Teachers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetition. Focus on correct grammar for tense and subject–verb agreement (e.g., “she was very kind and confident” not “she is very, she was very”).

例: I do. My favorite teacher was my primary school English teacher. She was very kind and confident, and she explained difficult topics clearly, which made learning enjoyable. Because of her encouragement, I became more confident speaking English.

提案: Answer directly and give a brief reason with clear grammar. Use linking words such as because or although. Avoid uncertainty words that contradict your main answer (e.g., “absolutely not” vs “maybe one day”).

例: No, I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I don't feel I have the necessary teaching skills or patience to manage children. However, I might consider it if I gain more training and confidence later.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then specific reasons with proper pronouns and fewer repetitions. Use linking words like because and also to structure your response. Replace vague phrases with concrete examples of what the teacher did.

例: Yes, I remember one teacher from my childhood. She was kind and gentle, and she encouraged me to study hard by giving extra help after class, which is why I still remember her.

提案: Answer directly, then give a short specific reason. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use a linking word like because and provide a concise explanation about why contact is not possible.

例: No, I'm not. Because it's been many years, I don't have their phone numbers or addresses anymore, so I can't keep in touch with them.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and then give one or two specific examples of help, using correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., “encouraged me to pursue my goals”). Keep sentences short and coherent using linking words such as by or for example.

例: My favorite teacher helped me by encouraging me to study harder and by giving personal advice about my goals. For example, she recommended books and praised my progress, which motivated me to pursue my dreams.

× Yes, I have. I like the like I like the teacher when I was young, uh, she is very, she was very kind and very, uh confident. So they and also she very good will teach. So I like her.

✓ Yes, I do. I liked my teacher when I was young; she was very kind and confident. She taught very well, so I liked her.

The student misused pronouns ('they'), mixed present and past incorrectly ('she is very, she was very'), and repeated phrases. Use 'I do' to answer 'Do you have...' and past tense 'liked' and 'was' to match 'when I was young'. Replace 'they' with 'she' and reorder to form clear sentences. Suggestion: Answer with a clear auxiliary ('Yes, I do'), keep consistent past tense for past experiences, and use correct subject pronoun 'she'. Use concise sentences.

× Absolutely not because I don't have, uh, good teacher skills. So teaching skills so, so I think I don't, I can't handle children's, but maybe when one day I feel I become.

✓ Absolutely not, because I don't have good teaching skills. I don't think I can handle children, but maybe one day I will.

Errors include awkward modal/auxiliary usage and noun forms: use 'don't have' + noun 'teaching skills' and 'I don't think I can' for ability. 'Children's' is incorrect possessive; use plural 'children'. For future possibility, use 'maybe one day I will'. Suggestion: Use correct noun forms ('teaching skills'), avoid contractions mid-sentence, and use appropriate modal verbs ('can' for ability, 'will' for future possibility).

× Yes I have, I have oh I can remember 1 teacher because she because he is very kind and gentle. Also she she she lead me to study hard so that's why I still remember her.

✓ Yes, I have. I can remember one teacher because she was very kind and gentle. She also encouraged me to study hard, so I still remember her.

Pronoun confusion: 'she because he' mixes genders; choose 'she'. Tense: use past tense 'was' and 'encouraged' for past events. 'Lead me to study hard' should be 'encouraged me to study hard' or 'led me to study hard'. Suggestion: Maintain consistent pronouns and past tense for past memories; use clear verbs like 'encouraged'.

× Well, no, because well, no, it is very long time. So like long time and I don't have any no any numbers and address about there about them so I can touch with with them, but.

✓ No, I am not. It has been a very long time, and I don't have any phone numbers or addresses for them, so I can't keep in touch.

Problems: incorrect tense and phrase 'it is very long time' should be present perfect 'it has been a very long time'. Double negatives 'don't have any no any' and wrong verb 'can touch with' — correct is 'keep in touch' or 'contact'. Also 'Are you still in touch?' expects 'No, I am not' or 'No, I am not still in touch.' Suggestion: Use 'It has been' for duration up to now, avoid double negatives, and use standard collocations like 'keep in touch' and 'phone numbers or addresses'.

× Umm, my favorite teachers, uh, him, he, he, him, uh, he, he very, uh, he helped me study hard and give encourage and encourage to uh, find my dreams.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me study hard and encouraged me to find my dreams.

Pronoun repetition and confusion: use singular 'teacher' and correct pronoun 'he' or 'she' once if needed. Verb forms: 'helped' and 'encouraged' should be past tense; 'give encourage' is incorrect — use 'encouraged me'. Suggestion: Use a single clear subject, keep verbs in past tense for past events, and use correct verb 'encourage' in past form with object ('encouraged me').