Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the teacher, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct pronouns, articles and verb forms, and avoid unnecessary words. Add a linking phrase for clarity.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher is my homeroom English teacher. She is very kind and patient, and she explains difficult topics clearly so I always feel comfortable asking questions.

提案: Give a clear reason and soften strong negative language. Offer one brief explanation and, if possible, a short contrast or qualification using a linking word like because or although.

例: No, I don't. I wouldn't like to teach young children because I find it hard to be patient with them. Although I enjoy helping others, I think a different career would suit my temperament better.

提案: Use correct tense and reduce hesitations. Start with a direct statement naming the teacher, then give a specific detail (when and what happened). Avoid uncertain phrases like “if I correct” — replace with confident phrasing or say you are not sure.

例: Yes. I remember Miss Jamie, my 4th-grade English teacher. She made lessons fun, and I believe she later moved to Singapore to continue teaching.

提案: Be concise and correct grammar. Give one clear reason and an optional brief elaboration using linking words (because, so). Avoid awkward phrasing like “themselves.”

例: No, I'm not. I don't keep in touch because I wasn't close to most of my primary school teachers, so it feels difficult to start casual conversations with them.

提案: Provide at least one specific example or describe the kind of help she gave. Remove filler words (uh) and use linking words such as for example or by doing so to make your answer coherent.

例: Although I can't recall a single event, she often listened to my problems and gave practical advice. For example, she suggested study techniques and reading lists that improved my writing and grades.

× Yes I do and is my homeroom an English teacher? She's very kind and patient person I which I think is how I would prefer my teacher to be.

✓ Yes, I do. My homeroom teacher is an English teacher. She's a very kind and patient person, which I think is how I would prefer my teacher to be.

This original response contains multiple sentence structure and article errors: 'and is my homeroom an English teacher?' uses incorrect word order for a statement and should be split into separate sentences; 'very kind and patient person' misses the indefinite article 'a'; 'I which I think' misorders words and should be 'which I think'. Correcting restores proper declarative word order, inserts the article 'a', and places the relative clause correctly. Suggestion: break run-on responses into shorter sentences, remember to use 'a' before singular countable nouns, and place 'which I think' after the clause it modifies. This entry corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 26.

× She has since then moved to Singapore to continue teaching if I correct.

✓ She has since moved to Singapore to continue teaching, if I recall correctly.

Errors: 'has since then moved' is wordy; 'if I correct' is incorrect phrase for uncertain memory. Use present perfect 'has since moved' and the common phrase 'if I recall correctly' (or 'if I remember correctly') to express uncertainty. Suggestion: use 'has since moved' for change that occurred at an unspecified time before now and use 'if I recall correctly' to indicate tentative memory. This entry corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 2.

× I didn't have a close or even good relationship themselves.

✓ I didn't have a close or even good relationship with them.

The original uses the reflexive/incorrect pronoun 'themselves' where the object pronoun 'them' is required after the preposition 'with'. Suggestion: use object pronouns (me, you, him, her, them) after prepositions and avoid unnecessary reflexive pronouns. This entry corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 12.

× I can't recall a specific instance where she helped me, but throughout the past she was willing to listen to my struggles and offered advice that were, uh, very beneficial in my academic, uh, journey.

✓ I can't recall a specific instance where she helped me, but in the past she was willing to listen to my struggles and offered advice that was very beneficial in my academic journey.

Issues corrected: 'throughout the past' is unnatural; 'that were' disagrees with 'advice' which is uncountable and requires singular verb or no verb change—use 'that was' or better remove 'were' and say 'that was very beneficial' or 'which was very beneficial'. Also removed filler 'uh' and extra commas. Suggestion: use 'in the past' for general past time, remember 'advice' is uncountable so pair with singular verbs or neutral structures, and avoid fillers in formal responses. This entry corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 6.

× No, I am not because I don't see the point in keeping in touch with most of them.

✓ No, I'm not, because I don't see the point in keeping in touch with most of them.

Main issue is punctuation/contracted form rather than preposition, but 'keeping in touch with' is correct; added contraction and commas for natural spoken flow. Minor correction to match spoken register. Suggestion: include comma before reason clauses and use contractions for natural speech. This entry corresponds to Grammar Problem Type ID 11.