Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まず、丁寧な呼びかけ（“No lady”は不自然）を避け、質問に直接答える明確なトピック文を作ってください。次に、文法（主語・動詞の一致、時制）と語彙選択を改善し、不要な繰り返しを避けること。つなぎ言葉（for example, because, so）を使って理由や対比を明確にし、文を2〜3文にまとめて簡潔に述べてください。具体例（夫が部屋を片付けることが多い等）を入れると内容が豊かになります。

例: No, I’m not very good at keeping things tidy. For example, my husband usually cleans the room because he prefers a neat environment, so he often compliments me when I help out.

提案: 直接で明確なトピック文（Yes/No）を述べた後、過去の習慣について一つか二つの具体的な詳細を付け加えてください。文法（“used to”、過去形、“compliment”の誤用）を正し、繋ぎ語を適切に使って因果関係を示してください。また、冗長な“so”を減らし、最大5文以内に収めて自然に話しましょう。

例: No, I didn’t. I used to keep my room messy as a child, and my parents often asked me to tidy it. For instance, they would tell me to put toys away every weekend, but I rarely did.

提案: 質問にはまず現在の習慣を示すトピック文で答え、その後具体的な方法を1〜2点挙げてください。文法を修正し、自然な語順と語彙（use files, folders, organizers）を使い、接続詞（for example, so）で理由や結果をつなぎます。具体例（ファイルを色分けする等）を入れると説得力が増します。

例: I’m not naturally tidy, but I try to keep my workspace organized. For example, I use folders and labeled files to store documents, and I clear my desk at the end of each day so it doesn’t get cluttered.

提案: 肯定のトピック文を述べた後、理由を論理的に説明し、具体例や頻度を加えてください。語順と表現（“tidy makes people feel comfortable”→“being tidy makes people feel more comfortable”）を自然な形に直し、“uh”などのフィラーは削減しましょう。最後に自分の難しさを短く説明してバランスを取ると良いです。

例: Yes, I do. Being tidy makes people feel more comfortable and it helps me concentrate better; however, I find it hard to tidy up every day because I’m often busy with work.

× No lady, I'm not good at keeping something tidy so my husband compliment me sometimes because he like to keep the room tidy.

✓ No, ma'am, I'm not good at keeping things tidy, so my husband compliments me sometimes because he likes to keep the room tidy.

The sentence has several pronoun and subject-verb agreement issues. 'Lady' is unnatural in this context; use 'ma'am'. 'Something tidy' should be 'things tidy' (plural) — use Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue. 'Husband compliment me' requires third person singular verb 'compliments' — Grammar Problem Type 2: Third person singular issue. 'He like' should be 'he likes' — also Grammar Problem Type 2. Combine corrections: pluralize 'things' and use third-person singular verbs. Suggestion: pay attention to subject-verb agreement and use natural forms of address.

× No I didn't. So my room was messy when I was a child so my parents compliment to me but I couldn't.

✓ No, I didn't. My room was messy when I was a child, and my parents complained to me, but I couldn't keep it tidy.

The original contains incorrect verb choice and structure. 'Compliment to me' is wrong; likely intended 'complain to me' or 'complained to me' — this is a past tense issue (Grammar Problem Type 5). Also 'I couldn't' needs an object or infinitive: 'I couldn't keep it tidy.' Use past tense consistently: 'complained' and 'couldn't keep'. Suggestion: use correct past verbs and complete verb phrases.

× I'm not good at the keeping something tidy, but I tried to do at the work, so I utilized some file to keep documents.

✓ I'm not good at keeping things tidy, but I try to do it at work, so I use some files to keep documents organized.

Multiple errors: 'the keeping' should be 'keeping' — article unnecessary (Grammar Problem Type 22: Article errors). 'Something tidy' should be 'things tidy' (Grammar Problem Type 1). 'I tried to do at the work' is ungrammatical and tense-mismatched; 'I try to do it at work' fits habitual action (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). 'Utilized some file' is incorrect article/number and word choice; use 'use some files' (plural) and 'organized' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 1 and 13). Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles, match plurality, and choose verbs appropriate for habitual actions.

× Yes I do. I can understand tidy uh makes people feel comfortable, but it is difficult for me to do cleaning up every time.

✓ Yes, I do. I understand that being tidy makes people feel comfortable, but it is difficult for me to clean up every time.

'I can understand tidy uh makes' is awkward. Use noun form 'being tidy' with verb + -ing (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'Do cleaning up' is incorrect; use 'clean up' (base verb) after 'difficult for me to' (Grammar Problem Type 26: Sentence structure errors). Suggestion: use 'being tidy' to express the concept and 'clean up' as the correct verb phrase after 'difficult for me to'.