Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “English T-shirt”) and minor grammatical errors (use past tense consistently). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my Grade 10 English teacher because she was kind and encouraging. For example, she stayed after class to help me improve my writing, which really boosted my confidence.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Fix grammar (remove extra articles, correct verb forms) and provide one specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and keep answer to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to be an English teacher in the future because I want to help Thai children who have limited access to quality English education. For instance, I would run free weekend classes to improve their speaking and confidence.

提案: Provide a clear, coherent response: state who the teacher was and give one specific memory or reason you remember her. Correct tense and agreement errors, and avoid contradicting statements (e.g., saying you are not close and then saying she is close). Use a linking word like "although" correctly.

例: Yes, I remember my former science teacher because she always looked after me and offered advice. Although she taught a different section, she once stayed after school to help me with a difficult experiment, which made me feel supported.

提案: Give a direct answer and a concise reason. Remove filler words and unclear expressions (e.g., "interim my new phase"). Use correct grammar and one specific example of why you cannot keep in touch. Keep to two sentences maximum.

例: Not really. I’m busy with university and part-time work, so I rarely contact my primary teachers except when I see them at school events.

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence describing the help, then give two specific details. Correct verb tenses and word choices (e.g., "attended a speech competition", "helped me with pronunciation", "remember my lines"). Use linking words like "for example" or "she taught me how to..."

例: She helped me prepare for a speech competition when I was very nervous. For example, she coached my pronunciation and taught me breathing techniques to stay calm, which helped me deliver the speech without forgetting my lines.

× She is really delightful, optimistic and kind hearted.

✓ She is really delightful, optimistic, and kind-hearted.

Parallel adjectives need correct punctuation and compound adjective 'kind-hearted' requires a hyphen. Also include a comma before 'and' in a list for clarity. Improve by using hyphenation for compound adjectives and consistent comma usage.

× I have this one English T-shirt that I used to study with her when I was in grade 10.

✓ I have this one English T-shirt that I used to study with her when I was in grade 10.

No grammar correction required according to the provided list; sentence is acceptable. (Kept unchanged.)

× I would love to be an English teacher to help the Thai kids improve their English skills because I have a my goals to be a better person to teach the kids who has no opportunity to learn a better English.

✓ I would love to be an English teacher to help Thai kids improve their English skills because I have goals to become a better person and teach children who have no opportunity to learn better English.

Multiple issues: extra article 'a' before 'my goals' and awkward phrasing. Corrections follow article and noun usage rules: remove extra 'a', change 'my goals' to 'goals' and 'has' to 'have' for plural 'children' (subject-verb agreement). Also use 'become' instead of 'to be' and remove 'a' before 'better English'. Improve clarity and grammar by simplifying structure.

× She always taken care of me.

✓ She always took care of me.

Present perfect/participle 'taken' is incorrect here without auxiliary. The simple past 'took' matches 'always' in a past context. Use 'took' for habitual past actions.

× Although she teach in another section, she's still really close to me.

✓ Although she taught in another section, she's still really close to me.

Verb 'teach' needs correct tense and third-person agreement. In the past context use 'taught' (past tense). If intended present, use 'teaches'. Here surrounding text is past, so use past 'taught'.

× Obviously not really.

✓ Not really, obviously.

Phrase order is awkward; adverb placement improves clarity by placing 'not really' before 'obviously'. This is stylistic but improves naturalness.

× Since I have interim my new phase of life, I don't really have the time to be in touch with my primary teachers.

✓ Since I am in an interim phase of my life, I don't really have time to be in touch with my primary teachers.

Incorrect phrase 'have interim my new phase' is ungrammatical. Use 'am in an interim phase' and 'time' does not need 'the'. Rewrite for correct verb 'am' + prepositional phrase and remove unnecessary words.

× I mean, I stood through meeting them at school, but umm, faced in with the obstacles in life, school work can really make me reciprocate what the teacher had done for me.

✓ I mean, I managed to meet them at school sometimes, but faced with obstacles in life and schoolwork, I can't really repay what the teachers did for me.

Many structural problems: 'stood through meeting' is incorrect—use 'managed to meet'. 'Faced in with' should be 'faced with'. 'School work' -> 'schoolwork'. 'Reciprocate what the teacher had done' is awkward; use 'repay what the teachers did'. Also adjust tense and plurality for consistency.

× So I had attend to speech competition and she helps me through that.

✓ So I attended a speech competition and she helped me through it.

Incorrect verb forms: 'had attend' is ungrammatical; use simple past 'attended'. 'Attend to' is wrong with 'competition'—use 'attend' or 'attended a speech competition'. Also change 'helps' to past 'helped' to match past context.

× She helps me how to be more calm, pronounced correctly and how to not forget the words that I've got to remember.

✓ She helped me learn how to be calmer, pronounce words correctly, and not forget the words I had to remember.

Verb tense and forms wrong: 'helps' should be past 'helped' in past narrative. Use 'learn how to' rather than 'helps me how to'. Adjective 'more calm' -> comparative 'calmer'. 'Pronounced correctly' should be verb 'pronounce'. Simplify 'I've got to remember' to past 'I had to remember' for consistency.