Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và phát âm, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp và hoàn thiện câu. Cụ thể: sửa lỗi đại từ sở hữu (His is → He is), danh từ đếm (a funny man → a funny man hoặc funny and wise), và thêm liên từ để nối ý hoàn chỉnh. Trả lời nên ngắn gọn trong 3–4 câu: nêu tên, vai trò, tính cách cụ thể và một ví dụ minh họa.

例: Yes, my favourite teacher is Colin, my physics teacher. He is funny and very wise, and he always uses humorous examples to explain difficult ideas. For instance, he once used a simple toy to demonstrate gravity, which made the class understand immediately.

提案: Cần dùng thì và cấu trúc chính xác (which is become → which was to become; at this time → at the moment), dùng từ vựng chính xác (commutative → communicative) và mở rộng lí do cụ thể hơn. Sử dụng linking words (however, because) để mạch lạc. Giữ 3–4 câu, tránh lặp.

例: I used to dream of becoming a teacher when I was a child, but at the moment I don't think it's the right career for me. I'm not a very communicative person and I don't feel confident persuading and managing a class. Therefore, I prefer a job that involves more independent work.

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (one of my favorite teacher → one of my favourite teachers), dùng thì phù hợp (at that time → back then) và tránh tiếng ỳ/đệm (uh). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về câu chuyện hoặc hiệu quả của câu chuyện để tăng tính cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như "for example" hoặc "because" để liên kết ý.

例: Yes, I still remember a primary school teacher called Mr Thai. He was one of my favourite teachers because, before every lesson, he would tell us a short story to capture our attention. For example, he once told a story about teamwork to introduce a group project.

提案: Cần dùng thì đúng (We still got in touch when I was in secondary school), sửa cấu trúc (we're not talk → we haven't kept in contact) và tránh mơ hồ về thời gian (use "about five or six years"). Thêm một câu ngắn giải thích lý do hoặc cảm xúc để làm đầy nội dung.

例: Unfortunately, I'm not in touch with my primary school teachers anymore. We kept contact during secondary school, but we haven't stayed in touch for about five or six years. I wish I could reconnect with them because they meant a lot to me.

提案: Cần mở đầu trực tiếp (avoid filler phrases like "And so what I have told you before"), sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng (about ethnic → about ethics or cultural diversity), và cụ thể hóa cách ông giúp (ví dụ: taught values, improved confidence). Dùng linking words (for example, by) để rõ ràng. Giữ 2–4 câu súc tích.

例: My primary school teacher, Mr Thai, helped me shape my character by telling stories that taught moral values and empathy. For example, he often shared tales about honesty and kindness, which encouraged me to be more considerate and confident in social situations.

× His is funny man and very wise.

✓ He is a funny man and very wise.

The sentence uses 'His' (possessive) instead of the subject pronoun 'He'. Replace 'His' with 'He' to form a correct clause. Also include the article 'a' before 'funny man'. Suggestion: use 'He is a funny man and very wise.' Error type ID: 13

× He knows how to get people attention and.

✓ He knows how to get people's attention.

Missing possessive form and sentence fragment 'and' at the end. Use the possessive 'people's' to indicate attention belonging to people and remove the dangling 'and'. Suggestion: 'He knows how to get people's attention.' Error type ID: 11

× I used to have a dream, which is become a teacher when I was a kid.

✓ I used to have a dream, which was to become a teacher when I was a kid.

The relative clause requires past tense 'was' following 'used to have a dream' and the infinitive 'to become' rather than bare verb 'become'. Use 'which was to become a teacher'. Suggestion: 'I used to have a dream, which was to become a teacher when I was a kid.' Error type ID: 10

× But at this time I don't think a teacher is a suitable career for me.

✓ But at this time I don't think teaching is a suitable career for me.

'A teacher is a suitable career' is awkward because 'teacher' is a person; use the gerund 'teaching' to refer to the profession. Suggestion: 'I don't think teaching is a suitable career for me.' Error type ID: 13

× I'm not a commutative person.

✓ I'm not a communicative person.

Wrong word 'commutative' (mathematical term) used instead of 'communicative' (able to communicate). Replace with correct adjective 'communicative'. Error type ID: 12

× I don't know how to persuade someone.

✓ I don't know how to persuade anyone.

'Someone' is not wrong, but 'anyone' fits negative context better. Suggestion: 'I don't know how to persuade anyone.' Error type ID: 6

× He's one of my favorite teacher at that time as I remember, uh, before every lesson he told us a story to hook our attention.

✓ He was one of my favorite teachers at that time, as I remember. Before every lesson he told us a story to hook our attention.

Tense mismatch: talking about past should use 'was' not 'is'. Also 'teacher' should be plural 'teachers' after 'one of my'. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: 'He was one of my favorite teachers at that time, as I remember. Before every lesson he told us a story to hook our attention.' Error type ID: 12

× We haven't seen each other for a long time, maybe 5 or 6 years.

✓ We haven't seen each other for a long time, maybe five or six years.

Numbers in formal speech are often written as words; grammatically the sentence is acceptable but ensure consistency. This is minor; keep as words. Error type ID: 3

× We still get in touch when I was in secondary school, but after that we're not talk.

✓ We were still in touch when I was in secondary school, but after that we stopped talking.

Tense consistency: 'get in touch when I was' mixes present and past. Use past 'were still in touch'. 'We're not talk' is ungrammatical; use 'we stopped talking' or 'we are not in touch anymore'. Suggestion: 'We were still in touch when I was in secondary school, but after that we stopped talking.' Error type ID: 26

× Unfortunately, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers.

✓ Unfortunately, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers anymore.

Add 'anymore' to clarify that contact has ceased; original sentence is acceptable but can be improved. Use 'anymore' or 'any longer' for clarity. Error type ID: 11

× And So what I have told you before, my primary school teacher, Mr. Thai, helped me a lot in building my personality, my character, by telling a lot of stories about humanity, about ethnic.

✓ As I mentioned before, my primary school teacher, Mr. Thai, helped me a lot in building my personality and character by telling many stories about humanity and different ethnic groups.

Sentence has unnecessary 'And So', awkward phrasing 'what I have told you before', and repetition. 'About ethnic' is incomplete; use 'ethnic groups' or 'ethnicity'. Improve word choice: 'many' instead of 'a lot of' and combine 'personality and character'. Suggestion: 'As I mentioned before, my primary school teacher, Mr. Thai, helped me a lot in building my personality and character by telling many stories about humanity and different ethnic groups.' Error type ID: 26}]} PMID:122