Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good topic sentence and supporting details. Improve by correcting minor grammar errors (e.g., "A tidy environments" → "A tidy environment") and avoid slight redundancy between "comfortable and relaxed"—choose one or add a distinct reason. Also keep responses within 3–4 sentences maximum and add a linking word to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I do. I feel more relaxed when my room is clean and organized because it reduces distractions. Furthermore, a tidy environment helps me stay focused when I am studying or working.

提案: Your answer communicates the main idea but has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases ("Not really when and what I shall", repeated "gladly"). Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, and avoid repetitions. Add a linking word to show contrast and give a brief specific example of how your parents helped.

例: Not really. My room was often messy because I preferred playing with my toys rather than tidying up. However, my parents would remind me to clean once a week, so eventually I developed the habit of tidying regularly.

提案: Good structure and useful specifics. Fix minor grammar issues ("thing" → "things", "This help" → "This helps"). You can improve coherence by adding a linking word to show purpose and perhaps one short example of what you keep on the desk.

例: I usually organize my desk at the end of each day. For example, I put documents into folders, throw away unnecessary papers, and keep only the items I need, such as my laptop and notebook. This helps me start work more efficiently the next morning.

提案: Your answer is concise and relevant but has a small grammar error ("Is also creates" → "It also creates"). To improve, combine ideas with linking words (e.g., "Moreover" or "Additionally") and provide a brief example or result to make the point more specific.

例: Yes, I think it is necessary. Being tidy saves time because you can find things more easily. Additionally, it creates a better environment for studying and can reduce stress, for example when I can quickly locate a notebook before an important class.

× A tidy environments also helps me stay focused, especially when I am studying or working.

✓ A tidy environment also helps me stay focused, especially when I am studying or working.

The noun 'environments' is plural but refers to a singular concept 'a tidy environment'; use singular form 'environment' to agree with the article 'a'. Replace 'environments' with 'environment' to fix singular/plural agreement.

× Not really when and what I shall.

✓ Not really. I didn't use to.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. The intended meaning is to say you did not habitually keep your room tidy as a child. Use the correct past habitual structure 'didn't use to' or 'I didn't use to' as a clear, grammatical response. Also separate into two sentences for clarity.

× My room was often messy because I like playing with my toys and didn't enjoy cleaning up.

✓ My room was often messy because I liked playing with my toys and didn't enjoy cleaning up.

The sentence mixes past ('was', 'didn't enjoy') with present 'like'. To maintain consistent past tense when talking about childhood habits, change 'like' to 'liked'.

× However, my parents always remind me to keep my room neat, so gladly I gladly developed this habit.

✓ However, my parents always reminded me to keep my room neat, so I gladly developed this habit.

Pronoun and verb tense issues: 'remind' should be past 'reminded' to match the past context. Remove the duplicate 'gladly' and place 'I' before the verb for correct word order: 'so I gladly developed this habit.' This fixes tense consistency and pronoun placement.

× I put documents into folders, throw away unnecessary papers, and keep only the thing I need on my desk.

✓ I put documents into folders, throw away unnecessary papers, and keep only the things I need on my desk.

'the thing' is singular but refers to multiple possible items; use plural 'things' to match context and the plural verb 'need'. This corrects singular/plural agreement.

× This help me start work more efficiently the next day.

✓ This helps me start work more efficiently the next day.

The subject 'This' requires third person singular verb form 'helps'. Change 'help' to 'helps' to satisfy subject-verb agreement.

× Is also creates a better environment for working or studying and can even reduce stress.

✓ It also creates a better environment for working or studying and can even reduce stress.

The sentence is missing the subject pronoun 'It'. Adding 'It' corrects the sentence structure. Also use 'also' after the subject for natural word order: 'It also creates...'.