Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason with a linking word. Avoid repeating words and incorrect verb forms.

例: Yes, I like to keep my things tidy. I do this because a messy space makes me feel frustrated, and keeping things organized helps me concentrate better.

提案: Use correct tense forms and a clear contrast. Begin with a direct answer, then explain with a past-tense description and a linking word showing change.

例: No, I didn't keep my room tidy when I was a child. However, as I grew older I became more responsible and started tidying my room regularly.

提案: Organize your answer into one or two clear sentences, use habitual present tense for routines, and use linking words to separate actions. Be specific about the frequency and steps.

例: Before I start working I always clear my desk and put away distractions so I can focus. For my study space I do a more thorough tidy-up once a month, including sorting papers and cleaning surfaces.

提案: Give a clear opinion sentence and then one specific reason using linking words. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it reduces stress and saves time. For example, when everything is organized I can find what I need quickly and feel calmer.

× Yes, I will try my best to keep my things tidy because if it didn't tidy I will feel a little bit angry.

✓ Yes, I try my best to keep my things tidy because if they are not tidy I feel a little angry.

Original mixes future and conditional incorrectly and uses 'didn't tidy' (wrong verb and tense) and 'it' to refer to plural 'things'. Use present simple to state habitual action: 'I try'. For the condition use present simple: 'if they are not tidy' and match plural pronoun 'they'. Use 'feel a little angry' (avoid 'a little bit angry' for conciseness).

× Now when I was a child my room were not tidy.

✓ When I was a child my room was not tidy.

Sentence uses incorrect present time adverb 'Now' and wrong plural verb 'were' for singular 'room'. Remove 'Now' and use past tense singular verb 'was'.

× I just keep my room tidy when I grow up.

✓ I only kept my room tidy when I grew up.

The speaker refers to a past period; use past tense 'kept' and 'grew up'. Also 'just' as 'only' is clearer. If meaning is habitual from childhood to adulthood, use 'I kept my room tidy as I grew up' or present perfect: 'I have kept my room tidy since I grew up'.

× When I work, before I start my work I will try to keep my place study keep my place tidy, while for my study space I will keep it once a month to make sure that my space are tidied.

✓ Before I start working I try to keep my workplace tidy. For my study space, I clean it once a month to make sure it stays tidy.

Original is repetitive and mixes future with habitual actions. Use gerund 'working' after 'start' and present simple 'try' for habits. 'Workplace' or 'work area' is clearer than 'place study'. 'Clean it once a month' expresses frequency; 'space are tidied' is wrong subject-verb agreement and tense. Use 'it stays tidy'.

× Yes, if not tidy. It was like a little bit angry and were very stressed where we can't find the things and not find the things easily.

✓ Yes, if things are not tidy I feel a little angry and very stressed because we cannot find things easily.

The original is fragmented and uses wrong tenses and agreement ('was', 'were') and awkward phrasing. Combine into one sentence, use present simple for general truth: 'if things are not tidy I feel... we cannot find things easily'. Use 'feel' for emotion and 'cannot' or 'can't' for ability. Replace 'the things' with 'things' for natural English.