers who can teach well.

提案: Answer directly, then give a specific reason and an example. Remove hesitations and tighten sentences. Use linking words like because and also to add coherence.

例: Yes, I still remember her — the same English teacher I mentioned. I admired her because she kept learning new methods and read widely, which inspired me to improve my English as well.

提案: Give a direct answer and then explain briefly with clear language. Avoid fragmented phrases and be specific about what contact you lack. Use linking words like because or so for clarity.

例: No, I'm not. I don't know where they are now and I don't have their email addresses or phone numbers, so I can't contact them. I would be glad to reconnect if I could find their details.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your favourite teacher specifically, then give one or two concrete examples of help. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect grammar (e.g., 'many advice'); use linking words like not only... but also.

例: My favourite teacher helped me not only with English lessons but also with personal guidance. For instance, she gave me study strategies and encouraged me to practice speaking regularly, which improved my confidence.

× she was an English teacher of my high school and she's from Australia, so I, I usually, umm, talked with her to improve my English skills during lunchtime.

✓ She was an English teacher at my high school and she's from Australia, so I usually talked with her during lunchtime to improve my English skills.

Use 'at' for being affiliated with an institution (teacher at my high school). Also move the time phrase 'during lunchtime' next to the verb phrase for natural word order. Remove filler hesitations for clarity.

× I usually, umm, talked with her to improve my English skills during lunchtime.

✓ I usually talked with her during lunchtime to improve my English skills.

The adverb 'usually' is used with simple past here because the student refers to a habitual action in the past; the verb should be in simple past 'talked'. Placing 'during lunchtime' adjacent to the verb makes the sentence clearer.

× because I'm not so good at to think logically or explain something clearly to others.

✓ because I'm not so good at thinking logically or explaining something clearly to others.

After 'good at' we use the -ing form, not the infinitive with 'to'. Change 'to think' and 'explain' to 'thinking' and 'explaining'.

× So I really look up to the teachers. I always, umm, I, I always be taught by.

✓ So I really look up to teachers. I was always taught by them.

The original has an incomplete passive clause and redundant fillers. Use the past passive 'was always taught by them' to express that teachers taught the student. Also remove extra 'the' before 'teachers' unless referring to a specific group.

× Yes I do, and she's the one I previously answered about umm.

✓ Yes I do, and she's the one I mentioned earlier.

'Previously answered about' is ungrammatical. Use 'mentioned earlier' to refer back to the previous answer. This is clearer and uses correct verb choice and preposition use.

× I really admired her because uh, she's not just an ordinary teacher, but she is, umm, she, she doesn't stop learning as well.

✓ I really admired her because she was not just an ordinary teacher; she also continued learning.

Avoid awkward repetition and tense mismatch. Use consistent past tense 'admired' and 'was' and a clear connector 'also' or 'continued' instead of 'doesn't stop learning as well'.

× No, umm, I, I'm not sure where they are now and I don't, I don't have their umm, e-mail address or something contact things either.

✓ No, I'm not sure where they are now and I don't have their email addresses or other contact information either.

Use plural 'email addresses' and the uncountable phrase 'contact information' rather than 'contact things'. Remove redundant repetition and fillers for clarity.

× I I I I'd be happy if I I've known them though.

✓ I would be happy if I knew them, though.

Use the correct conditional structure: 'I would be happy if I knew them.' The original mixes tenses and wrong perfect form 'I've known' which is inappropriate here.

× Well, many teachers who I've met ever helped me not only teaching, uh, subjects during classes, but also they've, umm, they've given me many advice for my, umm, private umm.

✓ Well, many teachers I have met helped me not only by teaching subjects during classes, but they also gave me a lot of advice for my private life.

Use 'helped me by teaching' to show how they helped; after 'not only' use parallel structures ('not only by teaching..., but also they gave...'). Use 'a lot of advice' or 'much advice' (not 'many advice') and 'private life' for the intended meaning. Remove 'ever' which is unnecessary.