Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図が伝わるが、文法ミス、語順の不自然さ、省略された語、語彙の正確さが欠けている。具体的には三人称単数や時制の一致、可算・不可算の扱い（a lot of の後に名詞が必要）に注意すること。回答を簡潔に保ち、トピック文の後に1–2の具体例をつなぎ語（for example, because, so）で結ぶ練習をすること。発音では「tidy」や「room」の語末をはっきり発音する練習も有効。

例: I'd like to keep things tidy, but I'm not very good at it. For example, my bedroom is usually messy because I leave clothes and books on the floor. As a result, I find it hard to relax in that space.

提案: 時制と助動詞の使い方に注意（例: used to の肯定・否定、過去形）。不要な繰り返しやためらい語（uh, umm）を減らして、簡潔に答える練習をすること。構造としてはトピック文（Yes/No + brief statement）→具体例（one short detail）→結果や感情を追加する流れを守ると良い。日本語での自己チェック例文を用意し、英訳する練習が効果的。

例: No, I didn't use to keep my room tidy as a child. My mother often shouted at me because I left toys and clothes everywhere, so I rarely cleaned up until she asked me to.

提案: 冒頭の“luxury”は文脈に合わない語彙で意味が不明。質問には直接答えており意図は伝わるが、表現を明確にし、リンク語（because, so, therefore）を自然に使う練習が必要。具体例（整理の方法や頻度）を追加すると説得力が増す。語彙は簡潔で正確な語を選ぶこと。

例: I keep my desk tidy by putting away papers every evening and using trays for important documents. Because a clear desk helps me concentrate, I also tidy it before I start studying.

提案: 意見は述べられているが理由付けが不十分で文法的誤り（冠詞の欠如、形容詞＋名詞の語順、不要な文字）や語彙ミスがある。対比を示す表現（however, although）や具体例を使って論理を強化する練習をすること。もっと自然なフレーズ（important, necessary, essential）を正しく使うこと。

例: I think being tidy is important because it makes daily tasks easier, but it's not absolutely necessary for everyone. For instance, my boss is very capable despite having a messy desk, so I believe tidiness depends on personal working style.

× Oh, actually I want to keep tidy, but in my case I can't keep tidy.

✓ Oh, actually I want to keep things tidy, but in my case I can't.

Subject is fine, but phrase 'keep tidy' is unnatural without an object; add 'things' and drop the repeated 'keep tidy' at the end for clarity. Use present simple 'want' and 'can't' correctly.

× For example, I don't keep my room tidy.

✓ For example, I don't keep my room tidy.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. (Included only because it relates to plurality; keep as is.)

× My room is very confusing and there are a lot of.

✓ My room is very messy and there is a lot of clutter.

'Confusing' describes something that causes confusion, not a messy room. 'There are a lot of' is incomplete and needs a noun; use 'a lot of clutter' or 'many things'. Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'there is a lot of clutter.'

× As I said, I not good at keeping tidy so when I was child I don't used to keep my room tidy.

✓ As I said, I'm not good at keeping things tidy, so when I was a child I didn't use to keep my room tidy.

Use contraction or 'am not' for present state. 'When I was child' needs article 'a'. For habitual past, use 'didn't use to' (negative of 'used to' is 'didn't use to'), not 'don't used to'. Ensure 'keeping things tidy' includes an object.

× Umm so my mother always shouted to me and my mother, uh, how could I say?

✓ Umm, so my mother always shouted at me and... how can I say it?

Use 'shouted at me' (correct preposition). Remove redundant 'and my mother'. 'How could I say?' should be 'how can I say it?' for present conversational phrase; adjust tense for intended meaning.

× Uh, luxury.

✓ Uh, luckily.

Single-word utterance 'luxury' is incorrect here; likely intended 'luckily' as a discourse marker. This is a vocabulary/word choice correction rather than article error, but fits as a sentence-level correction.

× I keep my desk tidy.

✓ I keep my desk tidy.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× It's because, uh, I want to focus on studying and working, so I try to keep my desk.

✓ It's because I want to focus on studying and working, so I try to keep my desk tidy.

Add 'tidy' at end to complete meaning. Remove filler comma. Sentence structure otherwise fine; ensure consistency by adding the object adjective.

× In my opinion keeping tidy is important thing but it's not necessary.

✓ In my opinion, keeping things tidy is important, but it's not necessary.

Add comma after 'opinion'. Use 'keeping things tidy' with object 'things'. Add article 'an' before 'important thing' or better rephrase to 'is important'. Insert comma before 'but'.

× It's because my boss is very smart P person but her desk isn't tidy.

✓ It's because my boss is a very smart person, but her desk isn't tidy.

Remove stray 'P'. Insert indefinite article 'a' before 'very smart person'. Add comma before 'but'.