Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Réponse claire mais un peu courte et répétitive. Variez le vocabulaire et ajoutez un exemple concret ou une conséquence personnelle pour enrichir la réponse. Utilisez une structure avec une phrase principale puis une ou deux phrases de soutien, sans dépasser cinq phrases.

例: Yes, I do. I prefer a tidy environment because it helps me find things quickly and reduces stress. For example, when my desk is clear I can focus better on work and finish tasks faster.

提案: Bonne narration avec un détail concret, mais la phrase est trop longue et contient des petites erreurs grammaticales. Divisez en deux phrases et corrigez la structure (utiliser 'wasn't' ou 'didn't' correctement). Ajoutez un lien logique (par exemple, 'because') pour clarifier la raison.

例: Not really. I wasn't tidy as a child because I often left toys on the floor. I remember my mother was afraid to enter my room because she could step on a toy and hurt her toes.

提案: Réponse très courte avec erreurs grammaticales et hésitation verbale. Corrigez la grammaire (present simple: 'I clean it every week') et évitez les hésitations. Donnez des détails concrets sur les méthodes utilisées (routines, rangement, boîtes de rangement) pour montrer maîtrise du discours.

例: I clean my workspace every week. I tidy documents into folders, put stationery into a pen holder, and wipe the desk surface so everything stays neat.

提案: Bonne idée principale mais problèmes grammaticaux (accords, 'it helps') et formulation maladroite. Reformulez avec des liaisons logiques et un exemple ou une conséquence claire. Évitez les répétitions et structurez en deux phrases maximum.

例: Yes, I think being tidy is necessary because it helps you stay organized and reduces distractions. For instance, when my room is tidy I can concentrate better and complete tasks more efficiently.

× I like to keep things tidy as it is easier to be organized in a tidy environment.

✓ I like to keep things tidy because it is easier to be organized in a tidy environment.

The original sentence used 'as' which is acceptable but can be ambiguous; however the main issue is clarity rather than grammar. Use 'because' to clearly express cause. Also maintain present simple tense for general preferences. Grammar problem type ID:6

× When I was a child I didn't keep my room tidy and I remember that my mother was scared of coming inside of my bedroom as she was afraid to walk on one of my toys and hurt her toes.

✓ When I was a child I didn't keep my room tidy, and I remember that my mother was afraid to come into my bedroom because she was afraid she might step on one of my toys and hurt her toes.

Multiple past-tense issues and word choice: 'scared of coming inside of my bedroom' is awkward; use 'afraid to come into my bedroom'. 'Afraid to walk on one of my toys' should be 'afraid she might step on one of my toys' to express possibility. Maintain past simple throughout. Also add a comma before the conjunction for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I keep my work umm space tidy by clean it every weeks.

✓ I keep my work space tidy by cleaning it every week.

After 'by' use the -ing form of the verb ('cleaning') to indicate the method. 'Every weeks' is incorrect; use the singular time expression 'every week'. Also remove filler 'umm' in written form. This fixes verb form and quantifier/time expression. Grammar problem type ID:8

× In my own opinion it is necessary to be tidy as it help to be organized and by making less distraction it can have a focus benefit.

✓ In my opinion it is necessary to be tidy because it helps you stay organized and reduces distractions, which improves concentration.

Subject-verb agreement and present tense: 'it help' should be 'it helps' (third person singular present). 'In my own opinion' is wordy; 'In my opinion' is preferred. 'By making less distraction' is ungrammatical; use 'reduces distractions'. 'It can have a focus benefit' is awkward—use 'improves concentration'. Maintain present simple for general statements. Grammar problem type ID:6