Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, give one or two specific supporting details, use correct verbs and vocabulary, and avoid unfinished sentences. Also correct word choice (e.g., 'teach' not 'tease') and give a clear reason why the teacher was your favorite. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. My favorite teacher was Mr. Rai, who taught analytical chemistry in high school. He made difficult topics simple by using clear demonstrations and real‑life examples, so I always enjoyed his classes. For instance, he showed us how laboratory methods apply to everyday products, which made the lessons memorable.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then one clear reason with a supporting detail. Use correct articles and word forms (e.g., 'a teaching job requires patience and motivation' → 'teaching requires patience and motivation'). Avoid vague phrasing like 'sharing knowledge within ourselves.' Be natural and succinct, 2–3 sentences is enough.

例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future because teaching requires patience and motivates me to keep learning. For example, I enjoy explaining concepts to friends and seeing them understand, which makes teaching very rewarding.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct subject-verb agreement ('teach us organic chemistry') and avoid vague endings. Provide one specific example of what made the teacher memorable and link it with a reason using a linking phrase (e.g., 'because' or 'as a result').

例: Yes, I remember my high school organic chemistry teacher very well because his lessons were highly engaging. For example, he used demonstrations and storytelling to explain reactions, which helped me understand and remember complex concepts.

提案: Be precise and use correct expressions: 'not really, but we are still connected on social media.' Avoid unclear phrases like 'waste body to each other.' Provide one concise example of how you interact (e.g., liking posts, commenting) and express a feeling or reason. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really, but I am still connected with some primary school teachers on social media. We like and sometimes comment on each other's posts, which makes me happy to keep a casual connection.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific ways the teacher helped you, using correct verb forms ('boosted me' or 'supported me'). Use linking words like 'for example' to give a concrete instance and avoid vague claims. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: My favorite teacher helped me both academically and personally. For example, she provided extra tutoring in difficult subjects and encouraged me to set realistic study goals, which improved my grades and confidence.

× When I was in my high school, there was a teacher, Mr. Rai, who used to tease inorganic **** analytical chemistry.

✓ When I was in high school, there was a teacher, Mr. Rai, who used to teach inorganic and analytical chemistry.

Use 'in high school' (no article) and correct verb 'tease' to 'teach'; 'inorganic **** analytical' seems to be a typo and should be 'inorganic and analytical'. 'There was' is acceptable to introduce someone from the past, but the main problems were word choice and article use. Suggestion: remove 'my' before 'high school' and replace 'tease' with 'teach' and insert 'and' between subject areas.

× He was my favorite because his.

✓ He was my favorite because of his teaching.

Original sentence is incomplete and lacks a noun after the possessive 'his'. Add a noun like 'teaching' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always finish a 'because' clause with a clear reason phrase (e.g., 'because of his teaching', 'because of his sense of humor').

× Yes, definitely I would like to be a teacher in the future because teaching job requires a patience and a motivation.

✓ Yes, I would definitely like to be a teacher in the future because the teaching job requires patience and motivation.

Move adverb 'definitely' to a natural position, add definite article 'the' before 'teaching job', and remove unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns 'patience' and 'motivation'. Modal 'would like to' is fine. Suggestion: place adverbs near the verb and avoid 'a' before uncountable nouns.

× Sharing knowledge within ourselves to others is quite good.

✓ Sharing knowledge with others is quite good.

Phrase 'within ourselves to others' is incorrect and redundant. Use 'with others' to express exchange. Also 'is quite good' is acceptable but could be stronger ('is beneficial'). Suggestion: simplify prepositional phrase to 'with others'.

× Yes, I do remember there was a teacher from my high school who used to teach us in organic and chemistry.

✓ Yes, I do remember a teacher from my high school who used to teach us organic chemistry.

Use 'a teacher' (introducing someone) rather than 'there was a teacher' for this context; subjects 'organic and chemistry' is incorrect — combine to 'organic chemistry'. Also remove unnecessary 'in'. Suggestion: use 'teach us organic chemistry' or 'teach organic chemistry to us'.

× His teaching skills made me remember him till now because his skill was so engaging and worthy to be.

✓ His teaching skills made me remember him even now because his skills were so engaging and valuable.

Sentence is awkward: 'made me remember him till now' should be 'made me remember him even now' or 'I still remember him'. 'Worthy to be' is ungrammatical; replace with 'valuable'. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'skills were'. Suggestion: use natural expressions like 'I still remember him because his teaching was engaging and valuable.'

× Not really but we are still in connect in the social media platform.

✓ Not really, but we are still connected on social media platforms.

Use 'connected' (adjective) instead of 'in connect'. Use the preposition 'on' for social media, and plural 'platforms' or singular 'platform' without 'the'. Suggestion: say 'connected on social media' or 'connected on a social media platform'.

× We liked each other post, family post or any kind of post and some days and somehow we waste body to each other and I feel happy to see them.

✓ We like each other's posts, family photos, or any kind of post, and sometimes we send messages to each other; I feel happy to see them.

Tense consistency: 'liked' should be 'like' if describing habitual action. Use possessive 'each other's posts'. 'Family post' likely 'family photos'. 'Some days and somehow we waste body to each other' is unclear; interpret as 'sometimes we send messages to each other'. Replace informal 'waste body' with appropriate verb. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clear verbs (like 'send messages' or 'comment').

× My favorite teacher has helped me in many ways in both academically and personal development.

✓ My favorite teacher has helped me in many ways in both academic and personal development.

Use adjectives 'academic' and 'personal' (not adverb 'academically') to modify 'development'. Present perfect 'has helped' is correct for past influence continuing to present. Suggestion: use parallel adjective forms for coordinated nouns.

× She has boost me in my education and also to develop goals in my life.

✓ She has boosted me in my education and has helped me develop goals in my life.

Use past participle 'boosted' with present perfect 'has'. Also add 'helped me develop' for correct structure rather than 'to develop'. Suggestion: use correct past participle forms and parallel verb constructions.