Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good: direct and relevant with a clear reason. To improve further, make the response more concise and vary vocabulary (use 'organised' instead of repeating 'tidy' and avoid filler phrases). Add one brief example to support your statement and use a linking word for coherence.

例: Yes, I do. Being organised makes me feel more comfortable and productive, so whenever I have spare time I straighten my desk and put things back where they belong.

提案: You directly answered and gave a personal reason, which is good. Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), avoid awkward phrasing (‘I have owned all my room’), and add a short linking word to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Not really. I preferred having a messy room because it felt like my own space, but my mother often scolded me for it, so I gradually learned to tidy up.

提案: Good content and clear method, but fix tense consistency (use present simple for routines), correct small errors (‘my S space’ → ‘my study space’), and combine into one smooth sentence with a linking word for fluency.

例: I keep my study space tidy by regularly straightening items and putting everything back in its place, especially after finishing a study session.

提案: Your answer expresses a clear opinion but contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Remove duplicated words, clarify what you mean by 'give us much more attention' (e.g. 'help us concentrate'), and use one or two supporting reasons linked by a connector like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I do, because being tidy helps us feel comfortable and improves concentration, so we can work more effectively than in a messy environment.

× Yes I do, because being tidy makes me feel comfortable, so whenever I have spare time I'll try to make my space tidy.

✓ Yes, I do, because being tidy makes me feel comfortable, so whenever I have spare time I try to make my space tidy.

The clause 'I'll try to make my space tidy' uses future tense 'will' but the context is habitual behaviour (whenever I have spare time). Use present simple 'I try' for regular habits. Also add necessary commas after 'Yes' and 'do' for clarity.

× To be honest, when I was a child I enjoyed a messy room because it made me feel I have owned all my room but I was always being scolded by my mom.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child I enjoyed a messy room because it made me feel I owned my whole room, but I was always scolded by my mom.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'it made me feel I have owned' mixes past and present perfect; use simple past 'I owned' to match 'made'. 'All my room' is unnatural; use 'my whole room'. 'Was always being scolded' is awkward passive continuous; use simple past passive 'was always scolded' to indicate repeated past action.

× When I have spare time I will try to straighten items and put everything back to its place. So that is how I keep my S space tidy.

✓ When I have spare time I try to straighten items and put everything back in its place. So that is how I keep my space tidy.

Again habitual action should use present simple 'I try' not 'I will try'. Preposition 'to its place' is less natural than 'in its place'. Remove extra letter 'S' before 'space'. Ensure consistent present tense for habitual routines.

× Yes I do because being tidy will make the will make us feel comfortable and and give us much more attention than being messy up do.

✓ Yes, I do, because being tidy makes us feel comfortable and helps us concentrate much more than being messy does.

Use present simple 'makes' instead of future 'will make' for general truths. The phrase had repetition 'the will make' and duplicate 'and and' and awkward 'give us much more attention'; better to say 'helps us concentrate much more'. 'Being messy up do' is incorrect; use 'being messy does'. Added commas for clarity.