Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more concise, correct grammar (articles, verb forms), and avoid unnecessary negatives ("I wouldn't consider myself as an OCD person"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Watch subject-verb agreement and uncountable nouns.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because a clean environment helps me concentrate. For example, when my desk is organised I can find documents quickly and complete tasks faster, so I feel less stressed and more productive.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence about past habit, correct verb forms and plurals, and avoid broad generalisations like "every child is the same." Add a clear contrast if you want (past vs now) and one specific detail or example.

例: Not really. When I was a child my room was usually messy because I left toys and clothes everywhere. For instance, my parents had to tell me to tidy up before dinner most days, which taught me to be neater as I grew older.

提案: Organise your answer into clear steps with correct grammar and more precise vocabulary (e.g. "designated spot", "put things back"). Use linking words (first, then, finally) and avoid filler phrases. Make sentences shorter and check pronouns and prepositions.

例: I keep my study space tidy by using a designated spot for each item. First, I assign places for books, pens and cables; then, after studying I always put items back in their spots so the desk stays clutter-free and I waste less time looking for things.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with correct word choices (e.g. "concentrated", "creative"). Remove hesitation words and correct collocations ("lose concentration", "a messy environment"). Keep it to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is important because it helps me concentrate and be creative. For example, in a messy environment I get distracted easily and lose concentration, but a clean desk lets me work for longer periods without interruption.

× Yes, I wouldn't consider myself as a OCD person or a person who obsessed with tidiness, but I definitely have to get things around me clean and neat because it create a much more comfortable environment for me so I can perform everything better.

✓ Yes, I wouldn't consider myself an OCD person or a person who is obsessed with tidiness, but I definitely have to keep the things around me clean and neat because it creates a much more comfortable environment for me, so I can perform better.

Problems: incorrect article use before acronym 'OCD' (use 'an' before vowel sound), missing verb 'is' in passive participle 'obsessed', subject-verb agreement 'create' should be 'creates', and awkward phrase 'get things around me clean' corrected to 'keep the things around me clean'. Suggestion: Use 'an' before vowel sounds, include necessary linking verbs for passive constructions, ensure verbs agree with singular subjects, and choose clearer verb phrases. Grammar problem type ID:12

× When I was a child, my rooms was always so messy with all sorts of things like toys, clothes and my parents always had to remind me to clean the room at least twice a day.

✓ When I was a child, my room was always so messy with all sorts of things like toys and clothes, and my parents always had to remind me to clean the room at least twice a day.

Problems: 'rooms' should be singular 'room' to match context; run-on sentence needs conjunction and comma before 'and'. Suggestion: Ensure noun number matches context and separate clauses correctly with commas and conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:1

× I think every child is the same.

✓ I think every child is the same in that way.

Problem: sentence is vague and slightly unnatural; adding 'in that way' clarifies the comparison. Suggestion: Add a phrase to specify what 'the same' refers to for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26

× First I choose a place where the things belongs to like you can only be here on.

✓ First I choose a place where things belong, like a single spot where they should be kept.

Problems: incorrect verb form 'belongs' should be 'belong' to match plural 'things'; awkward and incorrect phrase 'you can only be here on' replaced with clearer expression. Suggestion: Match verb number to noun and use clear prepositional phrases to indicate location. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So when I take them out I put them in at that same place so nothing will mess up and and it doesn't take time.

✓ So when I take them out, I put them back in that same place so nothing gets messy and it doesn't take time.

Problems: unnecessary preposition 'in at', duplicated 'and and', incorrect 'mess up' changed to 'gets messy' for clarity, and tense/voice adjusted to natural phrasing. Suggestion: Remove redundant words, use correct prepositions, and choose idiomatic expressions. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Well I always apply this whenever I go for work or study.

✓ Well, I always do this whenever I go to work or study.

Problems: 'apply this' is awkward; use 'do this'. Preposition 'go for work' should be 'go to work'. Suggestion: Use common collocations: 'go to work', 'go to study' or 'study' as verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID:6

× A tidy space feels like a comfort zone for me where I can stay concentrated and spark my creativity.

✓ A tidy space feels like a comfort zone for me where I can stay focused and spark my creativity.

Problems: 'stay concentrated' is not natural; use 'stay focused'. Article usage is fine. Suggestion: Use collocations 'stay focused' rather than 'stay concentrated' for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:22

× So for example when I need to stay uh, focus amassing environment will really make me uncomfortable and lose concentrate.

✓ So, for example, when I need to stay focused, a messy environment will really make me uncomfortable and cause me to lose concentration.

Problems: 'stay uh, focus' should be 'stay focused'; 'amassing environment' is incorrect and should be 'a messy environment'; 'lose concentrate' should be 'lose concentration' or 'lose focus'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective 'messy', correct verb/adjective forms, and noun 'concentration' for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:26