Tidiness— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors, and give one specific reason or short example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and reduce hesitation. Use linking words like "although" or "generally" correctly.

例: Yes, I generally like to keep things tidy. Although sometimes I tidy quickly when I'm in a rush, I usually keep my room organized because it makes me feel calmer and healthier.

提案: Start with a direct answer then add a concise reason. Fix grammar (e.g., "a strict person" → "strict"); use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences and give one specific detail about the rules to be more vivid.

例: Yes, I did. My mother was strict and set clear rules about putting toys away and making the bed, so I grew up keeping my room tidy.

提案: Provide a clear, well-structured answer without hesitations. Correct the sentence about losing things—say "to avoid losing things"—and link the actions to the benefit using a linking phrase like "so that" or "which helps." Keep it to 2–3 sentences and be specific about your routine.

例: I clear my desk every evening and file papers in folders so that everything is easy to find. This routine helps me avoid losing important documents and stay focused while studying.

提案: Answer directly and avoid small grammar mistakes ("need" → "neat"). Use one clear reason and a concise example. Use linking words like "for example" correctly and make the example specific and fluent. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I believe being tidy is important because it reduces distractions and helps you stay organized. For example, when my desk is neat I can find documents quickly and work much more efficiently.

× It changed time to time, sometimes I tidy and clear my room like I'm in a rush, but generally I prefer tidiness because it's more healthy.

✓ It changes from time to time; sometimes I tidy and clear my room as if I'm in a rush, but generally I prefer tidiness because it's healthier.

The speaker describes habitual actions, so present simple 'changes' is required instead of past 'changed'. 'Time to time' should be 'from time to time.' 'Like I'm in a rush' is colloquial; 'as if' is more appropriate. 'More healthy' should be the comparative adverb/adjective 'healthier.' Use semicolon or sentence break for clarity.

× As a child, yes, because my mum is very strict person and she always had rules in our home which we need to follow, so I was always a tidy person.

✓ As a child, yes, because my mum is a very strict person and she always had rules in our home which we needed to follow, so I was always a tidy person.

The noun phrase needs the indefinite article 'a' before 'very strict person.' The clause refers to past habits so 'need' should be past 'needed.' Keep tense consistent for childhood reference.

× As a child, yes, because my mum is very strict person and she always had rules in our home which we need to follow, so I was always a tidy person.

✓ As a child, yes, because my mum was a very strict person and she always had rules in our home which we needed to follow, so I was always a tidy person.

The sentence refers to childhood, so the description of the mother should be in the past 'was.' Also change 'need' to past 'needed' for consistency. Use past tense throughout when speaking about past situations.

× Well, I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk every evening and putting books and papers into order and folders.

✓ Well, I keep my study space tidy by clearing my desk every evening and putting books and papers in order and into folders.

Use 'in order' (not 'into order') and 'into folders' for placing items inside folders. Prepositions must match the verb phrases: 'put in order' and 'put into folders.'

× I do this because, umm, this helps me to focus on losing, umm, things. Stops losing things.

✓ I do this because it helps me avoid losing things.

Original has awkward phrasing and sentence fragments. Combine ideas into one coherent sentence: 'helps me avoid losing things.' Avoid fragments like 'Stops losing things.' Remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× Yes, I think being tidy is a must because it helps you to stay organized and reduce distractions so you can concentrate better. For example when my desk is need and I can find documents quickly and work more efficiently.

✓ Yes, I think being tidy is a must because it helps you stay organized and reduce distractions so you can concentrate better. For example, when my desk is neat I can find documents quickly and work more efficiently.

Replace 'need' with the adjective 'neat.' Remove unnecessary 'to' after 'helps you.' Add a comma after 'For example.' 'Neat' correctly describes the desk; 'need' is incorrect form.