Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意性别代词一致与用词恰当（不要同时用he/she）。回答应更直接且避免不必要的外貌描述，改为说明教师的教学特点和对你的影响。使用1-3个连贯句子，每句保持简洁，加入连接词使回答流畅。

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is my Chinese teacher because she explains difficult grammar clearly and makes lessons fun. For example, she uses games and songs to teach tones, which helped me improve quickly.

提案: 回答需要更有条理：先直接回答是否愿意，然后简要说明原因并使用连接词（but/however/nowadays）来对比过去和现在的想法。减少口头语（umm/uh）。

例: I used to want to be a teacher when I was a child, but nowadays I want to become a writer because I enjoy creating stories and expressing ideas in writing.

提案: 注意代词一致和时态，避免用过多犹豫词。可以更具体说明这位老师的做法如何影响你（例如提高了你的纪律或成绩）。使用连接词（so/because/therefore）来增强逻辑。

例: Yes, I remember my secondary school maths teacher. She was very strict and required us to complete all homework, which was hard at first but eventually improved my discipline and problem-solving skills.

提案: 回答清晰但可更自然：用过去原因解释现在的情况，尽量用完整句并避免语法错误（例如时态和冠词）。可补充是否希望将来联系。

例: No, I'm not in touch with them because I didn't have my own phone at primary school and I never got their contact details. I would like to reconnect with them someday if possible.

提案: 回答需更具体并纠正语法错误（teach -> taught；he/she一致）。说明具体帮助的方面和结果，用连接词组织句子，减少口头填充词，控制在2-3句内。

例: She helped me by teaching Chinese grammar and tones clearly and using fun activities, so I became more confident in speaking and experienced a real sense of progress.

× My uh, Chinese teacher is a favorite teacher for me and she's very cute and very friendly. Uh, he has a double eyelid and umm, she's very beautiful. Uh, I love him and the feel of uh, knowledge and very funny.

✓ My Chinese teacher is my favorite. She is very cute and friendly. She has double eyelids and is very beautiful. I love her; she makes learning feel enjoyable and fun.

代词使用混乱（he / she / him互换）：句中对同一位老师使用了不同性别的代词，造成语法错误和意义混淆。建议：确定人物性别后始终使用相应的人称代词（he/him/his 或 she/her/hers）。此外可简化并分成几句以提高连贯性。

× Actually, umm, to become a teacher. It's a dream that when I was a child, uh, nowadays I want to be a writer actually.

✓ Actually, becoming a teacher was my childhood dream, but now I want to be a writer.

句子结构混乱且片段化：原句包含不完整的从句（"to become a teacher."）且时间对比表达不清。建议：用完整的主谓结构，把过去的愿望和现在的想法用but连接，保持时态一致。

× Yes, of course, my maths teacher from my, uh, secondary school, uh, she's very strict and uh, umm, I think it's awful because umm, my math is not, uh, not very well, but he always require me to uh, finish his homework.

✓ Yes, of course. My maths teacher from secondary school was very strict. I found it hard because my maths wasn't very good, but she always required me to finish my homework.

代词不一致（she 与 he 混用）、时态与主谓不一致（require → required，my math is not very well → my maths wasn't very good）：首先应保持对同一教师使用同一性别代词；其次叙述过去经验时使用过去时；再者动词与主语人称/时态一致。建议：确定代词，过去事件用过去时，并注意形容词/副词用法（'good'而不是'well'修饰名词）。

× No, actually it's because in my primary school I don't have my own phone so that I don't have the contact information with my primary school teachers.

✓ No. When I was in primary school I didn't have my own phone, so I didn't have my primary school teachers' contact information.

介词和时态使用错误："in my primary school"可接受但与过去叙述应使用过去时；"don't have the contact information with"表达不自然，正确为"didn't have ... contact information"或"contact information for"。建议：描述过去经历统一使用过去时，并用"contact information for"或所有格形式表达所属关系。

× Uh, from the study, uh, because my Chinese teacher, like I mentioned before, he teached me a lot of uh, Chinese grammar and uh, Chinese tones, uh, is very, uh, funny. I know the, uh, I get, uh, it's a sense of success.

✓ In my studies, as I mentioned before, my Chinese teacher taught me a lot of Chinese grammar and tones. He was very funny, and I felt a sense ofachievement.

动词过去分词/过去式使用错误（"teached"应为"taught"）；句子断裂与代词混用导致意思不清。建议：常见不规则动词要记住其过去式/过去分词形式（teach → taught）；描述过去经历时使用过去时；把句子拆成清晰的几部分（所教内容、教师特点、自己的感受）。