Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I like to keep things tidy), then give one or two specific reasons using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetitive phrases and unclear examples.

例: Yes, I like to keep things tidy because it helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. For example, I always put my keys and phone in the same place so I don't waste time looking for them.

提案: Give a direct answer and correct past tense. Use linking words to organize details and be specific about routines or examples. Avoid unclear or incorrect words (e.g. 'tired' should be 'tidy').

例: Yes, I used to keep my room tidy as a child. For example, I always put my toys in a toy box and kept my books on a shelf, so I could easily find them when I wanted to play or read.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear present-tense topic sentence describing your routine. Use specific, correct nouns (desk, drawer, shelf) and linking words (first, then, finally). Avoid confusing tense shifts and unclear terms like 'cabaret' or 'house a keyboard'.

例: I keep my study space tidy by using a desk organizer and drawers. First, I put pens and stationery in a pencil cup; then I place books on a shelf. Finally, I store old notes in labeled boxes so my desk stays clear.

提案: Start with a clear opinion (Yes/No) and give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Use natural phrases and avoid repetition. Correct grammar: 'it saves time' and 'helps us be punctual'.

例: Yes, I think it is necessary to be tidy because it saves time when you need something and it helps you stay organized and punctual. For instance, a tidy desk makes it easier to start work on time.

× Most of the time I'm keeping the things tidy because I'm thinking that when I keep something tidy like it will help me in future.

✓ Most of the time I keep things tidy because I think that keeping something tidy will help me in the future.

The student overuses continuous forms where simple present is appropriate. Use simple present for habitual actions (I keep, I think). 'Keeping' as a gerund is correct in 'keeping something tidy will help'. Add the article 'the' before 'future'. Suggestion: use simple present for routines and use gerund correctly as noun phrases.

× For example, if I close my door I will be locking it, so if I keep keeping it tightly it will.

✓ For example, if I close my door I lock it, so if I keep it closed tightly it will help.

Conditional and habitual actions should use simple present (if I close... I lock). 'Will be locking' is unnecessary continuous future. 'Keep keeping' is incorrect repetition; use 'keep it closed' to describe state. Add the verb 'help' to complete the idea.

× Yeah, when I was a child, I was keeping my rooms tired.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I kept my rooms tidy.

Use simple past 'kept' for past habitual actions, not past continuous 'was keeping'. 'Rooms tired' is incorrect adjective order and choice: 'tired' should be 'tidy'. Suggestion: use correct adjective 'tidy' and simple past for repeated past actions.

× Like, for example, my toys were in the same place, which they are, and my other playing things were in there another area.

✓ For example, my toys were in the same place, and my other playthings were in another area.

Pronoun 'which they are' is unnecessary and awkward. 'Playing things' is not natural; use 'playthings' or 'toys'. Word order 'in there another area' is incorrect; use 'in another area'. Suggestion: remove redundant clauses and use natural noun forms.

× And my books and my story books and my school books.

✓ And my story books and school books were organized too.

Sentence fragment lacks a verb. Add 'were organized' to form a complete sentence and show past state. Also combine similar nouns for clarity.

× I make for my study things and for my books and pens and house a keyboard for ex.

✓ I make arrangements for my study things, such as my books, pens, and a keyboard, for example.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and missing prepositions. 'Make for my study things' is ungrammatical; use 'make arrangements for' or 'organize'. 'House a keyboard' is wrong; use 'have a keyboard' or include it in the list. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'organize' or 'arrange' and group examples with 'such as' or 'for example'.

× Especially for this old stuff. I will keep them in a cabaret and my playing things will be under the cover under my drawing.

✓ Especially for old stuff, I keep them in a cabinet, and my toys are kept under the cover of my drawing materials.

'Cabaret' is incorrect word; use 'cabinet'. Use present simple 'keep' for habitual action rather than 'I will keep'. Prepositions 'under the cover under my drawing' are redundant and unclear; use 'under the cover of my drawing materials' or 'under my drawing board'. Suggestion: choose correct nouns and prepositions, and use consistent tense.

× So when I used to study I would study my drawing.

✓ So when I used to study, I would work on my drawings.

'Study my drawing' is awkward; use 'work on my drawings' to convey practicing a skill. 'Used to' and 'would' both indicate past habit; together they are acceptable but redundant; keep one for clarity. Suggestion: use either 'I used to study and work on my drawings' or 'I would work on my drawings'.

× Is sure most of the time we should be tidy because it will help us to save the time whenever we want it to take anything, it will save our time and we will be neat and clean and also will be punctual.

✓ Yes, surely most of the time we should be tidy because it helps us save time when we need something; it keeps us neat and clean and also helps us be punctual.

'Is sure' is incorrect; use 'Yes, surely' or 'I'm sure'. 'Should' is acceptable but 'helps' expresses general truth better. Avoid awkward infinitive 'to take anything' and redundant clauses. Use simple present 'helps' for general truths. Suggestion: restructure sentence into clear clauses: reason (it helps save time), result (we are neat and punctual).