Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図が伝わるものの、文法ミス、語順の不自然さ、曖昧な語彙（"something"）や過度なフィラー（"Umm", "Uh"）が多く、論理的な構造も弱いです。より明確なトピック文（好む理由）を述べ、その後で具体的な理由を一つか二つ、つなぎ言葉（because, so, therefore）を使って短く説明しましょう。発音や流暢さのためにフィラーを減らし、語彙は“study/working environment, concentrate, focus”など適切な語を使ってください。

例: Yes, I do. I prefer to keep my workspace tidy because it helps me concentrate better. For example, when my desk is organised I can find my books quickly, so I waste less time and can study more effectively.

提案: 回答は簡潔だが文法や語彙の誤りが多い（"began began to tie"、"I because I realized he tidy up is good"）。過去習慣について話す場合は"used to"や過去形を正しく使い、変化の理由を一つの明確な文で述べましょう。つなぎ語（but, however, so）で流れを良くし、間違いやすい動詞フレーズ（"tidy up", "keep tidy"）を正確に使ってください。

例: No, I didn't. I used to have a very messy room when I was a child, but when I started college I began tidying it regularly because I realised that a clean room helps me study more effectively.

提案: 答えは方法を示しているが、言い直しや不自然な語順（"I we I work"）、文法（"each times", "one piece of my work"）の誤りがある。方法を説明する際は主語と動詞を明確にし、頻度を表す表現（"every time", "after finishing a task", "during breaks"）を使うと自然です。具体的な行動（put papers away, tidy desk, organise files）を挙げると説得力が増します。

例: I tidy my study area every time I finish a task or during short breaks. For instance, I always put away papers, put books back on the shelf and wipe the desk so my workspace stays organised.

提案: 意見は明確だが、文法と語順の問題（"being tidy up it helps me to constantly concentrate on my task is", "So every before my task we should do we"）で意味が分かりにくい。主張の後に理由を一文で示し、結論の提案はシンプルにまとめましょう。つなぎ語（because, therefore）を使って論理をはっきりさせ、冗長な語を避けてください。

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps me concentrate and work more efficiently. Therefore, I try to organise my desk before starting any task so I can focus immediately.

× Yes I do because of keeping things study.

✓ Yes, I do because keeping things tidy helps me study.

The original sentence uses 'because of keeping things study' which is ungrammatical. Use 'because' + clause or 'because of' + noun/gerund. 'Keeping things tidy helps me study' uses the gerund 'keeping' correctly and 'study' as a verb; this makes the meaning clear. Use 'tidy' instead of 'study' as an adjective to describe things.

× Umm, I can concentrate on the studying or something.

✓ I can concentrate on my studies.

The phrase 'on the studying or something' is vague and ungrammatical. Use 'concentrate on' followed by a noun or gerund phrase; 'my studies' is a natural noun phrase that fits the context.

× Uh, I have to do.

✓ Uh, I have to do my work.

The clause 'I have to do' is incomplete because it lacks an object. Specify what you have to do, for example 'my work' or 'my tasks', to make the sentence grammatical.

× No, I didn't.

✓ No, I didn't.

This short answer is grammatically acceptable for the question 'Did you use to keep your room tidy as a child?'. No correction needed.

× When I was a child my room was very messy, but when I started college I began began to tie it regularly.

✓ When I was a child my room was very messy, but when I started college I began to tidy it regularly.

There is a repeated word 'began began' and 'tie' is a misspelling of 'tidy'. 'Began to tidy it regularly' or 'began tidying it regularly' are correct past tense structures. Use a single 'began' and the correct verb 'tidy'.

× I because I realized he tidy up is good.

✓ I began because I realized tidying up is good.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and pronoun 'he' is incorrect. Use 'I began because I realized tidying up is good' or 'I started because I realized that tidying up is good'. Use the gerund 'tidying up' as the subject of the clause.

× I we I work.

✓ When I work,

The fragment 'I we I work' is garbled and ungrammatical. Likely intended 'When I work,' or 'While I work,' to introduce how the student keeps the space tidy.

× I tidy up the study room each times I finished one piece of my work or if I have a break.

✓ I tidy up the study room each time I finish a piece of work or when I have a break.

Use 'each time' (singular) and present simple 'finish' to show habitual action. 'If I have a break' can be more naturally 'when I have a break'. Also use 'a piece of work' or 'some work' rather than 'one piece of my work' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, and being tidy up it helps me to constantly concentrate on my task is.

✓ Yes, being tidy helps me concentrate on my tasks consistently.

The original has redundant words and incorrect word order: 'being tidy up it helps me to constantly concentrate on my task is' is ungrammatical. Use 'being tidy helps me concentrate on my tasks consistently.' Remove unnecessary 'up' after 'tidy' and use 'concentrate' without 'to' after 'helps'.

× So every before my task we should do we.

✓ So before every task, I tidy up.

The phrase 'So every before my task we should do we' is ungrammatical and unclear. A clear correction is 'So before every task, I tidy up.' This specifies the timing and the subject correctly.