Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰且内容相关，但存在语法错误、表达不够地道、句子结构稍显重复（如多次使用“tidy”/“clean”），以及时态和词汇使用需改进。建议： 1) 注意时态一致性，例如描述过去事件用过去式（I cleaned, I threw away, I felt）。 2) 使用更多连接词使表达更自然（e.g. As a result, which made me）。 3) 换用更地道的词汇和短语（e.g. declutter, put things in order, feel less stressed）。 4) 控制在最多5句内，第一句直接回答问题，然后用1-2句具体说明并用连词衔接。

例: Yes, I do. I find it important to keep my surroundings tidy because clutter distracts me. Last week I decluttered my room and threw away several items I no longer needed, which made me feel much more relaxed and in control of my daily routine.

提案: 回答有想法但表达混乱且多处语法错误，信息不连贯（‘made a message’和‘lose point because of my math’不明），时态和词汇使用不当。建议： 1) 明确表达因果关系并使用准确词汇（e.g. my mother used to tidy my room; I started tidying when I went to university because my grades suffered）。 2) 使用过去习惯表达（used to）来描述童年情况。 3) 精简句子，避免不相关或模糊的信息。

例: No, I didn't. My mother used to tidy my room for me when I was a child, so I never developed the habit. However, when I started university my grades suffered, so I began keeping my room orderly to improve my focus.

提案: 回答试图列举方法但组织混乱、语法和词汇错误严重，句子不通顺且重复（两次使用Secondly，错误短语如“throw every rubbish on it”、“put everything on in the room back”）。建议： 1) 用条理清晰的顺序列出步骤并使用连接词（First, then, finally）。 2) 使用准确短语（e.g. throw away rubbish, put things back in their places, wipe the desk）。 3) 保持句子简洁，每项不超过一两句，注意时态（一般现在时）。

例: I follow a simple routine. First, I clear my desk and throw away any rubbish. Then I put things back in their proper places and organize my stationery. Finally, I sweep or mop the floor once a week to keep the whole space clean.

提案: 回答观点明确但表达含糊且有语法问题（如“enter university”、“lose points because of my message”意义不清，时态混用），词汇搭配不当（“save a lot of time”后需说明如何）。建议： 1) 明确说明原因并使用正确时态（I entered university, I lost points）。 2) 提供具体后果或例子（tidiness saves time when studying, reduces stress）。 3) 使用连接词使论述流畅（However, as a result, therefore）。

例: Yes, I do. I used to think tidiness wasn't important, but after I entered university I found my grades dropped because I couldn't find materials easily. As a result, I became more organised, which now saves me time and helps me study with less stress.

× After that I feel much more relaxed and comfortable because I am in control of my daily life.

✓ After that I felt much more relaxed and comfortable because I was in control of my daily life.

句子描述的是上周发生的事（上周我打扫了房间），因此整体时态应该用过去时。原句用了现在时（feel, am），与上下文时间不一致。建议把动词改为过去式：feel → felt，am → was。

× No I didn't because my mom always tidied up after me if I made a message, but when I get to university I lose point because of my math.

✓ No, I didn't, because my mom always tidied up after me if I made a mess; but when I got to university I lost points because of my maths.

句子中多处时态和词汇错误：1) 描述儿童时期要用过去时（get → got, lose → lost）。2) 'made a message' 是错误用词，应为 'made a mess'。3) 'lose point' 数量和名词形式错误，应为 'lost points'；数学通常用复数 'maths'（英式）或 'math'（美式），需一致。建议统一使用过去时并纠正词汇。

× So after that I decided to keep tidy and clean my room.

✓ So after that I decided to keep my room tidy and clean it.

原句中结构不自然且缺少宾语：keep tidy 后面通常要有宾语（keep my room tidy），以及 clean my room 或 clean it。存在主谓或结构不匹配问题。建议明确宾语并调整词序。

× I will do several things to keep my space tidy, everyday friendly.

✓ I do several things to keep my space tidy every day.

回答关于一般如何保持整洁时应使用一般现在时，而不是将来时 'will'（这里是习惯性动作）。另外 'everyday friendly' 不是正确搭配，意图是 'every day'（每天）。建议用一般现在时并修改短语为 'every day'。

× I will clean my desk and throw every rubbish on it.

✓ I clean my desk and throw away any rubbish on it.

1) 'throw every rubbish on it' 用法错误，英语中通常说 'throw away rubbish' 或 'throw any rubbish away'。2) 'every rubbish' 不自然，应为 'any rubbish' 或 'the rubbish'。此外将来时改为一般现在时以表示习惯。建议使用 'throw away any rubbish on it'。

× Secondly I will put everything on in the room back and organize my things Secondly I will. Wash the floor.

✓ Secondly, I put everything back in the room and organize my things. I also wash the floor.

原句中 'put everything on in the room back' 词序混乱，介词 'in' 与 'back' 位置错误；此外句子断开并且标点错误。将来时改为一般现在时以表示习惯性动作；把 'put everything back in the room' 排列正确，并把 'Wash the floor' 连成完整句 'I also wash the floor'。

× To be honest I used to think it is not necessary, but after I enter university I lose points because of my message.

✓ To be honest, I used to think it wasn't necessary, but after I entered university I lost points because of my mess.

1) 时间表达 'used to' 表示过去习惯，后面描述的具体事件需用过去时（is → wasn't）。2) 'after I enter university' 应为过去 'after I entered university'。3) 'lose points' 和 'message' 用词不当，改为 'lost points' 和 'mess'。整体需统一过去时。

× After that I think it is necessary and it really save a lot of time and make me feel comfortable.

✓ After that I thought it was necessary and it really saved a lot of time and made me feel comfortable.

句子讲述过去发生的转变，应该使用过去时：think → thought，is → was，save → saved，make → made。原句使用现在时与上下文时间不一致。建议将相关动词改为过去式以保持时态一致。