Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct grammar (e.g., 'my room is always tidy' not 'my room always nothing on the floor'), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy. For example, my room is always neat with nothing on the floor, because I make my bed every morning and put clothes in the closet. This makes it easier to find things.

提案: Answer directly and expand with a clear reason or brief consequence. Remove hesitations and fix grammar (e.g., 'I didn't; I used to leave my toys on the floor, so my mother was often angry'). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn't. As a child I often left my toys on the floor, so my mother was frequently angry because she had to tidy up after me.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence describing your method, then give one or two specific actions with correct grammar and linking words. For example, say what you do and why it helps. Avoid sentence fragments and ensure subject-verb agreement ('keeps' or 'makes').

例: I keep my study space tidy by organizing my books and clearing my desk every evening. This routine helps me feel more confident because I can focus better without distractions.

提案: State your opinion clearly and support it with a specific reason and example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'leads people to feel more mentally stable') and use a linking word like 'because' to explain why tidiness matters. Keep it short and direct.

例: Yes, I think it's necessary to be tidy because a clean environment helps people feel more mentally stable. For instance, a tidy desk reduces stress and improves concentration when you study.

× Yes, I like keeping anything clean.

✓ Yes, I like keeping everything clean.

The student used 'anything' incorrectly. 'Anything' is used in negative or interrogative contexts; 'everything' correctly refers to all things in affirmative statements. Replace 'anything' with 'everything' to match the affirmative meaning.

× For example my room always uh nothing on the floor and I want to keep condition very clean.

✓ For example, my room never has anything on the floor, and I want to keep it very clean.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and missing a verb. 'Nothing on the floor' needs a verb phrase like 'never has anything on the floor.' Also 'condition very clean' is awkward; use 'keep it very clean' to refer back to 'my room.' Added commas and conjunction for clarity.

× No, I didn't. I used to keep my room, uh, dirty.

✓ No, I didn't. I used to keep my room dirty.

The insertion of commas and 'uh' interrupts flow but the main error is punctuation/formatting. 'Used to' correctly expresses a past habitual action; remove the unnecessary comma for standard phrasing.

× For example, I left my toy on the floor.

✓ For example, I left my toys on the floor.

If the student is describing a habitual messy childhood, plural 'toys' is more natural. Use plural when referring to multiple items; if only one toy is intended, keep singular but context suggests plural.

× So my mother always uh. Angry with me?

✓ So my mother was always angry with me.

Original has fragment 'Angry with me?' and incorrect punctuation. Use full clause 'my mother was always angry with me' to express past state. Replace 'always uh.' with 'was always' and remove question mark.

× I think keeping my workspace tidy make my things clear, so I need to clean desk makes me more confident.

✓ I think keeping my workspace tidy makes my things clear, so I need to clean my desk; it makes me more confident.

Subject-verb agreement: 'keeping my workspace tidy' is singular, so use 'makes' not 'make.' Also 'clean desk' needs an article and possessive: 'clean my desk.' Split into two clauses for clarity and add 'it' to refer to cleaning making the speaker more confident.

× Yes, keeping something tidy lead people to make stable mental so people have to keep clean their desks or working space.

✓ Yes, keeping things tidy leads people to have a more stable mental state, so people should keep their desks or workspaces clean.

'Something tidy' and 'lead people to make stable mental' are incorrect. Use 'things tidy' or 'keeping things tidy' and 'leads' for subject-verb agreement. 'Make stable mental' should be 'have a more stable mental state.' 'Have to keep clean their desks' has wrong word order; use 'keep their desks or workspaces clean.'